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请根据要点，以“A girl's life was changed by WWF”为题写一篇短文。
【要点】1. How did the girl live in the past?
2. What happened to the girl then?
3. How does the girl live now?
【要求】1. 内容紧扣要点，逻辑连贯，表达通顺，无错别字及语法错误。
2. 不少于 90 词。
3. 文中不得出现真实人名、校名、地名。
【要点】1. How did the girl live in the past?
2. What happened to the girl then?
3. How does the girl live now?
【要求】1. 内容紧扣要点，逻辑连贯，表达通顺，无错别字及语法错误。
2. 不少于 90 词。
3. 文中不得出现真实人名、校名、地名。
答案
One possible version
A girl's life was changed by WWF
Lila is a girl from Brazil. Her family depended on the forest to make a living, but they watched it disappear little by little. Lila didn't know it is important to protect it until she met a WWF worker.
One day, a WWF worker came to Lila's town and talked about why people needed to save forests. He said that it was very important for children to protect the environment. He wanted all the children in the town to learn about wild animals and how to protect their homes.
A month later, Lila joined in an environmental education programme. Now she goes to nature classes every week. She enjoys exploring nature and is grateful to WWF.
Lila says that she wants to be a nature protector in the future. She hopes she can help keep forests and wild animals safe.
A girl's life was changed by WWF
Lila is a girl from Brazil. Her family depended on the forest to make a living, but they watched it disappear little by little. Lila didn't know it is important to protect it until she met a WWF worker.
One day, a WWF worker came to Lila's town and talked about why people needed to save forests. He said that it was very important for children to protect the environment. He wanted all the children in the town to learn about wild animals and how to protect their homes.
A month later, Lila joined in an environmental education programme. Now she goes to nature classes every week. She enjoys exploring nature and is grateful to WWF.
Lila says that she wants to be a nature protector in the future. She hopes she can help keep forests and wild animals safe.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇给定要点的英语记叙文写作题，解题时首先要顺着题干给出的3个要点搭建叙事框架：第一步先对应要点1，交代女孩过去的生活状态，说明她原本的生计和自然相关，此前缺乏环保认知；第二步对应要点2，叙述WWF工作人员到访当地开展科普的转折事件，讲清楚女孩接触到WWF相关公益内容的过程；第三步对应要点3，描写女孩现在的生活变化，写出她参与环保相关活动、树立新理想的状态。写作时注意区分时态，描述过去的经历用一般过去时，描述当下的生活用一般现在时，保证内容连贯，字数达标，不出现真实隐私信息即可。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 开篇引入人物，完成要点1的表述：介绍女孩的基本背景，说明她的家庭原本依靠森林谋生，此前没有意识到保护森林的重要性，交代清楚过去的生活状态。
2. 中间段叙述核心转折事件，完成要点2的表述：描写WWF的工作人员来到女孩所在的城镇，向当地居民尤其是孩子科普保护森林、守护野生动植物栖息地的相关知识，让女孩第一次建立起环保的认知。
3. 收尾段描写当下的生活，完成要点3的表述：说明女孩后续加入了WWF的环保教育项目，现在定期参与自然课程，爱上探索自然，还树立了未来成为自然保护者的理想，最后通读全文检查，确认字数超过90词，没有语法错误，也未出现真实人名、校名、地名，逻辑通顺即可。
【答案】
A girl's life was changed by WWF
Lila is a girl from Brazil. Her family depended on the forest to make a living, but they watched it disappear little by little. Lila didn't know it is important to protect it until she met a WWF worker.
One day, a WWF worker came to Lila's town and talked about why people needed to save forests. He said that it was very important for children to protect the environment. He wanted all the children in the town to learn about wild animals and how to protect their homes.
A month later, Lila joined in an environmental education programme. Now she goes to nature classes every week. She enjoys exploring nature and is grateful to WWF.
Lila says that she wants to be a nature protector in the future. She hopes she can help keep forests and wild animals safe.
【知识点】
1. 英语记叙文写作
2. 时态的正确运用
3. 写作要点整合
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部要点，叙事逻辑清晰流畅，按照“过去生活-转折事件-当下状态”的顺序层层推进，时态切换准确自然，补充的未来理想内容让文章更饱满生动，字数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实隐私信息，语句通顺无语法错误，是符合写作要求的优秀范本，学生写作时可以参考该叙事结构，避免遗漏核心要点。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇给定要点的英语记叙文写作题，解题时首先要顺着题干给出的3个要点搭建叙事框架：第一步先对应要点1，交代女孩过去的生活状态，说明她原本的生计和自然相关，此前缺乏环保认知；第二步对应要点2，叙述WWF工作人员到访当地开展科普的转折事件，讲清楚女孩接触到WWF相关公益内容的过程；第三步对应要点3，描写女孩现在的生活变化，写出她参与环保相关活动、树立新理想的状态。写作时注意区分时态，描述过去的经历用一般过去时，描述当下的生活用一般现在时，保证内容连贯，字数达标，不出现真实隐私信息即可。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 开篇引入人物，完成要点1的表述：介绍女孩的基本背景，说明她的家庭原本依靠森林谋生，此前没有意识到保护森林的重要性，交代清楚过去的生活状态。
2. 中间段叙述核心转折事件，完成要点2的表述：描写WWF的工作人员来到女孩所在的城镇，向当地居民尤其是孩子科普保护森林、守护野生动植物栖息地的相关知识，让女孩第一次建立起环保的认知。
3. 收尾段描写当下的生活，完成要点3的表述：说明女孩后续加入了WWF的环保教育项目，现在定期参与自然课程，爱上探索自然，还树立了未来成为自然保护者的理想，最后通读全文检查，确认字数超过90词，没有语法错误，也未出现真实人名、校名、地名，逻辑通顺即可。
【答案】
A girl's life was changed by WWF
Lila is a girl from Brazil. Her family depended on the forest to make a living, but they watched it disappear little by little. Lila didn't know it is important to protect it until she met a WWF worker.
One day, a WWF worker came to Lila's town and talked about why people needed to save forests. He said that it was very important for children to protect the environment. He wanted all the children in the town to learn about wild animals and how to protect their homes.
A month later, Lila joined in an environmental education programme. Now she goes to nature classes every week. She enjoys exploring nature and is grateful to WWF.
Lila says that she wants to be a nature protector in the future. She hopes she can help keep forests and wild animals safe.
【知识点】
1. 英语记叙文写作
2. 时态的正确运用
3. 写作要点整合
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干给出的全部要点，叙事逻辑清晰流畅，按照“过去生活-转折事件-当下状态”的顺序层层推进，时态切换准确自然，补充的未来理想内容让文章更饱满生动，字数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实隐私信息，语句通顺无语法错误，是符合写作要求的优秀范本，学生写作时可以参考该叙事结构，避免遗漏核心要点。
【难度系数】
0.6
