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如果你是西蒙，是阳光中学野生动物保护俱乐部的一名成员。你的俱乐部想在动物园认养一只动物，请试着帮你的俱乐部给动物园园长（the director of the zoo）写一封90词左右的申请书。在信中，请回答以下问题：
1. What is your club about?
2. What animal would your club like to adopt(认养)? Why?
3. What will your club do if your club can get the chance of adoption?
Dear director,
Our Wildlife Protection Club would like to adopt a wild animal from your zoo.
First,
Please call us on 025-88877665 or email us at SWPC@sunshine.com.
Yours,
Simon
思路点拨
1. 审体裁：本文是一封领导动物的申请信。
2. 审内容：俱乐部的情况、认养意愿及后续行动，助力动物园解决资金喂养难题。
3. 审时态：一般现在时和一般将来时。
4. 审篇幅：90词左右。第一步，引出话题；第二步，介绍你的俱乐部、想要认养什么动物以及原因；第三步，介绍如果你的俱乐部获得领养的机会，你的俱乐部会怎么做。
范文欣赏
Dear director,
Our Wildlife Protection Club would like to adopt a wild animal from your zoo.
First, our club is mainly about adopting some homeless dogs, so we want to adopt a
如果你是西蒙，是阳光中学野生动物保护俱乐部的一名成员。你的俱乐部想在动物园认养一只动物，请试着帮你的俱乐部给动物园园长（the director of the zoo）写一封90词左右的申请书。在信中，请回答以下问题：
1. What is your club about?
2. What animal would your club like to adopt(认养)? Why?
3. What will your club do if your club can get the chance of adoption?
Dear director,
Our Wildlife Protection Club would like to adopt a wild animal from your zoo.
First,
Please call us on 025-88877665 or email us at SWPC@sunshine.com.
Yours,
Simon
思路点拨
1. 审体裁：本文是一封领导动物的申请信。
2. 审内容：俱乐部的情况、认养意愿及后续行动，助力动物园解决资金喂养难题。
3. 审时态：一般现在时和一般将来时。
4. 审篇幅：90词左右。第一步，引出话题；第二步，介绍你的俱乐部、想要认养什么动物以及原因；第三步，介绍如果你的俱乐部获得领养的机会，你的俱乐部会怎么做。
范文欣赏
Dear director,
Our Wildlife Protection Club would like to adopt a wild animal from your zoo.
First, our club is mainly about adopting some homeless dogs, so we want to adopt a
答案
our club is from Sunshine Middle School. All of our members are wildlife lovers. We often hold different kinds of activities to teach more people to protect wild animals and raise money for endangered animals.
We would like to adopt a giant panda, because it is our country's rare national treasure and all of us have learnt about its living habits. If we get the chance, we will pay for part of its feeding cost, come to the zoo to do volunteer work for it every weekend, and we will also introduce panda protection knowledge to more students in our school.
We would like to adopt a giant panda, because it is our country's rare national treasure and all of us have learnt about its living habits. If we get the chance, we will pay for part of its feeding cost, come to the zoo to do volunteer work for it every weekend, and we will also introduce panda protection knowledge to more students in our school.
解析
这是八年级上册要求掌握的申请类应用文写作，解题思路完全贴合题干给出的三个写作要点：1. 用一般现在时介绍俱乐部基本属性，说明俱乐部是阳光中学的野生动物保护社团，成员均为热爱野生动物的学生，日常开展保护科普、公益筹款活动，符合第一个问题的要求；2. 明确说明想要认养的动物是大熊猫，解释原因是它是我国珍稀保护动物，所有成员都提前了解过它的生活习性，符合第二个问题的要求；3. 用一般将来时说明获得认养资格后的安排：承担该动物的部分饲养开支，定期组织成员到园做志愿照料，在校园开展科普号召更多人保护野生动物，符合第三个问题的要求，整体词数控制在90左右，没有超纲词汇。
dog. And we know dogs very well. All our members are very good at taking care of dogs. We know what dogs like to eat, what they like to do and how to communicate with them. If we get the chance of adoption, we will prepare all kinds of delicious food for them. We'll take turns to take them around in our free time, and will also bathe them often. We will take care of them as much as we can.
