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假如你校英文校刊正在开展以“Travelling”为主题的征文活动。请你根据下面的要点提示，用英语写一篇短文投稿，谈谈令你难忘的一次旅行经历和你对旅行的看法。
【要点】1. Do you like travelling? Where have you been?
2. Which is your unforgettable experience? Why?
(When? What?...)
3. What do you think of travelling?
【注意】1. 语句通顺，条理清晰，适当发挥，书写规范。
2. 词数 90 左右，文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名等。
假如你校英文校刊正在开展以“Travelling”为主题的征文活动。请你根据下面的要点提示，用英语写一篇短文投稿，谈谈令你难忘的一次旅行经历和你对旅行的看法。
【要点】1. Do you like travelling? Where have you been?
2. Which is your unforgettable experience? Why?
(When? What?...)
3. What do you think of travelling?
【注意】1. 语句通顺，条理清晰，适当发挥，书写规范。
2. 词数 90 左右，文中不得出现真实姓名、校名和地名等。
One possible version
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest.
Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them.
Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
答案
One possible version
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要先梳理所有要求：主题是“Travelling”的英文征文，必须覆盖题干给出的3个指定要点，词数控制在90左右，不能出现真实姓名、校名、地名。解题思路分三步：第一，先直接回应第一个问题，明确表态自己喜欢旅行，简单列举几个自己去过的地方，开门见山切入主题；第二，挑选印象最深的一次旅行经历，补充清楚时间、具体游玩的事件，说明这次经历让人难忘的原因，补充细节让内容更饱满；第三，最后收尾升华，写出自己对旅行的正向看法，点明旅行的意义。写作过程中可以适当用连接词、亮点搭配和简单复合句提升文采，写完后核对要点是否全覆盖、有没有违规信息、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
本篇写作可以按照“引入-叙事-升华”的三段式结构完成：
步骤1：开篇点题，回应要点1：直接说明自己非常喜欢旅行，简要列举自己去过的北京、香港、纽约等多个城市，快速切入主题。
步骤2：主体部分回应要点2：选取最难忘的香港旅行经历，交代时间是去年夏天，详细描述游览迪士尼乐园、观看迪士尼人物游行、和角色合影、品尝当地美食的细节，点明游玩体验十分愉快，是非常难忘的回忆。
步骤3：结尾部分回应要点3：点明旅行的价值，说明旅行是很好的开阔思维、了解世界的方式，完成全文。
参考范文如下：
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
【答案】
One possible version
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
【知识点】
旅行主题写作、英语记叙文结构、连接词运用
【点评】
这篇范文完整覆盖了题干全部三个要求的要点，行文逻辑层层递进，从个人旅行喜好介绍，到具体难忘经历的细节叙事，再到旅行意义的观点升华，脉络非常清晰。文中用到了现在完成时、非限制性定语从句、couldn't stop doing等亮点表达，语言地道流畅，词数符合90左右的要求，没有出现任何违规的个人隐私信息，完全符合校刊征文的投稿要求。同学们完成同类写作题时，要优先保证所有提示要点全部覆盖，再适当补充细节、运用亮点搭配提升作文质量。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要先梳理所有要求：主题是“Travelling”的英文征文，必须覆盖题干给出的3个指定要点，词数控制在90左右，不能出现真实姓名、校名、地名。解题思路分三步：第一，先直接回应第一个问题，明确表态自己喜欢旅行，简单列举几个自己去过的地方，开门见山切入主题；第二，挑选印象最深的一次旅行经历，补充清楚时间、具体游玩的事件，说明这次经历让人难忘的原因，补充细节让内容更饱满；第三，最后收尾升华，写出自己对旅行的正向看法，点明旅行的意义。写作过程中可以适当用连接词、亮点搭配和简单复合句提升文采，写完后核对要点是否全覆盖、有没有违规信息、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
本篇写作可以按照“引入-叙事-升华”的三段式结构完成：
步骤1：开篇点题，回应要点1：直接说明自己非常喜欢旅行，简要列举自己去过的北京、香港、纽约等多个城市，快速切入主题。
步骤2：主体部分回应要点2：选取最难忘的香港旅行经历，交代时间是去年夏天，详细描述游览迪士尼乐园、观看迪士尼人物游行、和角色合影、品尝当地美食的细节，点明游玩体验十分愉快，是非常难忘的回忆。
步骤3：结尾部分回应要点3：点明旅行的价值，说明旅行是很好的开阔思维、了解世界的方式，完成全文。
参考范文如下：
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
【答案】
One possible version
I like travelling very much.
So far, I have travelled to Beijing, Hong Kong, New York and many other places. But my favourite place is Hong Kong, which is an international modern city with many beautiful places of interest. Last summer, we visited Hong Kong Disneyland. We watched a parade of Disney characters there and I couldn't stop taking photos with them. Besides, we tried some delicious local food. I had a good time there. What an unforgettable experience!
Travelling is really a good way to open our minds and learn more about the world.
【知识点】
旅行主题写作、英语记叙文结构、连接词运用
【点评】
这篇范文完整覆盖了题干全部三个要求的要点，行文逻辑层层递进，从个人旅行喜好介绍，到具体难忘经历的细节叙事，再到旅行意义的观点升华，脉络非常清晰。文中用到了现在完成时、非限制性定语从句、couldn't stop doing等亮点表达，语言地道流畅，词数符合90左右的要求，没有出现任何违规的个人隐私信息，完全符合校刊征文的投稿要求。同学们完成同类写作题时，要优先保证所有提示要点全部覆盖，再适当补充细节、运用亮点搭配提升作文质量。
【难度系数】
0.6
