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假如你是张军，你要参加学校英语角举办的题为“My best friend”的征文比赛，请根据提示信息用英语写一篇短文介绍你最好的朋友。
提示：1. What does he/she look like? 2. What's his/her personality? 3. What is his/her favourite hobby? 4. What would he/she like to be?
要求：1. 短文中必须包含所给要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数 80 左右，开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：说明文。2. 时态：以一般现在时为主。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend
提示：1. What does he/she look like? 2. What's his/her personality? 3. What is his/her favourite hobby? 4. What would he/she like to be?
要求：1. 短文中必须包含所给要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数 80 左右，开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：说明文。2. 时态：以一般现在时为主。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend
May.
May is tall and has straight hair. Both of us are friendly, but she is more outgoing than I am.
She studies very hard and is good at English and history. In her free time, she likes watching TV. She loves sports and wants to keep fit. She likes playing tennis best.
May is good with children. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up.
She is working hard to make her dream come true.
I think she can become an excellent teacher.
答案
One possible version:
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend May.
May is tall and has straight hair. Both of us are friendly, but she is more outgoing than I am.
She studies very hard and is good at English and history. In her free time, she likes watching TV. She loves sports and wants to keep fit. She likes playing tennis best.
May is good with children. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. She is working hard to make her dream come true. I think she can become an excellent teacher.
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend May.
May is tall and has straight hair. Both of us are friendly, but she is more outgoing than I am.
She studies very hard and is good at English and history. In her free time, she likes watching TV. She loves sports and wants to keep fit. She likes playing tennis best.
May is good with children. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. She is working hard to make her dream come true. I think she can become an excellent teacher.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道人物介绍类写作题，首先先梳理题目给出的所有要求和提示：首先明确需要覆盖外貌、性格、爱好、理想四个核心要点，同时结合给出的思维导图的四个模块搭建写作框架：第一步先开篇点明要介绍的好友身份，完成引入部分；第二步顺着框架描述好友的外形特征，补充对应的性格特点；第三步介绍好友的学习状态，延伸到她的日常兴趣爱好；最后说明好友待人的特点，引出她的职业理想，收尾给出自己对好友的评价。全程以一般现在时为主要时态，第三人称叙事，适当补充合理细节让内容连贯，控制词数符合80左右的要求，避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
我们按照写作提纲的顺序逐步完成内容创作：
1. 开篇引入：承接题干给出的开头句，直接点明要介绍的好友名字为May，完成第一个模块的内容。
2. 外貌性格描写：对应第二个模块“May is tall and ...”，补充外貌细节“has straight hair”，再补充性格特点，用简单的比较级说明她比我更外向，完成外形和性格两个要点的输出。
3. 学习爱好描写：对应第三个模块“She studies ...”，写明她学习十分努力，擅长英语和历史，再延伸介绍她的空闲爱好，说明她热爱运动，最喜欢打网球，想要保持健康，覆盖爱好相关的要点。
4. 理想与收尾：对应第四个模块“May is good with ... I think ...”，写明她很擅长和孩子相处，长大后想要成为一名老师，现在正为实现梦想努力，最后表达自己相信她能成为优秀教师的评价，全文内容衔接自然，符合所有写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend May.
May is tall and has straight hair. Both of us are friendly, but she is more outgoing than I am.
She studies very hard and is good at English and history. In her free time, she likes watching TV. She loves sports and wants to keep fit. She likes playing tennis best.
May is good with children. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. She is working hard to make her dream come true. I think she can become an excellent teacher.
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，一般现在时运用，提纲作文写作
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的所有核心要点，严格贴合给出的思维导图逻辑展开内容，行文流畅自然，用词贴合初中阶段的知识储备，少量比较级和常用固定短语的使用让表达更生动，词数符合要求，结构清晰，学生可以参考该框架替换对应信息，快速完成同类人物介绍写作。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道人物介绍类写作题，首先先梳理题目给出的所有要求和提示：首先明确需要覆盖外貌、性格、爱好、理想四个核心要点，同时结合给出的思维导图的四个模块搭建写作框架：第一步先开篇点明要介绍的好友身份，完成引入部分；第二步顺着框架描述好友的外形特征，补充对应的性格特点；第三步介绍好友的学习状态，延伸到她的日常兴趣爱好；最后说明好友待人的特点，引出她的职业理想，收尾给出自己对好友的评价。全程以一般现在时为主要时态，第三人称叙事，适当补充合理细节让内容连贯，控制词数符合80左右的要求，避免遗漏要点。
【解析】
我们按照写作提纲的顺序逐步完成内容创作：
1. 开篇引入：承接题干给出的开头句，直接点明要介绍的好友名字为May，完成第一个模块的内容。
2. 外貌性格描写：对应第二个模块“May is tall and ...”，补充外貌细节“has straight hair”，再补充性格特点，用简单的比较级说明她比我更外向，完成外形和性格两个要点的输出。
3. 学习爱好描写：对应第三个模块“She studies ...”，写明她学习十分努力，擅长英语和历史，再延伸介绍她的空闲爱好，说明她热爱运动，最喜欢打网球，想要保持健康，覆盖爱好相关的要点。
4. 理想与收尾：对应第四个模块“May is good with ... I think ...”，写明她很擅长和孩子相处，长大后想要成为一名老师，现在正为实现梦想努力，最后表达自己相信她能成为优秀教师的评价，全文内容衔接自然，符合所有写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My best friend
I'm Zhang Jun. I want to tell you something about my best friend May.
May is tall and has straight hair. Both of us are friendly, but she is more outgoing than I am.
She studies very hard and is good at English and history. In her free time, she likes watching TV. She loves sports and wants to keep fit. She likes playing tennis best.
May is good with children. She wants to be a teacher when she grows up. She is working hard to make her dream come true. I think she can become an excellent teacher.
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，一般现在时运用，提纲作文写作
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的所有核心要点，严格贴合给出的思维导图逻辑展开内容，行文流畅自然，用词贴合初中阶段的知识储备，少量比较级和常用固定短语的使用让表达更生动，词数符合要求，结构清晰，学生可以参考该框架替换对应信息，快速完成同类人物介绍写作。
【难度系数】
0.6
