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优选词汇
身份
·scientist ·historian ·researcher ·chemist ·physicist ·biologist
·inventor ·thinker ·pioneer ·hero ·role model
成就
·invent ·discover ·explore ·do research in ·create ·succeed in
·invention ·develop ·exploration 图1 achievement ·make important discoveries
特质
·wise ·brave ·clever ·creative ·be full of courage
·wisdom ·great ·talented ·hard-working ·be interested in
看法
·admire ·admirable ·encourage ·inspiring ·inspiration ·brilliant
·play a big part in ·look up to
写作实例
科学家是伟大的,他们推动了社会的进步。请根据以下内容,用英文写一篇短文,介绍著名科学家屠呦呦,并谈谈你对她的看法。→审主题
(1)屠呦呦1930年出生在宁波,她因发现青蒿素而闻名;
(2)历经190次失败后,她在中草药中发现了能对抗疟疾的青蒿素,这种药已拯救了数百万人的生命;
(3)2015年获得诺贝尔生理学或医学奖;
(4)你认为……→审人称②:第一、三人称;审时态②:一般现在时 图2
参考词汇:草药herb 青蒿素qinghaosu 疟疾malaria 有效地effectively 对抗fight
诺贝尔生理学或医学奖Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
要求:(1)词数80左右;→审词数
(2)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题：Tu Youyou is a from China, and a lot of people admire her for .
中间 详细介绍屠呦呦：Born in , she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which .（高分句式1）Her research journey was . After 190 failures, she finally图3 . The medicine . In 2015, she became the first Chinese .（高分句式2）
结尾 表达对屠呦呦的看法：In my opinion, Tu Youyou is . Her perseverance . I deeply admire her and .
优秀范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.①
Born in Ningbo in 1930②, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria③, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship④. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring④ role model. Her perseverance④ in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work③. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
亮点评析
①首句直接点明屠呦呦的身份和被人敬佩的原因,开门见山。
②运用过去分词短语作状语,既合并了两个信息,又让句子开头更简洁新颖,避免了简单句的堆砌。
③使用定语从句和宾语从句,让句子逻辑更严谨。
④使用多个高级词汇,提升了表达的深度。
主题词网
优选词汇
身份
·scientist ·historian ·researcher ·chemist ·physicist ·biologist
·inventor ·thinker ·pioneer ·hero ·role model
成就
·invent ·discover ·explore ·do research in ·create ·succeed in
·invention ·develop ·exploration 图1 achievement ·make important discoveries
特质
·wise ·brave ·clever ·creative ·be full of courage
·wisdom ·great ·talented ·hard-working ·be interested in
看法
·admire ·admirable ·encourage ·inspiring ·inspiration ·brilliant
·play a big part in ·look up to
写作实例
科学家是伟大的,他们推动了社会的进步。请根据以下内容,用英文写一篇短文,介绍著名科学家屠呦呦,并谈谈你对她的看法。→审主题
(1)屠呦呦1930年出生在宁波,她因发现青蒿素而闻名;
(2)历经190次失败后,她在中草药中发现了能对抗疟疾的青蒿素,这种药已拯救了数百万人的生命;
(3)2015年获得诺贝尔生理学或医学奖;
(4)你认为……→审人称②:第一、三人称;审时态②:一般现在时 图2
参考词汇:草药herb 青蒿素qinghaosu 疟疾malaria 有效地effectively 对抗fight
诺贝尔生理学或医学奖Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
要求:(1)词数80左右;→审词数
(2)要点齐全,行文连贯,可适当发挥。
写作支架
开头 开篇点题：Tu Youyou is a from China, and a lot of people admire her for .
中间 详细介绍屠呦呦：Born in , she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which .（高分句式1）Her research journey was . After 190 failures, she finally图3 . The medicine . In 2015, she became the first Chinese .（高分句式2）
结尾 表达对屠呦呦的看法：In my opinion, Tu Youyou is . Her perseverance . I deeply admire her and .
