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第四部分 书面表达
76. 假设你是王华,学校英语角将举办主题为“No pain, no gain”的分享会。请你根据以下提示,用英语写一篇短文,讲述你的一次经历。
◆ What was the challenge?
◆ How did you feel when you “failed”?
◆ What did you learn from it?
要求：
(1) 可适当增加细节,使内容连贯；
(2) 词数80左右。
76. 假设你是王华,学校英语角将举办主题为“No pain, no gain”的分享会。请你根据以下提示,用英语写一篇短文,讲述你的一次经历。
◆ What was the challenge?
◆ How did you feel when you “failed”?
◆ What did you learn from it?
要求：
(1) 可适当增加细节,使内容连贯；
(2) 词数80左右。
答案
76. One possible version:
The topic "No pain, no gain" reminds me of learning to ride a bike.
At first, it seemed impossible. I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises. Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up. My father encouraged me, saying, "Don't be afraid. Try again." So I kept practising.
Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited. This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.
The topic "No pain, no gain" reminds me of learning to ride a bike.
At first, it seemed impossible. I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises. Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up. My father encouraged me, saying, "Don't be afraid. Try again." So I kept practising.
Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited. This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.
解析
【分析】
首先，我们要紧扣主题“No pain, no gain”选择一段贴合生活的经历，比如学骑车、学乐器等，这类经历容易有细节支撑。接着，按照题目提示的三个要点展开：1. 明确挑战是什么，比如范文里的学骑车；2. 描述失败时的真实感受，如难过、想放弃；3. 总结从经历中学到的道理，呼应主题。写作时要注意结构清晰：开头点题引出经历，中间详细叙述过程，结尾升华主题，同时适当添加细节让内容更连贯，比如父亲的鼓励、受伤的细节等，控制词数在80左右。
【解析】
1. 开头点题：用“The topic 'No pain, no gain' reminds me of learning to ride a bike.”直接引出与主题相关的个人经历，快速切入主题。
2. 中间展开：
说明挑战：“At first, it seemed impossible.”点明学骑车初期的困难，接着描述失败的细节“I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises.”，让内容更真实。
表达感受：“Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up.”写出失败时的沮丧情绪，再加入父亲的鼓励“My father encouraged me, saying, 'Don't be afraid. Try again.'”，为后续坚持做铺垫，然后说明行动“So I kept practising.”。
3. 结尾升华：“Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited.”写出成功的喜悦，最后总结感悟“This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.”，呼应主题“No pain, no gain”，完成所有提示要点的表达，且词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The topic "No pain, no gain" reminds me of learning to ride a bike.
At first, it seemed impossible. I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises. Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up. My father encouraged me, saying, "Don't be afraid. Try again." So I kept practising.
Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited. This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.
【知识点】
记叙文写作技巧；主题类英语书面表达
【点评】
本文选取贴近生活的学骑车经历，结构清晰完整，紧扣题目所有提示要点，细节丰富（如膝盖淤青、父亲的鼓励），语言流畅自然，结尾的感悟精准呼应主题“No pain, no gain”，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文，能给学生很好的写作参考。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先，我们要紧扣主题“No pain, no gain”选择一段贴合生活的经历，比如学骑车、学乐器等，这类经历容易有细节支撑。接着，按照题目提示的三个要点展开：1. 明确挑战是什么，比如范文里的学骑车；2. 描述失败时的真实感受，如难过、想放弃；3. 总结从经历中学到的道理，呼应主题。写作时要注意结构清晰：开头点题引出经历，中间详细叙述过程，结尾升华主题，同时适当添加细节让内容更连贯，比如父亲的鼓励、受伤的细节等，控制词数在80左右。
【解析】
1. 开头点题：用“The topic 'No pain, no gain' reminds me of learning to ride a bike.”直接引出与主题相关的个人经历，快速切入主题。
2. 中间展开：
说明挑战：“At first, it seemed impossible.”点明学骑车初期的困难，接着描述失败的细节“I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises.”，让内容更真实。
表达感受：“Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up.”写出失败时的沮丧情绪，再加入父亲的鼓励“My father encouraged me, saying, 'Don't be afraid. Try again.'”，为后续坚持做铺垫，然后说明行动“So I kept practising.”。
3. 结尾升华：“Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited.”写出成功的喜悦，最后总结感悟“This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.”，呼应主题“No pain, no gain”，完成所有提示要点的表达，且词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
The topic "No pain, no gain" reminds me of learning to ride a bike.
At first, it seemed impossible. I fell down again and again and my knees were covered with bruises. Each fall made me feel sad and I almost wanted to give up. My father encouraged me, saying, "Don't be afraid. Try again." So I kept practising.
Finally, one day, I could ride smoothly! I was excited. This experience taught me that failure is not the end. If we keep trying and never give up, we will surely succeed in the end.
【知识点】
记叙文写作技巧；主题类英语书面表达
【点评】
本文选取贴近生活的学骑车经历，结构清晰完整，紧扣题目所有提示要点，细节丰富（如膝盖淤青、父亲的鼓励），语言流畅自然，结尾的感悟精准呼应主题“No pain, no gain”，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文，能给学生很好的写作参考。
【难度系数】
0.7