Please call us on 025-88877665 or email us at SWPC@sunshine.com.
Yours,
Simon
巩固练习
假设你是苏州野生动物协会的一员，你将作为学生代表谈谈入会以来的所见、所闻、所感。请你用英语写一篇100词左右的演讲稿。
内容包括:1. 你喜欢的动物是什么？(looks...) 2. 你在保护野生动物的过程中发现了什么问题？3. 不同职业的会员朋友们是如何借助自己一技之长与野生动物和谐共生、保护他们的？(举两例，比如:writer, artist...) 4. 你的倡议(1～2 points)。
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
Thanks for listening!
Please call us on 025-88877665 or email us at SWPC@sunshine.com.
Yours,
Simon
巩固练习
假设你是苏州野生动物协会的一员，你将作为学生代表谈谈入会以来的所见、所闻、所感。请你用英语写一篇100词左右的演讲稿。
内容包括:1. 你喜欢的动物是什么？(looks...) 2. 你在保护野生动物的过程中发现了什么问题？3. 不同职业的会员朋友们是如何借助自己一技之长与野生动物和谐共生、保护他们的？(举两例，比如:writer, artist...) 4. 你的倡议(1～2 points)。
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
As a member of Suzhou Wildlife Society, I have learned much about different kinds of birds. Among them, I like the rare red-crowned cranes best, which have a long neck and long legs. Each time I go birdwatching, I always find that most people treat birds kindly and consider them as friends. Some artists like to paint birds. The birds in their pictures are really beautiful. Also some writers like to include birds in their poems too.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all the wildlife and ourselves.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all the wildlife and ourselves.
Thanks for listening!
答案
写作能力突破
One possible version:
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
As a member of Suzhou Wildlife Society, I have learned much about different kinds of birds. Among them, I like the rare red-crowned cranes best, which have a long neck and long legs. ➝ which 引导非限制性定语从句。
Each time I go birdwatching, I always find that most people treat birds kindly and consider them as friends. Some artists like to paint birds. The birds in their pictures are really beautiful. Also some writers like to include birds in their poems too.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all ➝ it's time for sb to do sth 结构。
the wildlife and ourselves.
Thanks for listening!
One possible version:
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
As a member of Suzhou Wildlife Society, I have learned much about different kinds of birds. Among them, I like the rare red-crowned cranes best, which have a long neck and long legs. ➝ which 引导非限制性定语从句。
Each time I go birdwatching, I always find that most people treat birds kindly and consider them as friends. Some artists like to paint birds. The birds in their pictures are really beautiful. Also some writers like to include birds in their poems too.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all ➝ it's time for sb to do sth 结构。
the wildlife and ourselves.
Thanks for listening!
解析
【分析】
首先你要明确这是一篇100词左右的英语演讲稿，身份是苏州野生动物协会的学生代表，需要覆盖题干给出的全部4个要点。第一步，先承接题干给出的开篇句，先介绍自己最喜欢的野生动物，补充对应的外观描述，完成第一个要点；第二步，梳理参与保护工作时发现的真实问题，比如栖息地被侵占、非法捕猎等，完成第二个要点；第三步，按照题干提示举两个不同职业会员的例子，比如艺术家、作家分别用自身特长开展保护相关工作，完成第三个要点；第四步，给出1-2条贴合主题的保护倡议，最后收尾。写作过程中可以适当使用积累的高级句式替换简单表达，注意行文衔接自然，语气符合演讲稿公开分享的语境，控制总词数在要求范围内。
【解析】
1. 文体与时态确定：本文为公开演讲稿，使用第一人称叙述，整体以一般现在时为主要时态，语气亲切正式。
2. 要点逐一落实：
① 介绍喜爱的动物：点明最喜欢的珍稀动物丹顶鹤，补充外观特征“长脖颈、长腿”，用非限制性定语从句优化表达；
② 点明发现的问题：转折后指出当前鸟类面临的生存困境，湿地被农田建筑挤占、非法捕猎牟利导致野生鸟类数量下降；
③ 列举不同职业会员的行动：艺术家创作鸟类主题画作，作家创作相关诗歌科普内容，用各自特长助力野生动物保护；
④ 提出倡议：呼吁所有人共同为野生动物和人类自己创造和平的生存环境，符合倡议要求。
3. 行文用however、also等衔接词串联内容，避免句式单调，总词数符合100词左右的要求。
【答案】
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
As a member of Suzhou Wildlife Society, I have learned much about different kinds of birds. Among them, I like the rare red-crowned cranes best, which have a long neck and long legs.