优秀范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.①
Born in Ningbo in 1930②, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria③, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship④. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring④ role model. Her perseverance④ in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work③. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
亮点评析
①首句直接点明屠呦呦的身份和被人敬佩的原因,开门见山。
②运用过去分词短语作状语,既合并了两个信息,又让句子开头更简洁新颖,避免了简单句的堆砌。
③使用定语从句和宾语从句,让句子逻辑更严谨。
④使用多个高级词汇,提升了表达的深度。
答案
写作支架完整填空答案
1. well-known woman scientist
2. her great discovery
3. Ningbo in 1930
4. can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease
5. full of hardship
6. succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs
7. has saved millions of lives
8. to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
9. an inspiring role model
10. in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work
11. dream of being a scientist like her
完整参考范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.
Born in Ningbo in 1930, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring role model. Her perseverance in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
1. well-known woman scientist
2. her great discovery
3. Ningbo in 1930
4. can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease
5. full of hardship
6. succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs
7. has saved millions of lives
8. to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine
9. an inspiring role model
10. in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work
11. dream of being a scientist like her
完整参考范文
Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.
Born in Ningbo in 1930, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring role model. Her perseverance in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
解析
【分析】首先明确写作主题为介绍屠呦呦并表达个人看法，需先审清人称（第一、第三人称）、时态（一般现在时介绍现状，一般过去时叙述经历）、词数（80左右）及核心要点（出生信息、发现青蒿素的过程与意义、获奖情况、个人看法）。接着借助给定写作支架，按“开篇点题—中间详述—结尾谈看法”的结构展开，运用定语从句、分词短语作状语等句式提升表达，确保要点齐全、行文连贯。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开篇：用“Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery”点明身份与被敬佩的原因，符合支架要求。2. 中间：用过去分词短语“Born in Ningbo in 1930”合并出生信息；用定语从句“which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease”说明青蒿素的作用；依次介绍研究的艰辛（190次失败）、青蒿素拯救生命、获诺贝尔奖的成就，覆盖所有要点。3. 结尾：表达个人看法，称她为鼓舞人心的榜样，突出其坚持的精神对自己的启发，最后点明梦想，完成写作任务。
【答案】Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.
Born in Ningbo in 1930, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring role model. Her perseverance in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、定语从句运用、英语词汇搭配
【点评】该范文严格遵循写作要求，要点齐全，结构清晰，运用了分词短语作状语、定语从句等高级句式，词汇丰富恰当，符合80词左右的要求，精准完成了介绍屠呦呦并表达个人看法的任务。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开篇：用“Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery”点明身份与被敬佩的原因，符合支架要求。2. 中间：用过去分词短语“Born in Ningbo in 1930”合并出生信息；用定语从句“which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease”说明青蒿素的作用；依次介绍研究的艰辛（190次失败）、青蒿素拯救生命、获诺贝尔奖的成就，覆盖所有要点。3. 结尾：表达个人看法，称她为鼓舞人心的榜样，突出其坚持的精神对自己的启发，最后点明梦想，完成写作任务。
【答案】Tu Youyou is a well-known woman scientist from China, and a lot of people admire her for her great discovery.
Born in Ningbo in 1930, she is famous for discovering qinghaosu which can effectively fight against malaria, a very serious disease. Her research journey was full of hardship. After 190 failures, she finally succeeded in discovering qinghaosu in Chinese herbs. The medicine has saved millions of lives. In 2015, she became the first Chinese to win the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicine.
In my opinion, Tu Youyou is an inspiring role model. Her perseverance in the face of failures teaches us that success comes from hard work. I deeply admire her and dream of being a scientist like her.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、定语从句运用、英语词汇搭配
【点评】该范文严格遵循写作要求，要点齐全，结构清晰，运用了分词短语作状语、定语从句等高级句式，词汇丰富恰当，符合80词左右的要求，精准完成了介绍屠呦呦并表达个人看法的任务。
【难度系数】0.6
