1. 写作任务
动物是人类的朋友,我们应该善待动物,与动物和谐相处。凶猛矫健的东北虎、憨态可掬的大熊猫、活泼可爱的宠物狗……每一种动物对生态系统都至关重要。生物多样性是人类赖以生存的条件,是生态安全的重要保障。假如你是李华,请根据以下提示,以"My Favourite Animal"为题,写一篇英语短文,向校报英文专栏投稿。
提示:(1)你最喜欢什么动物?
(2)介绍它的外貌和生活习性。
(3)说说你喜欢它的理由。
要求:(1)不少于 60 词;
(2)参考词汇仅供参考;
(3)文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
WORD BANK
protect v. 保护
lovely adj. 可爱的
wild animal 野生动物
2. 思路点拨
第一步:审题 体裁:
第二步:列提纲

第三步:句子积累
(1)Of
在所有的动物中,我最喜欢大熊猫。
(2)They have round faces,
它们有圆圆的脸,又大又黑的眼睛和肥胖的身体。
(3)Pandas like
大熊猫喜欢吃竹子。
(4)They
它们对人很友好。
3. 范文品鉴
My Favourite Animal
As we all know, there are many kinds of animals around us. Some are cute. Some are scary. But they are all our good friends. Of all the animals, I like pandas best. (引入话题)
Pandas are black and white. They have round faces, big black eyes and fat bodies. They are one of the most lovely animals in the world. They mainly live in China's Sichuan, Shaanxi and Gansu Provinces. Pandas like eating bamboo. They spend half of their day eating and most of the rest time sleeping. (基本情况)
Pandas are big and lovely. They are friendly to people. When I go to the zoo, I always look at them first. Now I can't wait to see them again. (和谐期待)
类文训练
假如你是上海动物园的志愿讲解员,请你根据以下信息提示,写一篇英语讲解词来介绍动物明星多多。

要求:1. 讲解词须包含所有信息提示,可适当发挥;
2. 语言表达要准确,语句通顺,意思连贯;
3. 不少于 60 词,讲解词的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.
Thanks for your listening!
动物是人类的朋友,我们应该善待动物,与动物和谐相处。凶猛矫健的东北虎、憨态可掬的大熊猫、活泼可爱的宠物狗……每一种动物对生态系统都至关重要。生物多样性是人类赖以生存的条件,是生态安全的重要保障。假如你是李华,请根据以下提示,以"My Favourite Animal"为题,写一篇英语短文,向校报英文专栏投稿。
提示:(1)你最喜欢什么动物?
(2)介绍它的外貌和生活习性。
(3)说说你喜欢它的理由。
要求:(1)不少于 60 词;
(2)参考词汇仅供参考;
(3)文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
WORD BANK
protect v. 保护
lovely adj. 可爱的
wild animal 野生动物
2. 思路点拨
第一步:审题 体裁:
记叙文
人称:第三人称
时态:一般现在时
第二步:列提纲
第三步:句子积累
(1)Of
all
the
animals
, I like pandas best.在所有的动物中,我最喜欢大熊猫。
(2)They have round faces,
big
black
eyes
and fat bodies.它们有圆圆的脸,又大又黑的眼睛和肥胖的身体。
(3)Pandas like
eating
bamboo.大熊猫喜欢吃竹子。
(4)They
are
friendly
to
people.它们对人很友好。
3. 范文品鉴
My Favourite Animal
As we all know, there are many kinds of animals around us. Some are cute. Some are scary. But they are all our good friends. Of all the animals, I like pandas best. (引入话题)
Pandas are black and white. They have round faces, big black eyes and fat bodies. They are one of the most lovely animals in the world. They mainly live in China's Sichuan, Shaanxi and Gansu Provinces. Pandas like eating bamboo. They spend half of their day eating and most of the rest time sleeping. (基本情况)
Pandas are big and lovely. They are friendly to people. When I go to the zoo, I always look at them first. Now I can't wait to see them again. (和谐期待)
类文训练
假如你是上海动物园的志愿讲解员,请你根据以下信息提示,写一篇英语讲解词来介绍动物明星多多。
要求:1. 讲解词须包含所有信息提示,可适当发挥;
2. 语言表达要准确,语句通顺,意思连贯;
3. 不少于 60 词,讲解词的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.
One possible version:
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is
Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone
with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed
anything to the elephant.
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is
Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone
with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed
anything to the elephant.
Thanks for your listening!
答案
2.第一步:审题
记叙文 第三人称 一般现在时
第三步:句子积累
(1)all the animals (2)big black eyes (3)eating (4)are friendly to
类文训练
One possible version:
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is
Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone
with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed
anything to the elephant.
记叙文 第三人称 一般现在时
第三步:句子积累
(1)all the animals (2)big black eyes (3)eating (4)are friendly to
类文训练
One possible version:
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is
Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone
with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed
anything to the elephant.
