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朋友在我们的人生中发挥着重要作用，你的交友观是怎样的呢？在生活中你和你的朋友又是如何相处的呢？请根据你的实际情况写一篇关于你跟你的好友的文章。词数不少于 100。
[高分范文]
Friends are important in our life. I think friends are like mirrors. ¹ My good friends like to do the same things as me.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. ² So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away. ³
[名师点评]
本文作者通过好朋友的例子介绍了自己与朋友的相处之道，逻辑清晰、层次分明。
① 恰当地表达了朋友的重要性。
② 在论述过程中，作者巧妙地使用了“the same ... as ...”和“as ... as ...”短语，增强了文章的可读性。
③ 最后用 Last but not least 结尾，体现了作者较强的写作功底。
朋友在我们的人生中发挥着重要作用，你的交友观是怎样的呢？在生活中你和你的朋友又是如何相处的呢？请根据你的实际情况写一篇关于你跟你的好友的文章。词数不少于 100。
[高分范文]
Friends are important in our life. I think friends are like mirrors. ¹ My good friends like to do the same things as me.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. ² So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away. ³
[名师点评]
本文作者通过好朋友的例子介绍了自己与朋友的相处之道，逻辑清晰、层次分明。
① 恰当地表达了朋友的重要性。
② 在论述过程中，作者巧妙地使用了“the same ... as ...”和“as ... as ...”短语，增强了文章的可读性。
③ 最后用 Last but not least 结尾，体现了作者较强的写作功底。
答案
Friends are important in our life. I think friends are like mirrors. My good friends like to do the same things as me.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语写作题，要求围绕“交友观及与朋友的相处”写一篇不少于100词的文章。解题思路：1. 开篇点明朋友的重要性，用比喻引出自己的交友特点；2. 介绍具体好友的外貌、性格及共同爱好，体现志同道合；3. 阐述与朋友相处的具体做法，如关心朋友、保持联系；4. 运用高分短语提升语言表达，确保符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作采用“总-分”结构：首先总述朋友的重要性，将朋友比作镜子，说明好友与自己有相同爱好；接着分述具体好友Tina的情况：外貌（高个子、长直黑发）、性格（和自己一样外向），共同爱好（排球，都在校队）；最后阐述相处方式：对朋友友好，朋友不开心时逗他们，分开时保持联系。同时运用“the same...as...”“as...as...”“Last but not least”等短语，增强文章可读性，满足词数要求。
【答案】
Friends are important in our life. I think friends are like mirrors. My good friends like to do the same things as me.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away.
【知识点】
英语写作、常用短语运用、交友主题表达
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，逻辑清晰，层次分明，从点题到事例再到相处之道，结构完整；巧妙运用多个高分短语，语言丰富生动，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文，为学生提供了很好的写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语写作题，要求围绕“交友观及与朋友的相处”写一篇不少于100词的文章。解题思路：1. 开篇点明朋友的重要性，用比喻引出自己的交友特点；2. 介绍具体好友的外貌、性格及共同爱好，体现志同道合；3. 阐述与朋友相处的具体做法，如关心朋友、保持联系；4. 运用高分短语提升语言表达，确保符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作采用“总-分”结构：首先总述朋友的重要性，将朋友比作镜子，说明好友与自己有相同爱好；接着分述具体好友Tina的情况：外貌（高个子、长直黑发）、性格（和自己一样外向），共同爱好（排球，都在校队）；最后阐述相处方式：对朋友友好，朋友不开心时逗他们，分开时保持联系。同时运用“the same...as...”“as...as...”“Last but not least”等短语，增强文章可读性，满足词数要求。
【答案】
Friends are important in our life. I think friends are like mirrors. My good friends like to do the same things as me.
My best friend is Tina. She is a tall girl with long straight black hair. She is as outgoing as me. So we often take part in the same activities. Both of us are good at volleyball. But I can play volleyball a little better than her. We are both in the school volleyball team.
I am always friendly to my friends. When my friends are unhappy, I will try to make them laugh in different ways. Last but not least, try to keep in touch with your friends if you are far away.
【知识点】
英语写作、常用短语运用、交友主题表达
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，逻辑清晰，层次分明，从点题到事例再到相处之道，结构完整；巧妙运用多个高分短语，语言丰富生动，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文，为学生提供了很好的写作范例。
【难度系数】
0.5
素材积累 ＞＞
[开头句]
1. Narrow lanes are very common in China.
（背景）
2. I'm sorry to hear that you have got along badly with others these days.
（点题）
[中间句]
1. Its story started back in the Qing Dynasty.
（过渡）
2. Disagreements often happen when people are selfish and do not listen to each other.
（原因）
[结尾句]
We should get along well with others and enjoy happy interpersonal relationships in daily life.
