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九、书面表达16分
假如你是李华，你的美国好友Cathy想了解你所在的城市里最有名的山的情况。请你根据要点提示，给她写一封邮件。要点如下：
1. 山上的风景；2. 山的历史；3. 有关活动等。
要求：1. 文中要包括以上所有提示信息；2. 内容可适当发挥，以保证内容的完整、丰富与流畅；3. 词数80～100，信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是李华，你的美国好友Cathy想了解你所在的城市里最有名的山的情况。请你根据要点提示，给她写一封邮件。要点如下：
1. 山上的风景；2. 山的历史；3. 有关活动等。
要求：1. 文中要包括以上所有提示信息；2. 内容可适当发挥，以保证内容的完整、丰富与流畅；3. 词数80～100，信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city.
It's a beautiful place with lots of green trees and colourful flowers. You can see a river flowing down the mountain, and the view from the top is amazing. This mountain is very old and has many stories. People say it was an important place for soldiers a long time ago. There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit. We can do many fun things on the mountain. Many people like to hike and take pictures.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city. It's a beautiful place with lots of green trees and colourful flowers. You can see a river flowing down the mountain, and the view from the top is amazing.
This mountain is very old and has many stories. People say it was an important place for soldiers a long time ago. There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit.
We can do many fun things on the mountain. Many people like to hike and take pictures.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇应用文,为电子邮件。②时态:时态为"一般现在时"。③提示:写作要点已给出,应注意不要遗漏信息提示中关于山上风景、山的历史和有关活动的介绍要点,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,可以通过简短的语句表达对Cathy询问的感谢,并概述你将介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,从风景、历史、活动几个方面详细介绍这座山的具体情况;第三步,书写结语,表达祝福。
[亮点词汇]
amazing令人惊叹的
[高分句型]
There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit. that引导定语从句,修饰先行词"buildings"
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city. It's a beautiful place with lots of green trees and colourful flowers. You can see a river flowing down the mountain, and the view from the top is amazing.
This mountain is very old and has many stories. People say it was an important place for soldiers a long time ago. There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit.
We can do many fun things on the mountain. Many people like to hike and take pictures.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇应用文,为电子邮件。②时态:时态为"一般现在时"。③提示:写作要点已给出,应注意不要遗漏信息提示中关于山上风景、山的历史和有关活动的介绍要点,适当添加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,可以通过简短的语句表达对Cathy询问的感谢,并概述你将介绍的内容;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,从风景、历史、活动几个方面详细介绍这座山的具体情况;第三步,书写结语,表达祝福。
[亮点词汇]
amazing令人惊叹的
[高分句型]
There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit. that引导定语从句,修饰先行词"buildings"
解析
【分析】
首先明确本题是英语应用文写作（电子邮件），写给好友Cathy，需使用一般现在时，必须覆盖三个核心要点：山上的风景、山的历史、相关活动。解题思路为：①承接给定开头，引出要介绍的山；②分三部分展开三个要点，适当添加细节丰富内容；③衔接给定结尾，完成邮件。需注意词数控制在80-100，语言符合好友间交流的自然语气，避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 承接开头：点明要介绍的山的基本特征，引出风景描述；
2. 分述要点：
风景：描述山上的绿树、鲜花、河流，补充山顶的美景；
历史：说明山的悠久历史，提及曾是士兵的重要场所，补充山上的老建筑；
活动：列举人们常做的徒步、拍照等活动；
3. 衔接给定结尾，完成邮件。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city. It's a beautiful place with lots of green trees and colourful flowers. You can see a river flowing down the mountain, and the view from the top is amazing.
This mountain is very old and has many stories. People say it was an important place for soldiers a long time ago. There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit.
We can do many fun things on the mountain. Many people like to hike and take pictures.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点式书面表达、一般现在时运用
【点评】
该范文严格遵循题目要求，覆盖所有提示要点，内容充实且细节恰当，语言自然流畅，运用了定语从句等句式提升表达效果，符合好友间邮件的交际语境，是此类书面表达的优秀范例，能帮助学生掌握要点整合写作的方法。
【难度系数】
0.4
首先明确本题是英语应用文写作（电子邮件），写给好友Cathy，需使用一般现在时，必须覆盖三个核心要点：山上的风景、山的历史、相关活动。解题思路为：①承接给定开头，引出要介绍的山；②分三部分展开三个要点，适当添加细节丰富内容；③衔接给定结尾，完成邮件。需注意词数控制在80-100，语言符合好友间交流的自然语气，避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 承接开头：点明要介绍的山的基本特征，引出风景描述；
2. 分述要点：
风景：描述山上的绿树、鲜花、河流，补充山顶的美景；
历史：说明山的悠久历史，提及曾是士兵的重要场所，补充山上的老建筑；
活动：列举人们常做的徒步、拍照等活动；
3. 衔接给定结尾，完成邮件。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Cathy,
I'm very glad to tell you something about the famous mountain in my city. It's a beautiful place with lots of green trees and colourful flowers. You can see a river flowing down the mountain, and the view from the top is amazing.
This mountain is very old and has many stories. People say it was an important place for soldiers a long time ago. There are some old buildings on the mountain that are really interesting to visit.
We can do many fun things on the mountain. Many people like to hike and take pictures.
That's all. With my best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点式书面表达、一般现在时运用
【点评】
该范文严格遵循题目要求，覆盖所有提示要点，内容充实且细节恰当，语言自然流畅，运用了定语从句等句式提升表达效果，符合好友间邮件的交际语境，是此类书面表达的优秀范例，能帮助学生掌握要点整合写作的方法。
【难度系数】
0.4
