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十一、书面表达。（10分）
“德、智、体、美、劳”五育并举是我国对新时代青少年的要求。如何成为一名好学生？请根据提示谈谈你的看法。要求：包含所有要点，语句通顺，意思连贯，不少于 60 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
| ① Good habits |
| --- |
| ② Helping at home |
| ③ School study |
| ④ Doing sports |
| ⑤ Healthy diet |
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do?
“德、智、体、美、劳”五育并举是我国对新时代青少年的要求。如何成为一名好学生？请根据提示谈谈你的看法。要求：包含所有要点，语句通顺，意思连贯，不少于 60 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
| ① Good habits |
| --- |
| ② Helping at home |
| ③ School study |
| ④ Doing sports |
| ⑤ Healthy diet |
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do?
答案
参考例文：
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do? First, develop good habits. Keep our rooms tidy and go to bed early. Second, help at home. We can sweep the floor and wash our clothes. Third, work hard at school. Listen to teachers carefully and finish homework on time. Then, doing sports is also important. Sports make us healthy and strong. We can walk, jog or play ball games every day. And don't forget a healthy diet. Eat more fruit and vegetables, and less junk food. By following these, we can be good students and grow well.
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do? First, develop good habits. Keep our rooms tidy and go to bed early. Second, help at home. We can sweep the floor and wash our clothes. Third, work hard at school. Listen to teachers carefully and finish homework on time. Then, doing sports is also important. Sports make us healthy and strong. We can walk, jog or play ball games every day. And don't forget a healthy diet. Eat more fruit and vegetables, and less junk food. By following these, we can be good students and grow well.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先审题：明确写作主题是“如何成为一名好学生”，要求必须覆盖题干给出的5个核心要点，总词数不少于60词，开头已经给出不需要额外重写。接下来梳理写作思路：我们可以用表示先后顺序的过渡词来串联所有要点，让文章逻辑更清晰，每个要点补充1-2个贴合日常学习生活的具体行为，避免内容空洞，最后加上收尾句总结做法的意义，既保证所有要点都不遗漏，也能满足字数要求，同时语句会更连贯自然。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础要素：文体为说明类话题作文，人称统一使用第一人称we，全篇使用一般现在时，符合介绍日常行为准则的语境。
2. 搭建行文逻辑：使用First、Second、Third、Then、And这类顺序过渡词，依次对应5个给定要点：
① 对应Good habits：补充“保持房间整洁、早睡”的具体行为，让内容更具体；
② 对应Helping at home：补充“扫地、洗衣服”的居家劳动细节；
③ 对应School study：补充“认真听老师讲课、按时完成作业”的在校学习要求；
④ 对应Doing sports：补充“散步、慢跑、打球”的常见运动类型，说明运动能让我们健康强壮；
⑤ 对应Healthy diet：补充“多吃蔬果、少吃垃圾食品”的健康饮食准则。
3. 最后添加收尾句总结：做到以上这些我们就能成为好学生、健康成长，完成全文后核对要点全覆盖、无语法错误、词数达标即可。
【答案】
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do? First, develop good habits. Keep our rooms tidy and go to bed early. Second, help at home. We can sweep the floor and wash our clothes. Third, work hard at school. Listen to teachers carefully and finish homework on time. Then, doing sports is also important. Sports make us healthy and strong. We can walk, jog or play ball games every day. And don't forget a healthy diet. Eat more fruit and vegetables, and less junk food. By following these, we can be good students and grow well.
【知识点】
提纲作文写作，一般现在时，逻辑过渡词
【点评】
本题话题贴近学生日常学习生活，要点提示清晰明确，参考例文逻辑层次分明，用过渡词串联全部5个要求的要点，每个要点都补充了贴合生活的细节，内容充实语句通顺，完全符合字数和写作要求，没有语法错误，学生写作时要注意避免遗漏要点，善用过渡词让行文逻辑更清晰，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先审题：明确写作主题是“如何成为一名好学生”，要求必须覆盖题干给出的5个核心要点，总词数不少于60词，开头已经给出不需要额外重写。接下来梳理写作思路：我们可以用表示先后顺序的过渡词来串联所有要点，让文章逻辑更清晰，每个要点补充1-2个贴合日常学习生活的具体行为，避免内容空洞，最后加上收尾句总结做法的意义，既保证所有要点都不遗漏，也能满足字数要求，同时语句会更连贯自然。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础要素：文体为说明类话题作文，人称统一使用第一人称we，全篇使用一般现在时，符合介绍日常行为准则的语境。
2. 搭建行文逻辑：使用First、Second、Third、Then、And这类顺序过渡词，依次对应5个给定要点：
① 对应Good habits：补充“保持房间整洁、早睡”的具体行为，让内容更具体；
② 对应Helping at home：补充“扫地、洗衣服”的居家劳动细节；
③ 对应School study：补充“认真听老师讲课、按时完成作业”的在校学习要求；
④ 对应Doing sports：补充“散步、慢跑、打球”的常见运动类型，说明运动能让我们健康强壮；
⑤ 对应Healthy diet：补充“多吃蔬果、少吃垃圾食品”的健康饮食准则。
3. 最后添加收尾句总结：做到以上这些我们就能成为好学生、健康成长，完成全文后核对要点全覆盖、无语法错误、词数达标即可。
【答案】
Everyone wants to be a good student. What should we do? First, develop good habits. Keep our rooms tidy and go to bed early. Second, help at home. We can sweep the floor and wash our clothes. Third, work hard at school. Listen to teachers carefully and finish homework on time. Then, doing sports is also important. Sports make us healthy and strong. We can walk, jog or play ball games every day. And don't forget a healthy diet. Eat more fruit and vegetables, and less junk food. By following these, we can be good students and grow well.
【知识点】
提纲作文写作，一般现在时，逻辑过渡词
【点评】
本题话题贴近学生日常学习生活，要点提示清晰明确，参考例文逻辑层次分明，用过渡词串联全部5个要求的要点，每个要点都补充了贴合生活的细节，内容充实语句通顺，完全符合字数和写作要求，没有语法错误，学生写作时要注意避免遗漏要点，善用过渡词让行文逻辑更清晰，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
