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五、书面表达
在世界历史文化长河中流传着许多家喻户晓的故事，请根据下列内容要点和大家分享《愚公移山》的故事。
内容要点: 1. 主要人物: 愚公 (the Foolish Old Man)、他的家人 、智叟 (the Wise Old Man)
2. 故事情节: 愚公想移走门前大山，他的家人和他一起努力，智叟说不可能，愚公一家坚持不懈，天神移走大山
3. 阅读感受: 永远不要放弃你的目标
注意事项: 1. 短文要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数80左右，短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved the Mountains.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
在世界历史文化长河中流传着许多家喻户晓的故事，请根据下列内容要点和大家分享《愚公移山》的故事。
内容要点: 1. 主要人物: 愚公 (the Foolish Old Man)、他的家人 、智叟 (the Wise Old Man)
2. 故事情节: 愚公想移走门前大山，他的家人和他一起努力，智叟说不可能，愚公一家坚持不懈，天神移走大山
3. 阅读感受: 永远不要放弃你的目标
注意事项: 1. 短文要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数80左右，短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved the Mountains.
Once upon a time, the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house away. His family joined him in this hard work. The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible. The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day. After years of hard work, two gods came and moved the mountains away.
This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
答案
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved
the Mountains.
Once upon a time, the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house
away. His family joined him in this hard work. The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible.
The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day. After years of hard work,
two gods came and moved the mountains away.
This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
(80 words)
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved
the Mountains.
Once upon a time, the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house
away. His family joined him in this hard work. The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible.
The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day. After years of hard work,
two gods came and moved the mountains away.
This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
(80 words)
解析
【分析】
首先，这是一篇记叙文类书面表达，需围绕《愚公移山》的指定要点展开，且已有固定开头结尾，只需填充核心内容。解题思路如下：
1. 开篇引入：用故事常用的“Once upon a time”引出愚公移山的起因，明确核心人物愚公的想法；
2. 推进情节：依次呈现家人的支持、智叟的质疑，以及愚公的坚持态度，确保覆盖所有给定情节要点；
3. 交代结果：说明愚公的坚持打动天神，最终大山被移走的结局；
4. 点明感悟：紧扣“永远不要放弃目标”的要求，提炼故事的人生启示。
同时需注意使用一般过去时（故事类文本常用时态），控制词数在80左右，保证语句通顺连贯。
【解析】
步骤1：搭建叙事框架，梳理逻辑顺序：故事起因→发展过程→最终结果→人生感悟。
步骤2：运用合适时态与短语组织语言：
用“Once upon a time”开启故事，描述愚公的初衷：“the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house away”；
表达家人的支持：“His family joined him in this hard work”（运用固定搭配join sb in sth）；
描述智叟的质疑：“The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible”；
体现愚公的坚持：“The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day”（运用条件状语从句，make it表示“成功”）；
交代故事结局：“After years of hard work, two gods came and moved the mountains away”；
点明感悟：“This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals”。
步骤3：检查内容是否覆盖所有要点，词数是否符合要求，语句是否通顺连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved
the Mountains.
Once upon a time, the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house
away. His family joined him in this hard work. The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible.
The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day. After years of hard work,
two gods came and moved the mountains away.
This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时运用
2. 记叙文写作
3. 固定短语搭配
【点评】
这篇范文完整覆盖了题目要求的所有内容要点，逻辑清晰，叙事流畅自然。运用了“join sb in sth”“keep trying”“make it”等实用短语，语言地道简洁，符合词数要求，同时准确传达了故事的核心寓意，是一篇规范的书面表达范例。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先，这是一篇记叙文类书面表达，需围绕《愚公移山》的指定要点展开，且已有固定开头结尾，只需填充核心内容。解题思路如下：
1. 开篇引入：用故事常用的“Once upon a time”引出愚公移山的起因，明确核心人物愚公的想法；
2. 推进情节：依次呈现家人的支持、智叟的质疑，以及愚公的坚持态度，确保覆盖所有给定情节要点；
3. 交代结果：说明愚公的坚持打动天神，最终大山被移走的结局；
4. 点明感悟：紧扣“永远不要放弃目标”的要求，提炼故事的人生启示。
同时需注意使用一般过去时（故事类文本常用时态），控制词数在80左右，保证语句通顺连贯。
【解析】
步骤1：搭建叙事框架，梳理逻辑顺序：故事起因→发展过程→最终结果→人生感悟。
步骤2：运用合适时态与短语组织语言：
用“Once upon a time”开启故事，描述愚公的初衷：“the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house away”；
表达家人的支持：“His family joined him in this hard work”（运用固定搭配join sb in sth）；
描述智叟的质疑：“The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible”；
体现愚公的坚持：“The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day”（运用条件状语从句，make it表示“成功”）；
交代故事结局：“After years of hard work, two gods came and moved the mountains away”；
点明感悟：“This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals”。
步骤3：检查内容是否覆盖所有要点，词数是否符合要求，语句是否通顺连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I feel honored to share with you the story of The Foolish Old Man Who Moved
the Mountains.
Once upon a time, the Foolish Old Man wanted to move the big mountains in front of his house
away. His family joined him in this hard work. The Wise Old Man passed by and said it was impossible.
The Foolish Old Man said if they kept trying, they would make it one day. After years of hard work,
two gods came and moved the mountains away.
This story teaches us an important life lesson: never give up on our goals.
That's all. Hope you enjoy it!
【知识点】
1. 一般过去时运用
2. 记叙文写作
3. 固定短语搭配
【点评】
这篇范文完整覆盖了题目要求的所有内容要点，逻辑清晰，叙事流畅自然。运用了“join sb in sth”“keep trying”“make it”等实用短语，语言地道简洁，符合词数要求，同时准确传达了故事的核心寓意，是一篇规范的书面表达范例。
【难度系数】
0.7
