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七、书面表达。
假如你是 Lily，请根据下面提示，给你的外国朋友 Elsa 写一封邮件，介绍你所在小区的基本情况。
小区名称：幸福小区（Happiness Neighbourhood）
周围环境：附近有超市、餐馆，还有……
生活感受：邻居们和善互助，如……（2 个例子）。
你的观点：……
要求：1. 内容完整，适当发挥；
2. 表达清楚，意思连贯，符合逻辑；
3. 注意格式，不少于 80 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Elsa，
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood.
假如你是 Lily，请根据下面提示，给你的外国朋友 Elsa 写一封邮件，介绍你所在小区的基本情况。
小区名称：幸福小区（Happiness Neighbourhood）
周围环境：附近有超市、餐馆，还有……
生活感受：邻居们和善互助，如……（2 个例子）。
你的观点：……
要求：1. 内容完整，适当发挥；
2. 表达清楚，意思连贯，符合逻辑；
3. 注意格式，不少于 80 词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Elsa，
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood.
答案
One possible version:
Dear Elsa,
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood. And I would like to invite you to my new home.
My neighbourhood is called Happiness Neighbourhood. It's very comfortable to live here. There are supermarkets and restaurants nearby. There are lots of things to do. We often swim in the sea and enjoy the sunshine on the beach. Sometimes we see films with my friends at weekends.
Our neighbours are kind and helpful. If your bike is broken, the engineers can help you fix it. If you are busy with work, volunteers can help you take care of your babies. We are like a family. I'm happy to live here. I am looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours,
Lily
Dear Elsa,
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood. And I would like to invite you to my new home.
My neighbourhood is called Happiness Neighbourhood. It's very comfortable to live here. There are supermarkets and restaurants nearby. There are lots of things to do. We often swim in the sea and enjoy the sunshine on the beach. Sometimes we see films with my friends at weekends.
Our neighbours are kind and helpful. If your bike is broken, the engineers can help you fix it. If you are busy with work, volunteers can help you take care of your babies. We are like a family. I'm happy to live here. I am looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours,
Lily
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先梳理明确所有要求的写作要点，避免漏写：第一要交代小区名称幸福小区，第二要描述周边环境，除了题干给出的超市、餐馆还要合理补充配套设施，第三要写出邻居和善互助的2个具体实例，第四要给出自己的居住观点。接下来思考行文逻辑：先承接题干给出的开头句做自然过渡，再依次介绍小区基本信息、周边生活配套、邻里相处的细节，最后收尾表达感受和邀约，最后补上邮件标准落款，全程注意语句连贯、语法正确，字数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 过渡衔接：承接题干给出的开头句，补充一句邀请对方来家里做客的过渡句，自然引出后续对小区的介绍。
2. 基础信息介绍：首先点明小区名称是Happiness Neighbourhood，先说明居住体验很舒适，接着先写题干要求的周边有超市、餐馆，再适当发挥补充附近可以去海滩游泳晒日光浴、周末可以和朋友去看电影的配套场景，让环境描述更饱满。
3. 邻里细节描写：点出邻居和善热心的特点，按照要求举两个具体实例：邻居里的工程师可以帮忙修理故障自行车，工作忙碌的时候社区志愿者可以帮忙照看孩子，体现邻里像一家人的氛围。
4. 收尾落款：表达自己住在这个小区很开心的观点，最后写出期待和对方见面的收尾句，补上邮件标准落款Yours, Lily，最后检查所有要点都覆盖、字数远超80词，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Elsa,
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood. And I would like to invite you to my new home.
My neighbourhood is called Happiness Neighbourhood. It's very comfortable to live here. There are supermarkets and restaurants nearby. There are lots of things to do. We often swim in the sea and enjoy the sunshine on the beach. Sometimes we see films with my friends at weekends.
Our neighbours are kind and helpful. If your bike is broken, the engineers can help you fix it. If you are busy with work, volunteers can help you take care of your babies. We are like a family. I'm happy to live here. I am looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours,
Lily
【知识点】
英文邮件书写，话题作文写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
这篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部写作要点，补充的周边休闲场景、两个邻里互助的实例都贴合生活实际，行文逻辑连贯，语气符合给好友写邮件的亲切风格，格式完整规范，字数符合要求，是介绍类居住话题写作的优质参考范本，学生写作时只要优先保证所有题干硬性要点不遗漏，再适当补充合理的生活化细节，就能拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先梳理明确所有要求的写作要点，避免漏写：第一要交代小区名称幸福小区，第二要描述周边环境，除了题干给出的超市、餐馆还要合理补充配套设施，第三要写出邻居和善互助的2个具体实例，第四要给出自己的居住观点。接下来思考行文逻辑：先承接题干给出的开头句做自然过渡，再依次介绍小区基本信息、周边生活配套、邻里相处的细节，最后收尾表达感受和邀约，最后补上邮件标准落款，全程注意语句连贯、语法正确，字数达标即可。
【解析】
1. 过渡衔接：承接题干给出的开头句，补充一句邀请对方来家里做客的过渡句，自然引出后续对小区的介绍。
2. 基础信息介绍：首先点明小区名称是Happiness Neighbourhood，先说明居住体验很舒适，接着先写题干要求的周边有超市、餐馆，再适当发挥补充附近可以去海滩游泳晒日光浴、周末可以和朋友去看电影的配套场景，让环境描述更饱满。
3. 邻里细节描写：点出邻居和善热心的特点，按照要求举两个具体实例：邻居里的工程师可以帮忙修理故障自行车，工作忙碌的时候社区志愿者可以帮忙照看孩子，体现邻里像一家人的氛围。
4. 收尾落款：表达自己住在这个小区很开心的观点，最后写出期待和对方见面的收尾句，补上邮件标准落款Yours, Lily，最后检查所有要点都覆盖、字数远超80词，符合写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Elsa,
How are you? I'm really glad to tell you something about my neighbourhood. And I would like to invite you to my new home.
My neighbourhood is called Happiness Neighbourhood. It's very comfortable to live here. There are supermarkets and restaurants nearby. There are lots of things to do. We often swim in the sea and enjoy the sunshine on the beach. Sometimes we see films with my friends at weekends.
Our neighbours are kind and helpful. If your bike is broken, the engineers can help you fix it. If you are busy with work, volunteers can help you take care of your babies. We are like a family. I'm happy to live here. I am looking forward to seeing you soon.
Yours,
Lily
【知识点】
英文邮件书写，话题作文写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
这篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部写作要点，补充的周边休闲场景、两个邻里互助的实例都贴合生活实际，行文逻辑连贯，语气符合给好友写邮件的亲切风格，格式完整规范，字数符合要求，是介绍类居住话题写作的优质参考范本，学生写作时只要优先保证所有题干硬性要点不遗漏，再适当补充合理的生活化细节，就能拿到不错的得分。
【难度系数】
0.7
