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每个人心目中都有一个伟大的英雄或榜样，他（她）可能是你最爱的父亲或母亲，也可能是你最敬爱的老师，或是某个历史人物或社会名人。请你用英文写一篇短文介绍你心中的英雄或榜样，要点如下：
（1）介绍你心中的英雄或榜样的基本信息；
（2）介绍相关的事迹；
（3）谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由。
注意：（1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名和学生的真实姓名。
（2）语句连贯，词数80左右。
【巧列提纲】（以下
部分仅供参考，希望同学们可以多开动脑筋、发散思维）
思路点拨
介绍英雄或榜样的基本信息 请列点1. 2. ... Tips家庭背景、出生年月、出生地、爱好等
介绍英雄或榜样的事迹 请列点1. 2.
... Tips经历、贡献等
谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由 请列点1. 2. ... Tips勇气、责任心、勇于挑战等
【实战演练】
【写作评价】（评分原则与方法可参考本书最后一页）
分 项 自评分 互评分 老师评分
内 介绍英雄或榜样的基本信息（2分）
容 介绍相关的事迹（4分）
分 谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由（1分）
语言分（8分）
总分（15分）
（1）介绍你心中的英雄或榜样的基本信息；
（2）介绍相关的事迹；
（3）谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由。
注意：（1）不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出现真实校名和学生的真实姓名。
（2）语句连贯，词数80左右。
【巧列提纲】（以下
部分仅供参考，希望同学们可以多开动脑筋、发散思维）思路点拨
介绍英雄或榜样的基本信息 请列点1. 2. ... Tips家庭背景、出生年月、出生地、爱好等
介绍英雄或榜样的事迹 请列点1. 2.
... Tips经历、贡献等谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由 请列点1. 2. ... Tips勇气、责任心、勇于挑战等
【实战演练】
【写作评价】（评分原则与方法可参考本书最后一页）
分 项 自评分 互评分 老师评分
内 介绍英雄或榜样的基本信息（2分）
容 介绍相关的事迹（4分）
分 谈谈你钦佩他／她的理由（1分）
语言分（8分）
总分（15分）
答案
One possible version:
The hero in my heart is Ye Guangfu. He was born in Chengdu, Sichuan Province in 1980. When he was young, he was interested in space and dreamed of being a taikonaut.
Ye Guangfu became a pilot after graduating from college. In 2010, he became a taikonaut because of his perfect health and excellent grades. From October 2021 to April 2022, he and his teammates Wang Yaping and Zhai Zhigang stayed in space for 6 months, carrying out the Shenzhou-13 mission successfully.
I admire Ye Guangfu not only because he made much effort to make his dream come true, but also because he has made great contributions to our country.
The hero in my heart is Ye Guangfu. He was born in Chengdu, Sichuan Province in 1980. When he was young, he was interested in space and dreamed of being a taikonaut.
Ye Guangfu became a pilot after graduating from college. In 2010, he became a taikonaut because of his perfect health and excellent grades. From October 2021 to April 2022, he and his teammates Wang Yaping and Zhai Zhigang stayed in space for 6 months, carrying out the Shenzhou-13 mission successfully.
I admire Ye Guangfu not only because he made much effort to make his dream come true, but also because he has made great contributions to our country.
解析
【分析】
首先明确题目要求：用英文写80词左右的短文，介绍心中的英雄，需包含基本信息、相关事迹、钦佩理由三个要点。第一步，选定合适的英雄人物；第二步，梳理基本信息：出生年月、出生地、爱好与梦想；第三步，梳理核心事迹：职业发展经历、主要贡献；第四步，组织语言，确保语句连贯，不出现真实个人信息，符合英语表达规范。
【解析】
按照写作要点分步创作：1. 开篇介绍英雄基本信息，点明英雄身份、出生信息及早年梦想；2. 叙述核心事迹，包括职业转变、成为航天员的原因及主要太空任务；3. 结尾说明钦佩理由，结合努力与国家贡献展开。注意控制词数，用词准确，语句通顺。
【答案】
One possible version:
The hero in my heart is Ye Guangfu. He was born in Chengdu, Sichuan Province in 1980. When he was young, he was interested in space and dreamed of being a taikonaut.
Ye Guangfu became a pilot after graduating from college. In 2010, he became a taikonaut because of his perfect health and excellent grades. From October 2021 to April 2022, he and his teammates Wang Yaping and Zhai Zhigang stayed in space for 6 months, carrying out the Shenzhou-13 mission successfully.
I admire Ye Guangfu not only because he made much effort to make his dream come true, but also because he has made great contributions to our country.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；英语语句表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，要点齐全，涵盖英雄的基本信息、主要事迹及钦佩理由，语句连贯，用词恰当，词数符合要求，是一篇符合标准的英语短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确题目要求：用英文写80词左右的短文，介绍心中的英雄，需包含基本信息、相关事迹、钦佩理由三个要点。第一步，选定合适的英雄人物；第二步，梳理基本信息：出生年月、出生地、爱好与梦想；第三步，梳理核心事迹：职业发展经历、主要贡献；第四步，组织语言，确保语句连贯，不出现真实个人信息，符合英语表达规范。
【解析】
按照写作要点分步创作：1. 开篇介绍英雄基本信息，点明英雄身份、出生信息及早年梦想；2. 叙述核心事迹，包括职业转变、成为航天员的原因及主要太空任务；3. 结尾说明钦佩理由，结合努力与国家贡献展开。注意控制词数，用词准确，语句通顺。
【答案】
One possible version:
The hero in my heart is Ye Guangfu. He was born in Chengdu, Sichuan Province in 1980. When he was young, he was interested in space and dreamed of being a taikonaut.
Ye Guangfu became a pilot after graduating from college. In 2010, he became a taikonaut because of his perfect health and excellent grades. From October 2021 to April 2022, he and his teammates Wang Yaping and Zhai Zhigang stayed in space for 6 months, carrying out the Shenzhou-13 mission successfully.
I admire Ye Guangfu not only because he made much effort to make his dream come true, but also because he has made great contributions to our country.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作；英语语句表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，要点齐全，涵盖英雄的基本信息、主要事迹及钦佩理由，语句连贯，用词恰当，词数符合要求，是一篇符合标准的英语短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
