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51. 同学们,我们已经进入初中生活三年了,我们的生活发生了哪些变化呢? 请以 "Changes in My Life" 为题,从下面两个选择中任选其一,根据写作要求,完成写作任务。
选择1:Your changes
△What were you like before?
△What problem did you have or meet? (subject, relationship...)
△How do you make your changes?
△Your feelings...
选择2:The living environment changes
△What was it like before? (traffic, environment...)
△Why has it changed? (technology...)
△Your feelings...
要求:(1)短文内容应包含题目要求所给的全部信息,可适当发挥;(2)语句通顺,意思连贯,书写工整;(3)词数:80左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three. Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.
选择1:Your changes
△What were you like before?
△What problem did you have or meet? (subject, relationship...)
△How do you make your changes?
△Your feelings...
选择2:The living environment changes
△What was it like before? (traffic, environment...)
△Why has it changed? (technology...)
△Your feelings...
要求:(1)短文内容应包含题目要求所给的全部信息,可适当发挥;(2)语句通顺,意思连贯,书写工整;(3)词数:80左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three. Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.
I used to be a shy girl who was afraid of speaking in class.I had trouble making friends and often felt lonely.To change this, I started by joining the school English club.I practised speaking with my classmates and asked teachers for help.Gradually, I became more confident.Now, I actively take part in group discussions and have made many friends.I feel happy and proud of my progress.Change is like a key that opens a new door to a brighter life.
答案
One possible version:
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three.Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.I used to be a shy girl who was afraid of speaking in class.I had trouble making friends and often felt lonely.To change this, I started by joining the school English club.I practised speaking with my classmates and asked teachers for help.Gradually, I became more confident.Now, I actively take part in group discussions and have made many friends.I feel happy and proud of my progress.Change is like a key that opens a new door to a brighter life.
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three.Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.I used to be a shy girl who was afraid of speaking in class.I had trouble making friends and often felt lonely.To change this, I started by joining the school English club.I practised speaking with my classmates and asked teachers for help.Gradually, I became more confident.Now, I actively take part in group discussions and have made many friends.I feel happy and proud of my progress.Change is like a key that opens a new door to a brighter life.
解析
【分析】首先确定写作选择1（自身变化），需紧扣题目要求的四个要点：1. 描述过去的状态（性格、遇到的问题）；2. 说明改变的具体行动；3. 阐述现在的变化；4. 表达自身感受。要承接给定开头，语句连贯，词数符合要求，适当补充细节让内容更充实。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 承接开头，点明自身变化的主题；2. 描述过去的状态：以前害羞，不敢在课堂发言，交友困难、常感孤独；3. 说明改变的方法：加入学校英语俱乐部，和同学练习交流，向老师求助；4. 描述现在的变化：变得自信，积极参与小组讨论，交了很多朋友；5. 表达感受：开心、为进步自豪，升华主题。
【答案】One possible version:
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three. Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.
I used to be a shy girl who was afraid of speaking in class. I had trouble making friends and often felt lonely. To change this, I started by joining the school English club. I practised speaking with my classmates and asked teachers for help. Gradually, I became more confident. Now, I actively take part in group discussions and have made many friends. I feel happy and proud of my progress. Change is like a key that opens a new door to a brighter life.
【知识点】英语话题写作、记叙文写作
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，覆盖了选择1的所有要点，内容连贯，情感真实，符合初中英语写作规范，词数合适，语言表达自然流畅。
【难度系数】0.7
【解析】写作步骤：1. 承接开头，点明自身变化的主题；2. 描述过去的状态：以前害羞，不敢在课堂发言，交友困难、常感孤独；3. 说明改变的方法：加入学校英语俱乐部，和同学练习交流，向老师求助；4. 描述现在的变化：变得自信，积极参与小组讨论，交了很多朋友；5. 表达感受：开心、为进步自豪，升华主题。
【答案】One possible version:
Changes in My Life
In the blink of an eye, I am in Junior Three. Looking back at the past years, my life has changed a lot.
I used to be a shy girl who was afraid of speaking in class. I had trouble making friends and often felt lonely. To change this, I started by joining the school English club. I practised speaking with my classmates and asked teachers for help. Gradually, I became more confident. Now, I actively take part in group discussions and have made many friends. I feel happy and proud of my progress. Change is like a key that opens a new door to a brighter life.
【知识点】英语话题写作、记叙文写作
【点评】本文紧扣题目要求，覆盖了选择1的所有要点，内容连贯，情感真实，符合初中英语写作规范，词数合适，语言表达自然流畅。
【难度系数】0.7
