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假如你校英语俱乐部准备举办一场以介绍名人为主题的墙报展。请你根据下面的信息卡，写一篇英语短文，介绍白求恩大夫。
信息卡
姓名:Norman Bethune(诺尔曼·白求恩) 国籍:加拿大 职业:医生 爱好:拍照
主要事迹:救了很多中国人;开医院;发明医疗工具
要求:1.包含信息卡上的所有内容；2.适当拓展,如向英雄学习的感想、行动等；3.不能出现表明你身份的任何信息；4.80词以上。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题：As we know, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, is my hero.
中间 具体描写： was born in . and he was interested in . He is famous because .（高分句式1） During , . Also, . was .
结尾 表达看法：As a famous , helped a lot.（高分句式2） I will remember forever and I want to in the future.
佳作剖析
优秀范文
As we know¹, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, Norman Bethune is my hero.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and¹ he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression.² During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also¹, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
亮点评析
①As we know、and、Also 的使用使文章连接更流畅,提升了文章档次。
②本句使用了 because 引导的原因状语从句,清晰地阐述了白求恩在中国闻名的原因,强调了他所做出的巨大贡献,突出了人物的伟大之处。
信息卡
姓名:Norman Bethune(诺尔曼·白求恩) 国籍:加拿大 职业:医生 爱好:拍照
主要事迹:救了很多中国人;开医院;发明医疗工具
要求:1.包含信息卡上的所有内容；2.适当拓展,如向英雄学习的感想、行动等；3.不能出现表明你身份的任何信息；4.80词以上。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题：As we know, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, is my hero.
中间 具体描写： was born in . and he was interested in . He is famous because .（高分句式1） During , . Also, . was .
结尾 表达看法：As a famous , helped a lot.（高分句式2） I will remember forever and I want to in the future.
佳作剖析
优秀范文
As we know¹, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, Norman Bethune is my hero.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and¹ he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression.² During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also¹, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
亮点评析
①As we know、and、Also 的使用使文章连接更流畅,提升了文章档次。
②本句使用了 because 引导的原因状语从句,清晰地阐述了白求恩在中国闻名的原因,强调了他所做出的巨大贡献,突出了人物的伟大之处。
答案
As we know, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, Norman Bethune is my hero.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression. During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression. During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
解析
【分析】本题要求介绍名人白求恩，需结合给定的写作支架和信息卡内容完成短文。解题思路为：1. 开篇点题，直接点明白求恩是自己的英雄；2. 中间部分按支架依次填写白求恩的出生信息、职业、爱好，说明他闻名中国的原因，以及他在华的主要事迹（救中国人、开医院、发明医疗工具）；3. 结尾部分评价他的身份，表达对英雄的敬佩和未来的志向，确保包含所有要求内容，语言流畅连贯。
【解析】根据题目要求和信息卡，结合写作支架逐部分填充内容：1. 开头：填入“Norman Bethune”，完成开篇点题；2. 中间：依次填入“Norman Bethune”“Canada”“He was a doctor”“taking photos”“in China”“he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression”“his stay in China”“he saved a lot of Chinese people”“he opened hospitals and invented medical tools”“He”“a great doctor in the world”，补充完整人物生平与事迹；3. 结尾：填入“doctor and an international fighter”“he”“Chinese”“him”“be a good doctor like him”，完成结尾的评价与志向表达，形成符合要求的短文。
【答案】As we know, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, Norman Bethune is my hero.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression. During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
【知识点】英语人物介绍写作、一般过去时运用、原因状语从句
【点评】本文严格遵循题目要求，结合给定支架与信息卡内容，结构完整清晰，逻辑连贯，使用了恰当的连接词和原因状语从句提升语言质量，准确介绍了白求恩的事迹，表达了对英雄的敬佩，符合写作规范。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】根据题目要求和信息卡，结合写作支架逐部分填充内容：1. 开头：填入“Norman Bethune”，完成开篇点题；2. 中间：依次填入“Norman Bethune”“Canada”“He was a doctor”“taking photos”“in China”“he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression”“his stay in China”“he saved a lot of Chinese people”“he opened hospitals and invented medical tools”“He”“a great doctor in the world”，补充完整人物生平与事迹；3. 结尾：填入“doctor and an international fighter”“he”“Chinese”“him”“be a good doctor like him”，完成结尾的评价与志向表达，形成符合要求的短文。
【答案】As we know, most people have heroes in their hearts. For me, Norman Bethune is my hero.
Norman Bethune was born in Canada. He was a doctor and he was interested in taking photos. He is famous in China because he did so much for Chinese people in the War of Resistance Against Japanese Aggression. During his stay in China, he saved a lot of Chinese people. Also, he opened hospitals and invented medical tools. He was a great doctor in the world.
As a famous doctor and an international fighter, he helped Chinese a lot. I will remember him forever and I want to be a good doctor like him in the future.
【知识点】英语人物介绍写作、一般过去时运用、原因状语从句
【点评】本文严格遵循题目要求，结合给定支架与信息卡内容，结构完整清晰，逻辑连贯，使用了恰当的连接词和原因状语从句提升语言质量，准确介绍了白求恩的事迹，表达了对英雄的敬佩，符合写作规范。
【难度系数】0.6
