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五、书面表达
大千世界，无奇不有。李华今天就从一本介绍动物的书中学到
了关于金鱼的一些知识。请根据所给提示帮他完成一篇读书笔记。
注意：
1. 笔记应包含表格中的所有要点，可作适当发挥；
2. 条理清晰，符合逻辑；
3. 词数70左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
There are many strange facts in the world.
大千世界，无奇不有。李华今天就从一本介绍动物的书中学到
了关于金鱼的一些知识。请根据所给提示帮他完成一篇读书笔记。
注意：
1. 笔记应包含表格中的所有要点，可作适当发挥；
2. 条理清晰，符合逻辑；
3. 词数70左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
There are many strange facts in the world.
Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know
something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water.
They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They
often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water.
They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They
often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
答案
One possible version:
There are many strange facts in the world. Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know
something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water.
They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They
often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
There are many strange facts in the world. Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know
something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water.
They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They
often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：这是一篇介绍金鱼的读书笔记，需要覆盖表格给出的全部要点，词数控制在70左右，给定开头不需要重写。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先承接给定的开头，自然引出“我今天从一本动物书籍里了解到金鱼的相关知识”的内容；第二步按照合理的逻辑顺序逐个把表格里的要点串联起来，还可以给有因果关系的要点加衔接词，比如“没有眼睑”和“睁着眼睡觉”之间加so体现因果，让行文更流畅；最后补充一两句简短的收尾问句，呼应开头“世界有很多奇特事实”的主题，写完后检查有没有遗漏所有要点，词数是否符合要求，语法有没有错误即可。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 衔接给定开头：在给出的开头后补充“Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know something about goldfish.”，自然引出介绍对象。
2. 依次呈现所有要点：
① 先介绍金鱼的睡眠环境：说明金鱼在水中生活、在水中睡觉，补充“They can't live without water.”让内容更合理；
② 接着介绍金鱼的睡眠时间：说明它们可以在白天或者晚上睡觉；
③ 之后用因果逻辑衔接两个关联要点：点明金鱼没有眼睑，因此它们是睁着眼睛睡觉的；
④ 最后介绍金鱼的特殊特性：它们待在黑暗的地方会褪去颜色。
3. 收尾补充两个反问句，呼应开头的“奇特事实”主题，让整篇笔记完整通顺，整体词数符合要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version:
There are many strange facts in the world. Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water. They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
【知识点】
英语短文写作，要点信息整合，逻辑连词运用
【点评】
本题属于基础类的提示类书面表达，所有核心内容都已经在表格中给出，只需要学生将要点用通顺的简单句串联，适当补充少量衔接内容就可以完成，难度较低。学生答题时要注意不要遗漏任何表格给出的要点，同时注意介词、名词单复数的正确使用，保证语句逻辑通顺即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：这是一篇介绍金鱼的读书笔记，需要覆盖表格给出的全部要点，词数控制在70左右，给定开头不需要重写。接下来梳理写作思路：第一步先承接给定的开头，自然引出“我今天从一本动物书籍里了解到金鱼的相关知识”的内容；第二步按照合理的逻辑顺序逐个把表格里的要点串联起来，还可以给有因果关系的要点加衔接词，比如“没有眼睑”和“睁着眼睡觉”之间加so体现因果，让行文更流畅；最后补充一两句简短的收尾问句，呼应开头“世界有很多奇特事实”的主题，写完后检查有没有遗漏所有要点，词数是否符合要求，语法有没有错误即可。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 衔接给定开头：在给出的开头后补充“Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know something about goldfish.”，自然引出介绍对象。
2. 依次呈现所有要点：
① 先介绍金鱼的睡眠环境：说明金鱼在水中生活、在水中睡觉，补充“They can't live without water.”让内容更合理；
② 接着介绍金鱼的睡眠时间：说明它们可以在白天或者晚上睡觉；
③ 之后用因果逻辑衔接两个关联要点：点明金鱼没有眼睑，因此它们是睁着眼睛睡觉的；
④ 最后介绍金鱼的特殊特性：它们待在黑暗的地方会褪去颜色。
3. 收尾补充两个反问句，呼应开头的“奇特事实”主题，让整篇笔记完整通顺，整体词数符合要求，没有语法错误。
【答案】
One possible version:
There are many strange facts in the world. Today I read a book about animals. From it, I know something about goldfish. They live in the water and sleep in the water. They can't live without water. They sleep in the daytime or at night. They have no eyelids, so they sleep with their eyes open. They often lose colours in a dark place.
Aren't they unusual animals? Do you think goldfish are interesting?
【知识点】
英语短文写作，要点信息整合，逻辑连词运用
【点评】
本题属于基础类的提示类书面表达，所有核心内容都已经在表格中给出，只需要学生将要点用通顺的简单句串联，适当补充少量衔接内容就可以完成，难度较低。学生答题时要注意不要遗漏任何表格给出的要点，同时注意介词、名词单复数的正确使用，保证语句逻辑通顺即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.7