（做法）
[名言警句]
1. A friend in need is a friend indeed.
患难见真情。
2. It's better to give than to receive.
给予比接受更好。
写作演练 ＞＞
和谐的邻里关系能够为我们的生活带来许多便利。请以“My good neighbour”为题，写一篇英文短文介绍一下你的邻居。
要求:词数80～100(已给出部分不计入总词数)。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主。2. 人称:以第三人称为主。3. 写作时,按照次序先后介绍个人信息、品格、理想等。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is
friend. He is
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
[开头句]
1. Narrow lanes are very common in China.
（背景）
2. I'm sorry to hear that you have got along badly with others these days.
（点题）
[中间句]
1. Its story started back in the Qing Dynasty.
（过渡）
2. Disagreements often happen when people are selfish and do not listen to each other.
（原因）
[结尾句]
We should get along well with others and enjoy happy interpersonal relationships in daily life.
（做法）
[名言警句]
1. A friend in need is a friend indeed.
患难见真情。
2. It's better to give than to receive.
给予比接受更好。
写作演练 ＞＞
和谐的邻里关系能够为我们的生活带来许多便利。请以“My good neighbour”为题，写一篇英文短文介绍一下你的邻居。
要求:词数80～100(已给出部分不计入总词数)。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主。2. 人称:以第三人称为主。3. 写作时,按照次序先后介绍个人信息、品格、理想等。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is
a college student. We live in the same building on the 13th floor. He is kind and helpful. He is always ready to help people solve all kinds of problems. He often shares his skills with people. He is good at using computers. Sometimes there was something wrong with my computer, so I asked him to help check it. In the future, he plans to become a policeman and help more people. Everyone in our community likes him. We are really lucky to live with a neighbour like him.
friend. He is
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
答案
One possible version：
My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is a college student. We live in the same building on the 13th floor. He is kind and helpful. He is always ready to help people solve all kinds of problems. He often shares his skills with people. He is good at using computers. Sometimes there was something wrong with my computer, so I asked him to help check it. In the future, he plans to become a policeman and help more people. Everyone in our community likes him. We are really lucky to live with a neighbour like him.
My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is a college student. We live in the same building on the 13th floor. He is kind and helpful. He is always ready to help people solve all kinds of problems. He often shares his skills with people. He is good at using computers. Sometimes there was something wrong with my computer, so I asked him to help check it. In the future, he plans to become a policeman and help more people. Everyone in our community likes him. We are really lucky to live with a neighbour like him.
解析
【分析】本次写作主题为“My good neighbour”，要求以一般现在时、第三人称介绍邻居，需按照个人信息、品格、理想的顺序展开，结合给定开头补充具体内容，使文章连贯、符合80-100词的要求，突出邻居的优点，结构清晰。
【解析】1. 承接已给开头，补充邻居的个人信息：说明他是大学生，居住在同一栋楼的13层；2. 描述品格：点明他善良乐于助人，分享电脑技能，举例帮“我”修电脑；3. 补充理想：说明他未来想当警察帮助更多人，最后表达社区大家都喜欢他，收尾点题。
【答案】My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is a college student. We live in the same building on the 13th floor. He is kind and helpful. He is always ready to help people solve all kinds of problems. He often shares his skills with people. He is good at using computers. Sometimes there was something wrong with my computer, so I asked him to help check it. In the future, he plans to become a policeman and help more people. Everyone in our community likes him. We are really lucky to live with a neighbour like him.
【知识点】英语写作、记叙文写作
【点评】本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，按个人信息、品格、理想的顺序行文，内容具体，符合时态和人称要求，词数达标，生动塑造了好邻居的形象，满足写作要求。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】1. 承接已给开头，补充邻居的个人信息：说明他是大学生，居住在同一栋楼的13层；2. 描述品格：点明他善良乐于助人，分享电脑技能，举例帮“我”修电脑；3. 补充理想：说明他未来想当警察帮助更多人，最后表达社区大家都喜欢他，收尾点题。
【答案】My good neighbour
I have a good neighbour called Peter. He is not only my neighbour but also my good friend. He is a college student. We live in the same building on the 13th floor. He is kind and helpful. He is always ready to help people solve all kinds of problems. He often shares his skills with people. He is good at using computers. Sometimes there was something wrong with my computer, so I asked him to help check it. In the future, he plans to become a policeman and help more people. Everyone in our community likes him. We are really lucky to live with a neighbour like him.
【知识点】英语写作、记叙文写作
【点评】本文紧扣主题，结构清晰，按个人信息、品格、理想的顺序行文，内容具体，符合时态和人称要求，词数达标，生动塑造了好邻居的形象，满足写作要求。
【难度系数】0.6
