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写作实战 答案（含基础版范文和进阶版范文）D3
假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言，题目是“我心目中的英雄”。请根据以下要点提示，介绍你心目中的英雄——“共和国勋章”获得者黄旭华。
(1)黄旭华于1926年出生在广东省。
(2)19岁那年，他考入大学，学习造船专业。
(3)从1958年起，为了工作他隐姓埋名，三十年未与父母见面。
(4)他默默无闻地为国家研制核潜艇。
(5)你认为……
要求:(1)词数80—100。(2)开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。(3)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
参考词汇:造船 shipbuilding 隐姓埋名 hide one’s identity 默默无闻 without fame 核潜艇 nuclear submarine
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
Thank you for listening!
假如你即将在学校英语兴趣小组的活动中发言，题目是“我心目中的英雄”。请根据以下要点提示，介绍你心目中的英雄——“共和国勋章”获得者黄旭华。
(1)黄旭华于1926年出生在广东省。
(2)19岁那年，他考入大学，学习造船专业。
(3)从1958年起，为了工作他隐姓埋名，三十年未与父母见面。
(4)他默默无闻地为国家研制核潜艇。
(5)你认为……
要求:(1)词数80—100。(2)开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。(3)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
参考词汇:造船 shipbuilding 隐姓埋名 hide one’s identity 默默无闻 without fame 核潜艇 nuclear submarine
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
Thank you for listening!
答案
主题写作专项
＞ 基础版范文
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country.
I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
Thank you for listening!
＞ 进阶版范文
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
Born in Guangdong Province in 1926, he was admitted to university to major in shipbuilding at the age of 19. He sacrificed a lot while he was working for our country. For example, from 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and wasn't reunited with his parents for 30 years. Never once did he complain; instead, he dedicated his life to the development of China's nuclear submarines, seeking no fame or reward.
In my opinion, he is a truly inspiring hero who devoted his whole life to science and our country. His selfless sacrifice and persistent efforts inspire me to study harder, so I can make my own contribution to society in the future.
Thank you for listening!
＞ 基础版范文
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country.
I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
Thank you for listening!
＞ 进阶版范文
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
Born in Guangdong Province in 1926, he was admitted to university to major in shipbuilding at the age of 19. He sacrificed a lot while he was working for our country. For example, from 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and wasn't reunited with his parents for 30 years. Never once did he complain; instead, he dedicated his life to the development of China's nuclear submarines, seeking no fame or reward.
In my opinion, he is a truly inspiring hero who devoted his whole life to science and our country. His selfless sacrifice and persistent efforts inspire me to study harder, so I can make my own contribution to society in the future.
Thank you for listening!
解析
【分析】
本题为英语命题作文，需围绕“我心目中的英雄”主题介绍黄旭华。解题思路：1. 明确需涵盖的5个要点（出生时间地点、求学经历、隐姓埋名30年、研制核潜艇、个人评价）；2. 运用参考词汇（hide one’s identity、shipbuilding、without fame、nuclear submarine），以正确时态（过去时叙述事迹，一般现在时表达评价）组织内容；3. 补充合理的个人看法，确保行文连贯、词数符合80-100要求，开头结尾已给出，只需完成中间部分。
【解析】
先介绍黄旭华的基本情况：He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. 再讲求学经历：At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. 接着说明他的奉献：From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country. 最后补充个人评价：I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
【答案】
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country.
I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
Thank you for listening!
【知识点】
英语命题写作、要点整合、英文时态运用
【点评】
本题围绕“我心目中的英雄”展开，要求介绍共和国勋章获得者黄旭华，既考查学生对人物信息的英文表达与整合能力，又引导学生树立正确的英雄观，行文需紧扣要点，语言连贯，符合词数要求，是常规的英语写作练习题。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语命题作文，需围绕“我心目中的英雄”主题介绍黄旭华。解题思路：1. 明确需涵盖的5个要点（出生时间地点、求学经历、隐姓埋名30年、研制核潜艇、个人评价）；2. 运用参考词汇（hide one’s identity、shipbuilding、without fame、nuclear submarine），以正确时态（过去时叙述事迹，一般现在时表达评价）组织内容；3. 补充合理的个人看法，确保行文连贯、词数符合80-100要求，开头结尾已给出，只需完成中间部分。
【解析】
先介绍黄旭华的基本情况：He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. 再讲求学经历：At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. 接着说明他的奉献：From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country. 最后补充个人评价：I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
【答案】
The Hero in My Heart
The hero in my heart is Huang Xuhua, a winner of the Medal of the Republic.
He was born in Guangdong Province in 1926. At the age of 19, he entered university to study shipbuilding. From 1958 on, he hid his identity for his work and didn't meet his parents for 30 years. Without fame, he worked hard to develop nuclear submarines for our country.
I think he is a great hero because he devoted his whole life to science and our country. His sacrifice and hard work inspire me to study harder and make a contribution to society.
Thank you for listening!
【知识点】
英语命题写作、要点整合、英文时态运用
【点评】
本题围绕“我心目中的英雄”展开，要求介绍共和国勋章获得者黄旭华，既考查学生对人物信息的英文表达与整合能力，又引导学生树立正确的英雄观，行文需紧扣要点，语言连贯，符合词数要求，是常规的英语写作练习题。
【难度系数】
0.5
