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七、书面表达
假如你是康康，最近经常玩手机，导致最近学习效果不理想。为此，你的父母很生气。全家人共同商议制定了一些针对学习的新家规。请以 “My Family Rules for Study” 为题，结合以下思维导图写一篇短文，向同学介绍这些家规。
要求：
1. 条理清晰，意思连贯，语句通顺，语法正确，书写规范，可适当发挥；
2. 70 个词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
假如你是康康，最近经常玩手机，导致最近学习效果不理想。为此，你的父母很生气。全家人共同商议制定了一些针对学习的新家规。请以 “My Family Rules for Study” 为题，结合以下思维导图写一篇短文，向同学介绍这些家规。
要求：
1. 条理清晰，意思连贯，语句通顺，语法正确，书写规范，可适当发挥；
2. 70 个词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
答案
参考范文
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题明确核心要求：身份是康康，主题是介绍家里新制定的学习家规，必须用到思维导图给出的全部因果信息，词数70左右，衔接给定的首尾句。接下来梳理写作思路：首先先交代背景，按照思维导图的逻辑顺出前因：过去我花大量时间玩手机→没法专心学习→学习表现不好→父母很生气，自然引出全家共同商议制定新学习家规的结果；之后用逻辑连接词列举2-3条合理的、符合场景的学习相关家规，内容贴合学生日常即可，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾句。写作时注意区分时态：描述过去发生的经历用一般过去时，介绍家规的要求用must/mustn't等情态动词表述，保证语句通顺没有语法错误。
【解析】
1. 搭建行文框架：
第一部分：承接开头句，补充简单的情绪铺垫后，完整串联思维导图给出的因果链，交代家规出台的缘由，确保题干给出的所有关键信息都不遗漏。
第二部分：用First、Second、Third等序数词做连接，列举3条符合学习场景的合理新家规，让文章条理清晰。
第三部分：直接衔接题目给出的结尾句即可。
2. 时态把控：描述之前沉迷手机、成绩下滑、父母生气这些过去发生的事，统一使用一般过去时；介绍家规的要求，用情态动词must/ mustn't表述规则，符合英语表达习惯。
3. 核查调整：通读全文，修正语法错误，调整语句长度，保证不计入首尾句的内容词数符合70词左右的要求，语义连贯流畅。
完整参考范文如下：
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
【答案】
参考范文：
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
【知识点】
因果逻辑表达，话题写作，时态正确运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常学习生活的基础类书面表达，难度较低，核心得分点是完整覆盖题干和思维导图给出的所有关键信息，梳理通顺前因后果的逻辑，用合适的连接词让家规的介绍条理清晰，注意区分过去经历和现行规则的不同时态，避免出现时态混用的错误，适当补充符合场景的合理内容即可达到写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题明确核心要求：身份是康康，主题是介绍家里新制定的学习家规，必须用到思维导图给出的全部因果信息，词数70左右，衔接给定的首尾句。接下来梳理写作思路：首先先交代背景，按照思维导图的逻辑顺出前因：过去我花大量时间玩手机→没法专心学习→学习表现不好→父母很生气，自然引出全家共同商议制定新学习家规的结果；之后用逻辑连接词列举2-3条合理的、符合场景的学习相关家规，内容贴合学生日常即可，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾句。写作时注意区分时态：描述过去发生的经历用一般过去时，介绍家规的要求用must/mustn't等情态动词表述，保证语句通顺没有语法错误。
【解析】
1. 搭建行文框架：
第一部分：承接开头句，补充简单的情绪铺垫后，完整串联思维导图给出的因果链，交代家规出台的缘由，确保题干给出的所有关键信息都不遗漏。
第二部分：用First、Second、Third等序数词做连接，列举3条符合学习场景的合理新家规，让文章条理清晰。
第三部分：直接衔接题目给出的结尾句即可。
2. 时态把控：描述之前沉迷手机、成绩下滑、父母生气这些过去发生的事，统一使用一般过去时；介绍家规的要求，用情态动词must/ mustn't表述规则，符合英语表达习惯。
3. 核查调整：通读全文，修正语法错误，调整语句长度，保证不计入首尾句的内容词数符合70词左右的要求，语义连贯流畅。
完整参考范文如下：
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
【答案】
参考范文：
My Family Rules for Study
I am Kangkang. I am a little sad now.
Last few days, I spent lots of time playing with my smart phone, and I couldn't pay attention to my study. So I didn't do well in my study. This made my parents get very angry with me. They helped me make new rules for my study. First, I mustn't play with my phone on school nights. Second, I must listen carefully in class. Third, I must do my homework first before watching TV after school.
These rules are important to me. I must follow them.
【知识点】
因果逻辑表达，话题写作，时态正确运用
【点评】
本题是贴近学生日常学习生活的基础类书面表达，难度较低，核心得分点是完整覆盖题干和思维导图给出的所有关键信息，梳理通顺前因后果的逻辑，用合适的连接词让家规的介绍条理清晰，注意区分过去经历和现行规则的不同时态，避免出现时态混用的错误，适当补充符合场景的合理内容即可达到写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.7
