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李华是你的好朋友。你们互相关心，互相帮助。请根据提示，以“My Friend and I”为题写一篇短文，介绍你们的异同和健康的生活方式。
提示：1. What are your similarities and differences? 2. What are your healthy living habits?
注意：1. 短文须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥；
2. 词数:80~100(开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数)。
My Friend and I
My best friend is Li Hua.
I hope that we are friends forever.
审题指导：
1.体裁:记叙文 2.时态:一般现在时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My Friend and I
My best friend is Li Hua. I want to tell you something about us.
We are in the same class. We have much in common①. I am as tall as her②. We both like music and English. We are good at swimming. We usually go swimming on weekends.
How interesting!⑦ We like action movies a lot. However, we are different in many ways③. I am more outgoing than her. I like to tell jokes to make my classmates laugh. Although I’m smarter than her, she is more hard-working than me.⑧ So she always gets better grades④.
We have healthy living habits⑤. We eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day. We exercise every morning. We never stay up⑥. We use the Internet only once a week. We sleep for nine hours every night. We get up early.
I hope that we are friends forever.
亮点词块
①have much in common 有许多共同之处
②as tall as her 像她一样高
③are different in many ways 在许多方面不同
④get better grades 取得更好的成绩
⑤healthy living habits 健康的生活习惯
⑥stay up 熬夜
高分句子
⑦How interesting! (How 引导的感叹句)
多有趣呀！
⑧Although I’m smarter than her, she is more hard-working than me. (Although 引导让步状语从句)虽然我比她聪明，但她比我更努力。
李华是你的好朋友。你们互相关心，互相帮助。请根据提示，以“My Friend and I”为题写一篇短文，介绍你们的异同和健康的生活方式。
提示：1. What are your similarities and differences? 2. What are your healthy living habits?
注意：1. 短文须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥；
2. 词数:80~100(开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数)。
My Friend and I
My best friend is Li Hua.
I hope that we are friends forever.
审题指导：
1.体裁:记叙文 2.时态:一般现在时 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架：
优秀范文：
My Friend and I
My best friend is Li Hua. I want to tell you something about us.
We are in the same class. We have much in common①. I am as tall as her②. We both like music and English. We are good at swimming. We usually go swimming on weekends.
How interesting!⑦ We like action movies a lot. However, we are different in many ways③. I am more outgoing than her. I like to tell jokes to make my classmates laugh. Although I’m smarter than her, she is more hard-working than me.⑧ So she always gets better grades④.
We have healthy living habits⑤. We eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day. We exercise every morning. We never stay up⑥. We use the Internet only once a week. We sleep for nine hours every night. We get up early.
I hope that we are friends forever.
亮点词块
①have much in common 有许多共同之处
②as tall as her 像她一样高
③are different in many ways 在许多方面不同
④get better grades 取得更好的成绩
⑤healthy living habits 健康的生活习惯
⑥stay up 熬夜
高分句子
⑦How interesting! (How 引导的感叹句)
多有趣呀！
⑧Although I’m smarter than her, she is more hard-working than me. (Although 引导让步状语从句)虽然我比她聪明，但她比我更努力。
答案
I want to tell you something about us.
We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends. However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades. We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.
We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends. However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades. We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.
解析
【分析】
本题要求以“My Friend and I”为题写一篇80-100词的英语记叙文，需包含“异同点”和“健康生活习惯”两个核心提示，时态限定为一般现在时，人称用第一人称，开头结尾已给出。解题思路：1. 先补充过渡句衔接开头，引出对自己和李华的介绍；2. 阐述共同点：同班、身高相同、共同爱好（音乐、英语）、共同擅长的事（游泳及时间）；3. 阐述不同点：性格（“我”外向爱讲笑话）、学习态度（李华更努力成绩更好）；4. 介绍健康生活习惯：饮食、锻炼、作息等；5. 确保覆盖所有提示，使用规范表达，符合词数要求。
【解析】
按照以下步骤写作：1. 补充过渡句“I want to tell you something about us.”衔接开头；2. 写共同点：We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends.；3. 写不同点：However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades.；4. 写健康生活习惯：We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.；5. 检查时态、人称，确保语句通顺、覆盖所有要求。
【答案】
I want to tell you something about us.
We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends. However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades. We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；形容词比较级；健康生活习惯表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖“异同点”和“健康生活习惯”两个提示，使用规范表达，时态、人称正确，语句通顺连贯，词数符合要求，是符合标准的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题要求以“My Friend and I”为题写一篇80-100词的英语记叙文，需包含“异同点”和“健康生活习惯”两个核心提示，时态限定为一般现在时，人称用第一人称，开头结尾已给出。解题思路：1. 先补充过渡句衔接开头，引出对自己和李华的介绍；2. 阐述共同点：同班、身高相同、共同爱好（音乐、英语）、共同擅长的事（游泳及时间）；3. 阐述不同点：性格（“我”外向爱讲笑话）、学习态度（李华更努力成绩更好）；4. 介绍健康生活习惯：饮食、锻炼、作息等；5. 确保覆盖所有提示，使用规范表达，符合词数要求。
【解析】
按照以下步骤写作：1. 补充过渡句“I want to tell you something about us.”衔接开头；2. 写共同点：We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends.；3. 写不同点：However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades.；4. 写健康生活习惯：We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.；5. 检查时态、人称，确保语句通顺、覆盖所有要求。
【答案】
I want to tell you something about us.
We are in the same class. We have much in common. I am as tall as her, and we both like music and English. We are good at swimming and usually go swimming on weekends. However, we are different in many ways. I am more outgoing and love telling jokes, but she is more hard-working so she always gets better grades. We have good healthy living habits: we eat fresh fruit and vegetables every day, exercise every morning, never stay up late and sleep for nine hours every night.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；形容词比较级；健康生活习惯表达
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖“异同点”和“健康生活习惯”两个提示，使用规范表达，时态、人称正确，语句通顺连贯，词数符合要求，是符合标准的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.5
