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Ⅲ. 书面表达
假如你是李华，你校网站正在开展以“助人为乐”为主题的英文征稿活动。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，分享你帮助他人的经历以及感受。
(1) 去年暑假，你和同学王立成为好朋友。
(2) 除了体育之外，王立喜欢学校的其他各门学科。
(3) 因为王立不擅长运动，所以他总是不能参加班级活动。
(4) 那时，你帮助王立并鼓励他加入体育俱乐部。
(5) 王立学会打排球后，也变得越来越健康了。
(6) 你感到……
参考词汇：除了体育之外 except PE
要求：
(1) 词数：60 — 80。
(2) 题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。
(3) 要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help others. Last summer,
假如你是李华，你校网站正在开展以“助人为乐”为主题的英文征稿活动。请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，分享你帮助他人的经历以及感受。
(1) 去年暑假，你和同学王立成为好朋友。
(2) 除了体育之外，王立喜欢学校的其他各门学科。
(3) 因为王立不擅长运动，所以他总是不能参加班级活动。
(4) 那时，你帮助王立并鼓励他加入体育俱乐部。
(5) 王立学会打排球后，也变得越来越健康了。
(6) 你感到……
参考词汇：除了体育之外 except PE
要求：
(1) 词数：60 — 80。
(2) 题目和开头已给出，不计入总词数。
(3) 要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help others. Last summer,
答案
(One possible version)
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help
others. Last summer, I made friends with my classmate,
Wang Li. He loved all kinds of subjects except PE.
Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in
the activities in our class. At that time, I thought he
needed some help, so I encouraged him to join a sports
club. When I knew he was sad, I offered to help him.
We join the sports club together. Soon, he can play
volleyball very well and becomes healthier and healthier.
I feel proud of helping others and it can make me
happy. I love to see the smiles on their faces.
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help
others. Last summer, I made friends with my classmate,
Wang Li. He loved all kinds of subjects except PE.
Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in
the activities in our class. At that time, I thought he
needed some help, so I encouraged him to join a sports
club. When I knew he was sad, I offered to help him.
We join the sports club together. Soon, he can play
volleyball very well and becomes healthier and healthier.
I feel proud of helping others and it can make me
happy. I love to see the smiles on their faces.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇给定明确要点的主题征文写作，解题时首先要梳理所有要求必须覆盖的6个内容要点，避免遗漏。按照时间先后逻辑推进内容即可：第一步承接题干给出的开头里的last summer，交代自己和王立成为好朋友的背景；第二步介绍王立的学习特点，点明他除了体育之外其他学科都喜欢；第三步说明他不擅长运动、无法参与班级活动的困境；第四步写自己主动帮助他、鼓励他加入体育俱乐部的行动；第五步交代后续正向结果：王立学会打排球，身体越来越健康；最后收尾抒发自己帮助他人的真实感受，同时控制总词数在60-80区间，注意时态和行文连贯性，贴合“助人为乐”的主题即可。
【解析】
写作可按以下步骤完成：
1. 承接已给出的开篇内容，首先交代核心人物背景：Last summer, I made friends with my classmate, Wang Li.
2. 按顺序介绍人物特征与困境：He loved all kinds of subjects except PE. Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in the activities in our class.
3. 叙述自己的助人行动：At that time, I offered to help him and encouraged him to join a sports club.
4. 交代后续的正向变化：We practiced together in the club, soon Wang Li could play volleyball very well and became healthier and healthier.
5. 最后贴合主题抒发感受：I feel proud of helping others, and it always brings me great happiness to see others make progress.
全程注意用一般过去时叙述过往经历，用一般现在时表达当下感受，调整语句让行文连贯，确保所有要点无遗漏，词数符合要求即可。
【答案】
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help others. Last summer, I made friends with my classmate, Wang Li. He loved all kinds of subjects except PE. Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in the activities in our class. At that time, I thought he needed some help, so I encouraged him to join a sports club. When I knew he was sad, I offered to help him. We join the sports club together. Soon, he can play volleyball very well and becomes healthier and healthier. I feel proud of helping others and it can make me happy. I love to see the smiles on their faces.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作 一般过去时运用 主题征文写作
【点评】
本题是初中阶段基础的提示类书面表达，所有核心内容都给出了明确提示，不需要学生额外构思复杂情节，只需要将零散的中文要点用通顺的英文串联，注意时态统一、逻辑衔接自然，规避基础语法错误，就能拿到不错的分数，能够很好地锻炼学生整合信息、输出连贯短文的能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇给定明确要点的主题征文写作，解题时首先要梳理所有要求必须覆盖的6个内容要点，避免遗漏。按照时间先后逻辑推进内容即可：第一步承接题干给出的开头里的last summer，交代自己和王立成为好朋友的背景；第二步介绍王立的学习特点，点明他除了体育之外其他学科都喜欢；第三步说明他不擅长运动、无法参与班级活动的困境；第四步写自己主动帮助他、鼓励他加入体育俱乐部的行动；第五步交代后续正向结果：王立学会打排球，身体越来越健康；最后收尾抒发自己帮助他人的真实感受，同时控制总词数在60-80区间，注意时态和行文连贯性，贴合“助人为乐”的主题即可。
【解析】
写作可按以下步骤完成：
1. 承接已给出的开篇内容，首先交代核心人物背景：Last summer, I made friends with my classmate, Wang Li.
2. 按顺序介绍人物特征与困境：He loved all kinds of subjects except PE. Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in the activities in our class.
3. 叙述自己的助人行动：At that time, I offered to help him and encouraged him to join a sports club.
4. 交代后续的正向变化：We practiced together in the club, soon Wang Li could play volleyball very well and became healthier and healthier.
5. 最后贴合主题抒发感受：I feel proud of helping others, and it always brings me great happiness to see others make progress.
全程注意用一般过去时叙述过往经历，用一般现在时表达当下感受，调整语句让行文连贯，确保所有要点无遗漏，词数符合要求即可。
【答案】
Happiness in helping others
I can always get a feeling of happiness when I help others. Last summer, I made friends with my classmate, Wang Li. He loved all kinds of subjects except PE. Because he wasn't good at sports, he couldn't take part in the activities in our class. At that time, I thought he needed some help, so I encouraged him to join a sports club. When I knew he was sad, I offered to help him. We join the sports club together. Soon, he can play volleyball very well and becomes healthier and healthier. I feel proud of helping others and it can make me happy. I love to see the smiles on their faces.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作 一般过去时运用 主题征文写作
【点评】
本题是初中阶段基础的提示类书面表达，所有核心内容都给出了明确提示，不需要学生额外构思复杂情节，只需要将零散的中文要点用通顺的英文串联，注意时态统一、逻辑衔接自然，规避基础语法错误，就能拿到不错的分数，能够很好地锻炼学生整合信息、输出连贯短文的能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
