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七、(2026·苏州立达中学阶段检测)书面表达(30 分)
良好的生活方式能塑造健康的体魄,得体的着装能展现积极的面貌。你校英语公众号现举办征文活动,主题为“A Healthy and Energetic Me”。请你结合自己的做法与体会,写一篇英语短文投稿。
内容要点:1. 介绍你的日常生活方式,包括健康饮食及科学的锻炼和休息情况;2. 描述你的着装习惯,包括你喜欢的搭配方式、材质的选择等;3. 谈谈你认为健康的生活方式和得体的着装如何共同影响你的生活(如:对身体、心情、学习或社交等方面的积极影响)。
写作要求:1. 短文须包含所有内容要点,可适当发挥,以使内容连贯、通顺。2. 词数 120 左右。短文开头已给出,不计入总词数。3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
参考词汇:balanced 均衡的 confident 自信的 positive 积极的
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
良好的生活方式能塑造健康的体魄,得体的着装能展现积极的面貌。你校英语公众号现举办征文活动,主题为“A Healthy and Energetic Me”。请你结合自己的做法与体会,写一篇英语短文投稿。
内容要点:1. 介绍你的日常生活方式,包括健康饮食及科学的锻炼和休息情况;2. 描述你的着装习惯,包括你喜欢的搭配方式、材质的选择等;3. 谈谈你认为健康的生活方式和得体的着装如何共同影响你的生活(如:对身体、心情、学习或社交等方面的积极影响)。
写作要求:1. 短文须包含所有内容要点,可适当发挥,以使内容连贯、通顺。2. 词数 120 左右。短文开头已给出,不计入总词数。3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息。
参考词汇:balanced 均衡的 confident 自信的 positive 积极的
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
答案
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:记叙文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:须覆盖健康的生活方式(饮食、锻炼、休息)、着装习惯(搭配方式、材质选择)和这两者的共同影响(身体、心情、学习、社交等)。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍健康的生活方式(饮食+锻炼+休息)；第二步,描述着装习惯(搭配方式+材质选择)；第三步,总结多重影响(身体强壮+思维清晰+学习进步+社交自信),结尾升华主题。
[词句积累]
①balanced diet 均衡饮食 ②confident 自信的 ③energetic精力充沛的
④When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. (when it comes to 句式的使用)
⑤A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. (which 引导非限制性定语从句)
One possible version:
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
For a healthy lifestyle, I keep a balanced diet. I eat plenty of fruit and vegetables every day and avoid too much sweet food. I also exercise regularly—playing badminton after school and jogging on weekends. Besides, I never stay up late; getting 8 hours of sleep helps me stay active in class.
When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. I often wear cotton T-shirts and jeans because cotton is soft and breathable. I also like matching them with a light jacket in spring. I think clothes should not only look neat but also make me feel relaxed.
A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. Proper dressing makes me more confident in social situations. Together, they make me positive and energetic every day!
[审题步骤]
①体裁:记叙文。②时态:主要为一般现在时。③提示:须覆盖健康的生活方式(饮食、锻炼、休息)、着装习惯(搭配方式、材质选择)和这两者的共同影响(身体、心情、学习、社交等)。
[写作步骤]
第一步,介绍健康的生活方式(饮食+锻炼+休息)；第二步,描述着装习惯(搭配方式+材质选择)；第三步,总结多重影响(身体强壮+思维清晰+学习进步+社交自信),结尾升华主题。
[词句积累]
①balanced diet 均衡饮食 ②confident 自信的 ③energetic精力充沛的
④When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. (when it comes to 句式的使用)
⑤A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. (which 引导非限制性定语从句)
One possible version:
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
For a healthy lifestyle, I keep a balanced diet. I eat plenty of fruit and vegetables every day and avoid too much sweet food. I also exercise regularly—playing badminton after school and jogging on weekends. Besides, I never stay up late; getting 8 hours of sleep helps me stay active in class.
When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. I often wear cotton T-shirts and jeans because cotton is soft and breathable. I also like matching them with a light jacket in spring. I think clothes should not only look neat but also make me feel relaxed.