Each time I go birdwatching, I always find that most people treat birds kindly and consider them as friends. Some artists like to paint birds. The birds in their pictures are really beautiful. Also some writers like to include birds in their poems too.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all the wildlife and ourselves.
Thanks for listening!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作
定语从句运用
话题作文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部四个写作要点，逻辑层次清晰，衔接自然流畅，灵活运用了非限制性定语从句、it's time for sb to do sth等亮点句式提升表达档次，选取的艺术家、作家的案例贴合题干提示，内容贴合苏州野生动物协会的活动场景，倡议正向合理，词数符合要求，是一篇非常规范的学生演讲稿范本。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先你要明确这是一篇100词左右的英语演讲稿，身份是苏州野生动物协会的学生代表，需要覆盖题干给出的全部4个要点。第一步，先承接题干给出的开篇句，先介绍自己最喜欢的野生动物，补充对应的外观描述，完成第一个要点；第二步，梳理参与保护工作时发现的真实问题，比如栖息地被侵占、非法捕猎等，完成第二个要点；第三步，按照题干提示举两个不同职业会员的例子，比如艺术家、作家分别用自身特长开展保护相关工作，完成第三个要点；第四步，给出1-2条贴合主题的保护倡议，最后收尾。写作过程中可以适当使用积累的高级句式替换简单表达，注意行文衔接自然，语气符合演讲稿公开分享的语境，控制总词数在要求范围内。
【解析】
1. 文体与时态确定：本文为公开演讲稿，使用第一人称叙述，整体以一般现在时为主要时态，语气亲切正式。
2. 要点逐一落实：
① 介绍喜爱的动物：点明最喜欢的珍稀动物丹顶鹤，补充外观特征“长脖颈、长腿”，用非限制性定语从句优化表达；
② 点明发现的问题：转折后指出当前鸟类面临的生存困境，湿地被农田建筑挤占、非法捕猎牟利导致野生鸟类数量下降；
③ 列举不同职业会员的行动：艺术家创作鸟类主题画作，作家创作相关诗歌科普内容，用各自特长助力野生动物保护；
④ 提出倡议：呼吁所有人共同为野生动物和人类自己创造和平的生存环境，符合倡议要求。
3. 行文用however、also等衔接词串联内容，避免句式单调，总词数符合100词左右的要求。
【答案】
Dear members,
I am happy to be here to share my ideas with you.
As a member of Suzhou Wildlife Society, I have learned much about different kinds of birds. Among them, I like the rare red-crowned cranes best, which have a long neck and long legs.
Each time I go birdwatching, I always find that most people treat birds kindly and consider them as friends. Some artists like to paint birds. The birds in their pictures are really beautiful. Also some writers like to include birds in their poems too.
However, it's sad that birds are still facing some problems. People make space for farms and buildings by making wetlands smaller. Furthermore, some people hunt rare birds to make money. Such terrible behaviours lead to smaller numbers of wild birds.
Birds are part of our lives. So it's time for us humans to change the bad situation. Let's create a peaceful world for all the wildlife and ourselves.
Thanks for listening!
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作
定语从句运用
话题作文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部四个写作要点，逻辑层次清晰，衔接自然流畅，灵活运用了非限制性定语从句、it's time for sb to do sth等亮点句式提升表达档次，选取的艺术家、作家的案例贴合题干提示，内容贴合苏州野生动物协会的活动场景，倡议正向合理，词数符合要求，是一篇非常规范的学生演讲稿范本。
【难度系数】
0.6
