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七、书面表达。（满分20分）
英文周报以“The moment I grew up”为题向中学生开展征文活动，请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容如下：
1. 你对成长的理解；
2. 一次让你成长的经历（例如：阅读、旅行、志愿服务等方面）；
3. 你的收获。
注意：
1. 90词左右；
2. 语句通顺，内容完整（照抄阅读语篇不得分）；
3. 文中不得出现与个人相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
The moment I grew up
英文周报以“The moment I grew up”为题向中学生开展征文活动，请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容如下：
1. 你对成长的理解；
2. 一次让你成长的经历（例如：阅读、旅行、志愿服务等方面）；
3. 你的收获。
注意：
1. 90词左右；
2. 语句通顺，内容完整（照抄阅读语篇不得分）；
3. 文中不得出现与个人相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
The moment I grew up
答案
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
解析
【分析】
写作时需紧扣题目要求，明确三个核心要点：一是阐述对成长的理解，二是选取一次能体现成长的真实经历，三是说明此次经历带来的收获。首先，选择贴近中学生生活的经历（如照顾生病的长辈）更易写出真情实感；其次，采用“总-分-总”结构：开头点明对成长的认知，中间叙述经历细节，结尾点明收获并点题；最后注意控制词数在90左右，避免使用复杂句式，不出现真实个人信息。
【解析】
1. 开头段：用简洁语句点明对成长的理解，如“Growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better”；
2. 中间段：叙述具体经历，交代时间（Last summer）、背景（grandma was ill, parents busy）及自己的行动（take medicine on time, prepare meals, chat）；
3. 结尾段：总结收获，点明此次经历让自己学会责任与关爱，呼应主题“The moment I grew up”；
4. 整体控制词数，确保语句通顺，符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、话题作文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣征文主题，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，通过真实的生活事例展现成长，语言简洁通顺，完美覆盖题目要求的三个要点，符合中学生的写作水平，是一篇优秀的投稿作品。
【难度系数】
0.6
写作时需紧扣题目要求，明确三个核心要点：一是阐述对成长的理解，二是选取一次能体现成长的真实经历，三是说明此次经历带来的收获。首先，选择贴近中学生生活的经历（如照顾生病的长辈）更易写出真情实感；其次，采用“总-分-总”结构：开头点明对成长的认知，中间叙述经历细节，结尾点明收获并点题；最后注意控制词数在90左右，避免使用复杂句式，不出现真实个人信息。
【解析】
1. 开头段：用简洁语句点明对成长的理解，如“Growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better”；
2. 中间段：叙述具体经历，交代时间（Last summer）、背景（grandma was ill, parents busy）及自己的行动（take medicine on time, prepare meals, chat）；
3. 结尾段：总结收获，点明此次经历让自己学会责任与关爱，呼应主题“The moment I grew up”；
4. 整体控制词数，确保语句通顺，符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、话题作文写作
【点评】
本文紧扣征文主题，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，通过真实的生活事例展现成长，语言简洁通顺，完美覆盖题目要求的三个要点，符合中学生的写作水平，是一篇优秀的投稿作品。
【难度系数】
0.6
