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五、书面表达
为深入贯彻落实教育部关于加强中小学生作业、睡眠、手机、读物、体质“五项管理”工作要求，你的学校提出禁止将手机带入校园。为此校方组织了一次英语征文活动，征询学生们的意见。请根据以下提示写一篇英语短文投稿。
要点提示：
1. 表示赞同同学学校的做法；
2. 分析将手机带入校园的危害（至少两个方面）；
3. 建议同学们不要将手机带入校园等。
写作要求：
1. 词数90左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
2. 包含所有要点提示，可以适当发挥；
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。
参考词汇:agree with; should; follow school rules; be bad for; ask sb. not to do sth.
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones.
为深入贯彻落实教育部关于加强中小学生作业、睡眠、手机、读物、体质“五项管理”工作要求，你的学校提出禁止将手机带入校园。为此校方组织了一次英语征文活动，征询学生们的意见。请根据以下提示写一篇英语短文投稿。
要点提示：
1. 表示赞同同学学校的做法；
2. 分析将手机带入校园的危害（至少两个方面）；
3. 建议同学们不要将手机带入校园等。
写作要求：
1. 词数90左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；
2. 包含所有要点提示，可以适当发挥；
3. 文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。
参考词汇:agree with; should; follow school rules; be bad for; ask sb. not to do sth.
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones.
Although phones are useful, I agree with the school rule that we should not bring them to campus.
Firstly, using phones in class can distract us from listening to the teacher and doing our homework.
Secondly, spending too much time on phones is bad for our eyes and health.
We might even become addicted to games or social media.
So, I think it's better for us to follow this rule.
We can ask our parents not to give us phones for school.
Instead, we can read paper books or talk with classmates during breaks.
This will help us focus on studying and stay healthy.
答案
One possible version:
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones. Although phones are useful, I agree with the school rule that we should not bring them to campus.
Firstly, using phones in class can distract us from listening to the teacher and doing our homework. Secondly, spending too much time on phones is bad for our eyes and health. We might even become addicted to games or social media.
So, I think it's better for us to follow this rule. We can ask our parents not to give us phones for school. Instead, we can read paper books or talk with classmates during breaks. This will help us focus on studying and stay healthy.
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones. Although phones are useful, I agree with the school rule that we should not bring them to campus.
Firstly, using phones in class can distract us from listening to the teacher and doing our homework. Secondly, spending too much time on phones is bad for our eyes and health. We might even become addicted to games or social media.
So, I think it's better for us to follow this rule. We can ask our parents not to give us phones for school. Instead, we can read paper books or talk with classmates during breaks. This will help us focus on studying and stay healthy.
解析
【分析】首先，需紧扣征文主题，围绕学校禁止带手机进校园的要求写作：第一步，承接已给开头，明确表达赞同学校的做法；第二步，从两个不同方面分析将手机带入校园的危害，比如影响课堂学习注意力、损害视力健康；第三步，提出遵守校规、不带手机的建议，适当补充替代活动，确保包含所有要点，符合词数要求，语言通顺，无真实信息。
【解析】1. 承接开头，使用参考词汇agree with，明确表达赞同学校禁止带手机进校园的规定；2. 分析危害，选取课堂分心影响学习、长时间用手机损害视力两点，符合至少两个方面的要求；3. 提出建议，使用follow school rules、ask sb. not to do sth.等参考词汇，建议不带手机，用阅读、与同学交流等替代，逻辑清晰，符合写作要求。
【答案】One possible version:
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones. Although phones are useful, I agree with the school rule that we should not bring them to campus.
Firstly, using phones in class can distract us from listening to the teacher and doing our homework. Secondly, spending too much time on phones is bad for our eyes and health. We might even become addicted to games or social media.
So, I think it's better for us to follow this rule. We can ask our parents not to give us phones for school. Instead, we can read paper books or talk with classmates during breaks. This will help us focus on studying and stay healthy.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、观点表达
【点评】本文紧扣征文主题，要点齐全，逻辑连贯，准确运用参考词汇，语言通顺流畅，符合初中英语书面表达的各项要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】1. 承接开头，使用参考词汇agree with，明确表达赞同学校禁止带手机进校园的规定；2. 分析危害，选取课堂分心影响学习、长时间用手机损害视力两点，符合至少两个方面的要求；3. 提出建议，使用follow school rules、ask sb. not to do sth.等参考词汇，建议不带手机，用阅读、与同学交流等替代，逻辑清晰，符合写作要求。
【答案】One possible version:
As we know, mobile phones have become very important in our daily life. More and more middle school students have their own cell phones. Although phones are useful, I agree with the school rule that we should not bring them to campus.
Firstly, using phones in class can distract us from listening to the teacher and doing our homework. Secondly, spending too much time on phones is bad for our eyes and health. We might even become addicted to games or social media.
So, I think it's better for us to follow this rule. We can ask our parents not to give us phones for school. Instead, we can read paper books or talk with classmates during breaks. This will help us focus on studying and stay healthy.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、观点表达
【点评】本文紧扣征文主题，要点齐全，逻辑连贯，准确运用参考词汇，语言通顺流畅，符合初中英语书面表达的各项要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】0.6
