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七、书面表达(20 分)
假如你是张亮，你的美国朋友 Jack 想了解一下你与你弟弟张翔的区别，请根据下表，给 Jack 写一封电子邮件。
要求：90 词左右，开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jack，
Yours，
Zhang Liang
假如你是张亮，你的美国朋友 Jack 想了解一下你与你弟弟张翔的区别，请根据下表，给 Jack 写一封电子邮件。
要求：90 词左右，开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jack，
Yours，
Zhang Liang
答案
One possible version:
Dear Jack,
I'm glad to introduce my brother
Zhang Xiang to you. Zhang Xiang is one
year younger than me, but he is as tall
as me. His hair is short. My hair is
longer than his. You know, I'm a quiet
boy, but Zhang Xiang is quite outgoing,
so he makes friends more easily. He
often hangs out with his friends.
However I spend more time at home.
He is a cool boy. His clothes are cooler
than mine. He is less hard-working
though. So he often gets worse grades
than me.
I hope you can make friends with
him one day.
Yours,
Zhang Liang
Dear Jack,
I'm glad to introduce my brother
Zhang Xiang to you. Zhang Xiang is one
year younger than me, but he is as tall
as me. His hair is short. My hair is
longer than his. You know, I'm a quiet
boy, but Zhang Xiang is quite outgoing,
so he makes friends more easily. He
often hangs out with his friends.
However I spend more time at home.
He is a cool boy. His clothes are cooler
than mine. He is less hard-working
though. So he often gets worse grades
than me.
I hope you can make friends with
him one day.
Yours,
Zhang Liang
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题，先明确核心要求：以张亮的身份给好友Jack写邮件，介绍自己和弟弟张翔的差异。第一步先解读柱状图的所有对比信息：1. 身高维度两人的柱子高度几乎一致，说明二人身高一样；2. 头发维度张亮的白柱更高，说明张亮头发比张翔长；3. 性格维度张翔的灰柱更高，说明张翔比张亮更外向；4. 衣服维度张翔的灰柱更高，说明张翔的衣服比张亮的更酷；5. 学习成绩维度张亮的白柱更高，说明张亮的成绩比张翔更好。第二步，梳理写作逻辑：开篇先引出要介绍弟弟，再逐一用形容词比较级串联所有对比信息，最后自然收尾，控制总词数在90左右，符合邮件的表达习惯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为私人电子邮件，时态统一使用一般现在时，人称为第一人称（张亮视角）+第三人称（介绍张翔），需要覆盖图表全部5个对比要点，词数控制在90词左右，开头结尾已给出不计入总词数。
2. 要点梳理：
① 开篇引入：说明很高兴向Jack介绍自己的弟弟张翔
② 身高对比：张翔比自己小一岁，但是身高和自己一样高
③ 头发对比：张翔头发短，自己的头发比他更长
④ 性格对比：自己性格偏安静，张翔更外向，更容易交朋友，常和朋友外出，自己更多时间待在家
⑤ 穿着对比：张翔是很潮的男孩，他的衣服比自己的更酷
⑥ 学习对比：张翔学习没自己用功，所以成绩比自己差
⑦ 收尾：表达希望Jack未来能和张翔成为朋友
3. 组句润色：用but、however等逻辑连接词衔接不同对比项，正确使用as...as、more/less + 形容词 than等比较级结构，调整语句流畅度，符合英文表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear Jack,
I'm glad to introduce my brother Zhang Xiang to you. Zhang Xiang is one year younger than me, but he is as tall as me. His hair is short. My hair is longer than his. You know, I'm a quiet boy, but Zhang Xiang is quite outgoing, so he makes friends more easily. He often hangs out with his friends. However I spend more time at home. He is a cool boy. His clothes are cooler than mine. He is less hard-working though. So he often gets worse grades than me.
I hope you can make friends with him one day.
Yours,
Zhang Liang
【知识点】
形容词比较级，邮件写作，图表信息提取
【点评】
本题是典型的人物对比类图表写作题，核心考察学生对形容词比较级的掌握运用能力，只要准确读取柱状图的所有对比信息，用通顺的英文串联所有要点，避免语法错误，就能拿到高分，写作时注意不要遗漏图表给出的身高、头发、性格、穿着、成绩五个对比维度，同时控制词数符合要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道题，先明确核心要求：以张亮的身份给好友Jack写邮件，介绍自己和弟弟张翔的差异。第一步先解读柱状图的所有对比信息：1. 身高维度两人的柱子高度几乎一致，说明二人身高一样；2. 头发维度张亮的白柱更高，说明张亮头发比张翔长；3. 性格维度张翔的灰柱更高，说明张翔比张亮更外向；4. 衣服维度张翔的灰柱更高，说明张翔的衣服比张亮的更酷；5. 学习成绩维度张亮的白柱更高，说明张亮的成绩比张翔更好。第二步，梳理写作逻辑：开篇先引出要介绍弟弟，再逐一用形容词比较级串联所有对比信息，最后自然收尾，控制总词数在90左右，符合邮件的表达习惯即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：文体为私人电子邮件，时态统一使用一般现在时，人称为第一人称（张亮视角）+第三人称（介绍张翔），需要覆盖图表全部5个对比要点，词数控制在90词左右，开头结尾已给出不计入总词数。
2. 要点梳理：
① 开篇引入：说明很高兴向Jack介绍自己的弟弟张翔
② 身高对比：张翔比自己小一岁，但是身高和自己一样高
③ 头发对比：张翔头发短，自己的头发比他更长
④ 性格对比：自己性格偏安静，张翔更外向，更容易交朋友，常和朋友外出，自己更多时间待在家
⑤ 穿着对比：张翔是很潮的男孩，他的衣服比自己的更酷
⑥ 学习对比：张翔学习没自己用功，所以成绩比自己差
⑦ 收尾：表达希望Jack未来能和张翔成为朋友
3. 组句润色：用but、however等逻辑连接词衔接不同对比项，正确使用as...as、more/less + 形容词 than等比较级结构，调整语句流畅度，符合英文表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear Jack,
I'm glad to introduce my brother Zhang Xiang to you. Zhang Xiang is one year younger than me, but he is as tall as me. His hair is short. My hair is longer than his. You know, I'm a quiet boy, but Zhang Xiang is quite outgoing, so he makes friends more easily. He often hangs out with his friends. However I spend more time at home. He is a cool boy. His clothes are cooler than mine. He is less hard-working though. So he often gets worse grades than me.
I hope you can make friends with him one day.
Yours,
Zhang Liang
【知识点】
形容词比较级，邮件写作，图表信息提取
【点评】
本题是典型的人物对比类图表写作题，核心考察学生对形容词比较级的掌握运用能力，只要准确读取柱状图的所有对比信息，用通顺的英文串联所有要点，避免语法错误，就能拿到高分，写作时注意不要遗漏图表给出的身高、头发、性格、穿着、成绩五个对比维度，同时控制词数符合要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