解析
【分析】
我们可以分三个模块逐步完成这道题:第一模块是审题环节,首先判断体裁:这是一篇介绍动物的说明性记叙文,内容围绕动物相关信息展开,属于介绍类记叙文;人称方面,后续介绍动物明星多多,描述第三方的特征,所以使用第三人称;时态上,介绍动物的外貌、生活习性这类客观事实,统一选用一般现在时即可。第二模块是句子积累,对照给出的中文提示,结合已有的英文部分,直接匹配对应的常用固定短语就能完成填空。第三模块是类文训练,首先要覆盖所有信息点:点明介绍的动物是大象多多,它是亚洲象、来自缅甸,习性是爱洗澡、用长鼻子和游客打招呼,爱吃草、各类水果蔬菜,最后补充提示游客不要随意投喂的内容,把这些信息用通顺的英文衔接起来,保证字数达标、语句连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题部分解析:
体裁:文章用于向读者/游客介绍动物的相关信息,属于介绍类记叙文,内容清晰易懂,符合投稿、讲解的场景要求。
人称:全文站在第三方视角描述动物的相关特征,不需要使用第一/第二人称叙述自身经历,因此选用第三人称。
时态:介绍动物的外貌、生活习性等长期客观存在的事实,统一选用一般现在时即可。
2. 句子积累部分解析:
(1) 对应中文“在所有的动物中”,前面已有介词Of,填入all the animals,构成固定搭配of all the animals。
(2) 对应中文“又大又黑的眼睛”,前后文分别描述圆脸和肥胖的身体,填入big black eyes,符合熊猫的外貌特征描述。
(3) 动词like后接动名词doing表示长期的喜好,填入eating,like eating bamboo表示喜欢吃竹子。
(4) 对应中文“对人很友好”,填入are friendly to,构成固定短语be friendly to sb表示对某人友好,主语是they,be动词选用are。
3. 类文训练写作解析:
第一步:承接开头的欢迎语,先引出园区有很多动物,自然过渡到要介绍的动物明星多多;
第二步:依次介绍多多的基础信息:名字叫多多,是亚洲象,来自缅甸;
第三步:介绍它的生活习性:喜欢洗澡,会用长鼻子和大家打招呼,爱吃草、各类水果和蔬菜;
第四步:补充提示游客不要随意投喂动物,符合动物园志愿讲解员的身份,内容完整,衔接自然,字数符合要求。
【答案】
2.第一步:审题
记叙文 第三人称 一般现在时
第三步:句子积累
(1)all the animals (2)big black eyes (3)eating (4)are friendly to
类文训练
One possible version:
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed anything to the elephant.
Thanks for your listening!
【知识点】
英语写作审题,常用短语搭配,动物话题写作
【点评】
本题是循序渐进的初中英语基础写作训练题,从审题方法引导,到核心常用表达积累,再到场景化写作输出,层层递进,既帮助学生掌握介绍动物类短文的写作逻辑,巩固相关固定搭配,也贴合动物园讲解员的真实应用场景,同时渗透了文明游园、爱护动物的理念。
【难度系数】
0.8
我们可以分三个模块逐步完成这道题:第一模块是审题环节,首先判断体裁:这是一篇介绍动物的说明性记叙文,内容围绕动物相关信息展开,属于介绍类记叙文;人称方面,后续介绍动物明星多多,描述第三方的特征,所以使用第三人称;时态上,介绍动物的外貌、生活习性这类客观事实,统一选用一般现在时即可。第二模块是句子积累,对照给出的中文提示,结合已有的英文部分,直接匹配对应的常用固定短语就能完成填空。第三模块是类文训练,首先要覆盖所有信息点:点明介绍的动物是大象多多,它是亚洲象、来自缅甸,习性是爱洗澡、用长鼻子和游客打招呼,爱吃草、各类水果蔬菜,最后补充提示游客不要随意投喂的内容,把这些信息用通顺的英文衔接起来,保证字数达标、语句连贯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题部分解析:
体裁:文章用于向读者/游客介绍动物的相关信息,属于介绍类记叙文,内容清晰易懂,符合投稿、讲解的场景要求。
人称:全文站在第三方视角描述动物的相关特征,不需要使用第一/第二人称叙述自身经历,因此选用第三人称。
时态:介绍动物的外貌、生活习性等长期客观存在的事实,统一选用一般现在时即可。
2. 句子积累部分解析:
(1) 对应中文“在所有的动物中”,前面已有介词Of,填入all the animals,构成固定搭配of all the animals。
(2) 对应中文“又大又黑的眼睛”,前后文分别描述圆脸和肥胖的身体,填入big black eyes,符合熊猫的外貌特征描述。
(3) 动词like后接动名词doing表示长期的喜好,填入eating,like eating bamboo表示喜欢吃竹子。
(4) 对应中文“对人很友好”,填入are friendly to,构成固定短语be friendly to sb表示对某人友好,主语是they,be动词选用are。
3. 类文训练写作解析:
第一步:承接开头的欢迎语,先引出园区有很多动物,自然过渡到要介绍的动物明星多多;
第二步:依次介绍多多的基础信息:名字叫多多,是亚洲象,来自缅甸;
第三步:介绍它的生活习性:喜欢洗澡,会用长鼻子和大家打招呼,爱吃草、各类水果和蔬菜;
第四步:补充提示游客不要随意投喂动物,符合动物园志愿讲解员的身份,内容完整,衔接自然,字数符合要求。
【答案】
2.第一步:审题
记叙文 第三人称 一般现在时
第三步:句子积累
(1)all the animals (2)big black eyes (3)eating (4)are friendly to
类文训练
One possible version:
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. There are many animals here. I'd like to show an elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is an Asian elephant. It comes from Myanmar. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone with its long nose. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of fruit and vegetables. Please don't feed anything to the elephant.
Thanks for your listening!
【知识点】
英语写作审题,常用短语搭配,动物话题写作
【点评】
本题是循序渐进的初中英语基础写作训练题,从审题方法引导,到核心常用表达积累,再到场景化写作输出,层层递进,既帮助学生掌握介绍动物类短文的写作逻辑,巩固相关固定搭配,也贴合动物园讲解员的真实应用场景,同时渗透了文明游园、爱护动物的理念。
【难度系数】
0.8
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