六、书面表达。
假如现在是2092年,你是Kate,你生活在火星上,你的朋友Jim在地球上,他即将来火星生活。请你写一封100词左右的信,向他介绍你在火星上的生活。
【要点】1. 在火星上的总体感觉。
2. 在火星上的学习情况。
3. 在火星上的生活情况及生活设施。
4. 火星上的环境。
【要求】1. 信的开头和结尾已给出,但不计入总词数。
2. 信中须涉及上述几个方面的内容,可适当增加相关细节,使意思表达更加完整。
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars.
Yours,
Kate
假如现在是2092年,你是Kate,你生活在火星上,你的朋友Jim在地球上,他即将来火星生活。请你写一封100词左右的信,向他介绍你在火星上的生活。
【要点】1. 在火星上的总体感觉。
2. 在火星上的学习情况。
3. 在火星上的生活情况及生活设施。
4. 火星上的环境。
【要求】1. 信的开头和结尾已给出,但不计入总词数。
2. 信中须涉及上述几个方面的内容,可适当增加相关细节,使意思表达更加完整。
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars.
Yours,
Kate
答案
One possible version
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars. I think life on Mars is more comfortable and interesting than that on the Earth. We have online schools instead of real ones. We have lessons, do our homework, take exams and talk to teachers and classmates through the computer connected to the network at home. It's not so crowded here so we have more space to live in. Most of our housework is done by robots so that we can have more time for our hobbies. We have supermarkets in our neighbourhood. They make our life more convenient. Mars is very beautiful. There are green trees and pretty flowers everywhere, and there is no pollution here.
In a word, I think life on Mars is great.
Yours,
Kate
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars. I think life on Mars is more comfortable and interesting than that on the Earth. We have online schools instead of real ones. We have lessons, do our homework, take exams and talk to teachers and classmates through the computer connected to the network at home. It's not so crowded here so we have more space to live in. Most of our housework is done by robots so that we can have more time for our hobbies. We have supermarkets in our neighbourhood. They make our life more convenient. Mars is very beautiful. There are green trees and pretty flowers everywhere, and there is no pollution here.
In a word, I think life on Mars is great.
Yours,
Kate
解析
【分析】
这是一篇提示类应用文书信写作,解题时首先要明确写作要求:以第一人称叙事,主体时态使用一般现在时,背景设定为2092年的火星生活。首先对应题干给出的4个核心要点逐一梳理内容:第一步先承接已给出的开头,点明对火星生活的整体感受,完成第一个要点;第二步围绕学习场景展开,设计符合未来设定的线上网校相关内容,覆盖学习情况的要点;第三步延伸到日常生活,结合未来科技设定补充机器人做家务、社区配套超市等内容,对应生活情况和设施的要求;最后描写火星的生态状态,完成环境相关要点,最后衔接已给出的结尾,调整语句让逻辑连贯,控制总词数在100左右即可,不需要额外补充无关内容。
【解析】
1. 文体与人称时态确定:本文为写给朋友的书信,使用第一人称写作,整体以一般现在时作为核心时态,贴合介绍日常状态的语境。
2. 要点逐一落实:
① 总体感受:承接开头给出的“生活在火星很棒”的表述,补充说明火星生活比地球更舒适有趣,完成要点1。
② 学习情况:设定未来没有实体学校,全部为线上网校,学生在家通过联网电脑完成上课、写作业、考试、和师生互动的全部学习流程,覆盖要点2。
③ 生活与设施:说明火星人口密度低,居住空间更充足,机器人承担大部分家务,人们有更多时间发展爱好,社区周边配有超市让生活更便利,完成要点3。
④ 火星环境:描写火星随处可见绿植鲜花,完全没有污染,覆盖要点4。
3. 最后自然衔接给出的收尾句,通读调整语句流畅度,确保总词数符合要求,无语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars. I think life on Mars is more comfortable and interesting than that on the Earth. We have online schools instead of real ones. We have lessons, do our homework, take exams and talk to teachers and classmates through the computer connected to the network at home. It's not so crowded here so we have more space to live in. Most of our housework is done by robots so that we can have more time for our hobbies. We have supermarkets in our neighbourhood. They make our life more convenient. Mars is very beautiful. There are green trees and pretty flowers everywhere, and there is no pollution here.
In a word, I think life on Mars is great.
Yours,
Kate
【知识点】
英文书信写作,一般现在时运用,要点型书面表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部写作要点,内容按照整体感受、学习场景、生活设施、生态环境的顺序依次展开,逻辑条理清晰,用词贴合未来科幻的设定,语句流畅自然,没有语法错误,字数符合题目要求,补充的细节也让内容更生动真实,符合写给朋友介绍新生活的书信语境。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇提示类应用文书信写作,解题时首先要明确写作要求:以第一人称叙事,主体时态使用一般现在时,背景设定为2092年的火星生活。首先对应题干给出的4个核心要点逐一梳理内容:第一步先承接已给出的开头,点明对火星生活的整体感受,完成第一个要点;第二步围绕学习场景展开,设计符合未来设定的线上网校相关内容,覆盖学习情况的要点;第三步延伸到日常生活,结合未来科技设定补充机器人做家务、社区配套超市等内容,对应生活情况和设施的要求;最后描写火星的生态状态,完成环境相关要点,最后衔接已给出的结尾,调整语句让逻辑连贯,控制总词数在100左右即可,不需要额外补充无关内容。
【解析】
1. 文体与人称时态确定:本文为写给朋友的书信,使用第一人称写作,整体以一般现在时作为核心时态,贴合介绍日常状态的语境。
2. 要点逐一落实:
① 总体感受:承接开头给出的“生活在火星很棒”的表述,补充说明火星生活比地球更舒适有趣,完成要点1。
② 学习情况:设定未来没有实体学校,全部为线上网校,学生在家通过联网电脑完成上课、写作业、考试、和师生互动的全部学习流程,覆盖要点2。
③ 生活与设施:说明火星人口密度低,居住空间更充足,机器人承担大部分家务,人们有更多时间发展爱好,社区周边配有超市让生活更便利,完成要点3。
④ 火星环境:描写火星随处可见绿植鲜花,完全没有污染,覆盖要点4。
3. 最后自然衔接给出的收尾句,通读调整语句流畅度,确保总词数符合要求,无语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version
Dear Jim,
Now, I'm writing a letter to tell you something about my life on Mars. It's really wonderful to live on Mars. I think life on Mars is more comfortable and interesting than that on the Earth. We have online schools instead of real ones. We have lessons, do our homework, take exams and talk to teachers and classmates through the computer connected to the network at home. It's not so crowded here so we have more space to live in. Most of our housework is done by robots so that we can have more time for our hobbies. We have supermarkets in our neighbourhood. They make our life more convenient. Mars is very beautiful. There are green trees and pretty flowers everywhere, and there is no pollution here.
In a word, I think life on Mars is great.
Yours,
Kate
【知识点】
英文书信写作,一般现在时运用,要点型书面表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部写作要点,内容按照整体感受、学习场景、生活设施、生态环境的顺序依次展开,逻辑条理清晰,用词贴合未来科幻的设定,语句流畅自然,没有语法错误,字数符合题目要求,补充的细节也让内容更生动真实,符合写给朋友介绍新生活的书信语境。
【难度系数】
0.6
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