A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. Proper dressing makes me more confident in social situations. Together, they make me positive and energetic every day!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先先完成审题：第一明确体裁是介绍自身情况的记叙文，核心时态用一般现在时即可；第二要把题干给出的三个必写要点全部覆盖，不能缺漏：首先第一部分对应健康生活方式，分别从健康饮食、科学锻炼、规律休息三个维度展开，用上提示词balanced来写均衡饮食；第二部分对应着装习惯，要写清楚自己偏好的搭配风格、选择的面料特点，贴合学生真实日常；第三部分结合两者的共同作用，从身体状态、学习效率、社交自信、心态积极几个角度切入，用上提示词confident、positive；最后注意控制总词数在120左右，不要出现真实人名校名，用衔接词让内容连贯自然，直接接题干给出的开头往下写即可。
【解析】
写作按照分层步骤完成：
1. 第一层写健康生活部分：用总起句点明自己坚持健康生活方式，先介绍饮食：保持均衡饮食，每日摄入足量果蔬，避免过多高糖食物；再介绍锻炼：固定规律运动，课后打羽毛球，周末慢跑；最后介绍作息：从不熬夜，每日保证8小时睡眠，让自己课堂上始终保持活跃。
2. 第二层写着装习惯部分：用固定句式"When it comes to dressing"自然引出话题，说明自己偏好舒适简约的风格，日常常穿棉质T恤和牛仔裤，春季搭配薄外套，选择棉质面料是因为柔软透气，做到着装整洁同时能让自己放松。
3. 第三层写共同影响部分：用非限制性定语从句说明健康生活让自己身体强健、思路清晰，助力学习进步；得体着装让自己在社交场合更自信，两者结合让自己每天都保持积极活力的状态，收尾升华主题。
最后通读全文，检查所有要点都覆盖，词数符合要求，没有出现个人隐私信息即可。
【答案】
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
For a healthy lifestyle, I keep a balanced diet. I eat plenty of fruit and vegetables every day and avoid too much sweet food. I also exercise regularly—playing badminton after school and jogging on weekends. Besides, I never stay up late; getting 8 hours of sleep helps me stay active in class.
When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. I often wear cotton T-shirts and jeans because cotton is soft and breathable. I also like matching them with a light jacket in spring. I think clothes should not only look neat but also make me feel relaxed.
A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. Proper dressing makes me more confident in social situations. Together, they make me positive and energetic every day!
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点式写作，常用句式运用
【点评】
本题主题贴近学生日常校园与生活实际，既考查学生的英语书面表达连贯能力，也引导学生树立健康的生活理念。写作时按照题干给出的三个要点分层展开，适当使用提示词和高分衔接句式，避免遗漏信息、控制词数，就能拿到不错的分数，注意不要出现真实个人信息，符合写作规范即可。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先先完成审题：第一明确体裁是介绍自身情况的记叙文，核心时态用一般现在时即可；第二要把题干给出的三个必写要点全部覆盖，不能缺漏：首先第一部分对应健康生活方式，分别从健康饮食、科学锻炼、规律休息三个维度展开，用上提示词balanced来写均衡饮食；第二部分对应着装习惯，要写清楚自己偏好的搭配风格、选择的面料特点，贴合学生真实日常；第三部分结合两者的共同作用，从身体状态、学习效率、社交自信、心态积极几个角度切入，用上提示词confident、positive；最后注意控制总词数在120左右，不要出现真实人名校名，用衔接词让内容连贯自然，直接接题干给出的开头往下写即可。
【解析】
写作按照分层步骤完成：
1. 第一层写健康生活部分：用总起句点明自己坚持健康生活方式，先介绍饮食：保持均衡饮食，每日摄入足量果蔬，避免过多高糖食物；再介绍锻炼：固定规律运动，课后打羽毛球，周末慢跑；最后介绍作息：从不熬夜，每日保证8小时睡眠，让自己课堂上始终保持活跃。
2. 第二层写着装习惯部分：用固定句式"When it comes to dressing"自然引出话题，说明自己偏好舒适简约的风格，日常常穿棉质T恤和牛仔裤，春季搭配薄外套，选择棉质面料是因为柔软透气，做到着装整洁同时能让自己放松。
3. 第三层写共同影响部分：用非限制性定语从句说明健康生活让自己身体强健、思路清晰，助力学习进步；得体着装让自己在社交场合更自信，两者结合让自己每天都保持积极活力的状态，收尾升华主题。
最后通读全文，检查所有要点都覆盖，词数符合要求，没有出现个人隐私信息即可。
【答案】
A Healthy and Energetic Me
Everyone wants to be full of health and energy. I am trying to achieve this by taking good care of myself, both inside and out.
For a healthy lifestyle, I keep a balanced diet. I eat plenty of fruit and vegetables every day and avoid too much sweet food. I also exercise regularly—playing badminton after school and jogging on weekends. Besides, I never stay up late; getting 8 hours of sleep helps me stay active in class.
When it comes to dressing, I prefer comfortable and simple styles. I often wear cotton T-shirts and jeans because cotton is soft and breathable. I also like matching them with a light jacket in spring. I think clothes should not only look neat but also make me feel relaxed.
A healthy lifestyle keeps my body strong and my mind clear, which helps me study better. Proper dressing makes me more confident in social situations. Together, they make me positive and energetic every day!
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点式写作，常用句式运用
【点评】
本题主题贴近学生日常校园与生活实际，既考查学生的英语书面表达连贯能力，也引导学生树立健康的生活理念。写作时按照题干给出的三个要点分层展开，适当使用提示词和高分衔接句式，避免遗漏信息、控制词数，就能拿到不错的分数，注意不要出现真实个人信息，符合写作规范即可。
【难度系数】
0.6
