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七、书面表达。
家是一盏灯，家是一个屋檐，家是一张柔软的床，家是幸福的港湾！在你的家里，一定会有你最喜欢的一个地方。请你结合以下问题，写一篇英语小短文：
1. Which place in your home do you like best?
2. Why do you like it?
3. What's in it?
4. What do you usually do there?
要求：
1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
2. 要点齐全，适当发挥，语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚；
3. 字体规范，卷面整洁，词数 80 左右。
家是一盏灯，家是一个屋檐，家是一张柔软的床，家是幸福的港湾！在你的家里，一定会有你最喜欢的一个地方。请你结合以下问题，写一篇英语小短文：
1. Which place in your home do you like best?
2. Why do you like it?
3. What's in it?
4. What do you usually do there?
要求：
1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
2. 要点齐全，适当发挥，语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚；
3. 字体规范，卷面整洁，词数 80 左右。
答案
One possible version:
In my house, the study is my favourite. Do you know why?
I like spending my free time there because there are many books and a computer in my study. I love reading books there. These books are just like my good friends. I learn a lot from them. Every day after I come back home from school, I do my homework there. After that I often learn English, Math and Physics on the Internet. Oh, there is also a guitar in my study. When I'm tired, I can play the guitar for a while to make me relaxed.
The study is really my favourite place.
In my house, the study is my favourite. Do you know why?
I like spending my free time there because there are many books and a computer in my study. I love reading books there. These books are just like my good friends. I learn a lot from them. Every day after I come back home from school, I do my homework there. After that I often learn English, Math and Physics on the Internet. Oh, there is also a guitar in my study. When I'm tired, I can play the guitar for a while to make me relaxed.
The study is really my favourite place.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要先梳理题干给出的4个必填要点，确保写作时没有遗漏。第一步先选一个容易展开描述的家中场所，比如书房就很容易填充内容；第二步按照逻辑顺序依次回应问题：首先开篇直接点明自己最喜欢的家中场所，回答第一个问题；接着介绍该场所内的陈设，对应第三个问题，同时结合这些陈设说明自己喜爱这个地方的理由，对应第二个问题；之后列举自己平时在这个场所里的日常活动，回答第四个问题；最后收尾点题，强化对这个场所的喜爱，全程注意不要出现真实姓名、校名，控制词数在80左右，保证语法正确、语句通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：确定文体为介绍类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态以一般现在时为主，严格遵守题干的内容、词数、信息保密要求。
2. 搭建写作框架：
开头：开门见山直接点明自己家中最喜欢的地方是书房，引出主题。
主体部分：先介绍书房内的书籍、电脑、吉他等物品，说明这些物品能满足自己阅读、学习、休闲的需求，解释自己喜爱书房的原因，再依次描述自己放学回家后在书房写作业、阅读、线上学习、疲惫时弹吉他放松的日常活动，覆盖全部4个题干要点。
结尾：再次点题，表达自己对书房的喜爱，收束全文。
3. 润色调整：使用简单的连接词串联内容，修正语法错误，调整语句长度，把总词数控制在要求范围内，规避所有真实个人敏感信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
In my house, the study is my favourite. Do you know why?
I like spending my free time there because there are many books and a computer in my study. I love reading books there. These books are just like my good friends. I learn a lot from them. Every day after I come back home from school, I do my homework there. After that I often learn English, Math and Physics on the Internet. Oh, there is also a guitar in my study. When I'm tired, I can play the guitar for a while to make me relaxed.
The study is really my favourite place.
【知识点】
要点类英语写作，一般现在时应用，家庭场景话题表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部四个写作要点，结构完整逻辑连贯，从开篇点题到中间细节描述再到结尾抒情，层次非常清晰，用词准确地道，补充的细节让内容更生动，词数符合题干80左右的要求，也没有出现违规的真实个人信息，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文，也给同类话题写作提供了清晰的思路参考。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要先梳理题干给出的4个必填要点，确保写作时没有遗漏。第一步先选一个容易展开描述的家中场所，比如书房就很容易填充内容；第二步按照逻辑顺序依次回应问题：首先开篇直接点明自己最喜欢的家中场所，回答第一个问题；接着介绍该场所内的陈设，对应第三个问题，同时结合这些陈设说明自己喜爱这个地方的理由，对应第二个问题；之后列举自己平时在这个场所里的日常活动，回答第四个问题；最后收尾点题，强化对这个场所的喜爱，全程注意不要出现真实姓名、校名，控制词数在80左右，保证语法正确、语句通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：确定文体为介绍类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态以一般现在时为主，严格遵守题干的内容、词数、信息保密要求。
2. 搭建写作框架：
开头：开门见山直接点明自己家中最喜欢的地方是书房，引出主题。
主体部分：先介绍书房内的书籍、电脑、吉他等物品，说明这些物品能满足自己阅读、学习、休闲的需求，解释自己喜爱书房的原因，再依次描述自己放学回家后在书房写作业、阅读、线上学习、疲惫时弹吉他放松的日常活动，覆盖全部4个题干要点。
结尾：再次点题，表达自己对书房的喜爱，收束全文。
3. 润色调整：使用简单的连接词串联内容，修正语法错误，调整语句长度，把总词数控制在要求范围内，规避所有真实个人敏感信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
In my house, the study is my favourite. Do you know why?
I like spending my free time there because there are many books and a computer in my study. I love reading books there. These books are just like my good friends. I learn a lot from them. Every day after I come back home from school, I do my homework there. After that I often learn English, Math and Physics on the Internet. Oh, there is also a guitar in my study. When I'm tired, I can play the guitar for a while to make me relaxed.
The study is really my favourite place.
【知识点】
要点类英语写作，一般现在时应用，家庭场景话题表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部四个写作要点，结构完整逻辑连贯，从开篇点题到中间细节描述再到结尾抒情，层次非常清晰，用词准确地道，补充的细节让内容更生动，词数符合题干80左右的要求，也没有出现违规的真实个人信息，是一篇符合要求的优秀参考范文，也给同类话题写作提供了清晰的思路参考。
【难度系数】
0.7
