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写作实战 答案（含基础版范文和进阶版范文）D34
现在越来越多的人养宠物，学校举行征文比赛，邀请全体学生以“My Favourite Animal”为题向学校校报投稿，内容如以下思维导图。
注意：
1.补全题目，可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2.词数90左右；
3.不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
My Favourite Animal：
现在越来越多的人养宠物，学校举行征文比赛，邀请全体学生以“My Favourite Animal”为题向学校校报投稿，内容如以下思维导图。
注意：
1.补全题目，可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息；
2.词数90左右；
3.不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。
My Favourite Animal：
My Dog Lucky
答案
主题写作专项
基础版范文
My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him because he is loyal and always greets me warmly when I get home.
We live happily together. I take him for a walk every morning, and he listens to my stories patiently. When I feel sad, he stays quietly with me. Keeping Lucky teaches me responsibility—I feed him and clean his doghouse regularly.
From Lucky, I learn about love and loyalty. He makes my life full of happiness. I think true friendship between humans and animals is the most beautiful thing in the world.
进阶版范文
My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him very much because he is so loyal that he always greets me warmly as soon as I get home.
We live a happy life together. Not only do I take him for a walk every morning, but also he listens to my stories patiently. Whenever I feel sad or worried, he will stay quietly beside me to cheer me up. Looking after Lucky helps me learn responsibility. I have to feed him and clean his doghouse on time.
In a word, Lucky teaches me what love and loyalty mean. He fills my life with joy. I truly believe that the friendship between people and animals is one of the nicest things in the world.
基础版范文
My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him because he is loyal and always greets me warmly when I get home.
We live happily together. I take him for a walk every morning, and he listens to my stories patiently. When I feel sad, he stays quietly with me. Keeping Lucky teaches me responsibility—I feed him and clean his doghouse regularly.
From Lucky, I learn about love and loyalty. He makes my life full of happiness. I think true friendship between humans and animals is the most beautiful thing in the world.
进阶版范文
My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him very much because he is so loyal that he always greets me warmly as soon as I get home.
We live a happy life together. Not only do I take him for a walk every morning, but also he listens to my stories patiently. Whenever I feel sad or worried, he will stay quietly beside me to cheer me up. Looking after Lucky helps me learn responsibility. I have to feed him and clean his doghouse on time.
In a word, Lucky teaches me what love and loyalty mean. He fills my life with joy. I truly believe that the friendship between people and animals is one of the nicest things in the world.
解析
【分析】这是一道英语话题写作题，要求以“My Favourite Animal”为题，结合思维导图的三个核心问题（介绍动物及喜欢的原因、如何与动物相处、从养动物中获得的感悟）完成征文，需注意词数90左右、不透露个人信息、适当拓展内容。解题思路为：先确定具体的动物（如狗），再围绕三个要点组织内容，最后检查语言和词数是否符合要求。
【解析】1. 确定写作对象：选择常见且易展开的动物（如狗），给它起名字（如Lucky）；2. 介绍动物特征及喜欢的原因：描述外形（如金毛寻回犬，柔软的黄毛），说明喜欢的理由（忠诚、热情）；3. 阐述与动物相处的日常：如每天带它散步、倾听自己的心事、陪伴自己；4. 表达从养动物中获得的感悟：学会责任，懂得爱与忠诚，体会人与动物的友谊；5. 调整内容，确保词数约90，语言通顺，无个人信息。
【答案】My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him because he is loyal and always greets me warmly when I get home.
We live happily together. I take him for a walk every morning, and he listens to my stories patiently. When I feel sad, he stays quietly with me. Keeping Lucky teaches me responsibility—I feed him and clean his doghouse regularly.
From Lucky, I learn about love and loyalty. He makes my life full of happiness. I think true friendship between humans and animals is the most beautiful thing in the world.
【知识点】英语话题写作、记叙文写作、动物话题表达
【点评】该作文紧扣思维导图的三个核心要点，内容充实具体，情感真挚自然，语言通顺流畅，符合征文的词数和格式要求，是一篇优秀的话题写作范文。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】1. 确定写作对象：选择常见且易展开的动物（如狗），给它起名字（如Lucky）；2. 介绍动物特征及喜欢的原因：描述外形（如金毛寻回犬，柔软的黄毛），说明喜欢的理由（忠诚、热情）；3. 阐述与动物相处的日常：如每天带它散步、倾听自己的心事、陪伴自己；4. 表达从养动物中获得的感悟：学会责任，懂得爱与忠诚，体会人与动物的友谊；5. 调整内容，确保词数约90，语言通顺，无个人信息。
【答案】My Favourite Animal: My Dog Lucky
My favourite animal is my dog Lucky. He is a golden retriever with soft yellow fur. I like him because he is loyal and always greets me warmly when I get home.
We live happily together. I take him for a walk every morning, and he listens to my stories patiently. When I feel sad, he stays quietly with me. Keeping Lucky teaches me responsibility—I feed him and clean his doghouse regularly.
From Lucky, I learn about love and loyalty. He makes my life full of happiness. I think true friendship between humans and animals is the most beautiful thing in the world.
【知识点】英语话题写作、记叙文写作、动物话题表达
【点评】该作文紧扣思维导图的三个核心要点，内容充实具体，情感真挚自然，语言通顺流畅，符合征文的词数和格式要求，是一篇优秀的话题写作范文。
【难度系数】0.5
