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你校八年级学生陈明(Chen Ming)是个热爱运动、乐于助人的男孩，却不幸患上严重的骨骼疾病(bone disease)，从上个月开始就一直没来学校了。他急需一台手术恢复健康，但手术费用高昂，其父母仅靠开出租车维生，无力承担。校学生会计划发起公益活动为他筹款，现请你以学生会名义写一封呼吁全校师生伸出援手的公开信。
【要点】
【要求】1. 结构清晰，需涵盖所有要点，逻辑连贯。
2. 用词准确、语句通顺。
3. 90 词左右。
【要点】
【要求】1. 结构清晰，需涵盖所有要点，逻辑连贯。
2. 用词准确、语句通顺。
3. 90 词左右。
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation,
Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a.m. to 3 p.m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
答案
One possible version:
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation,
Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a.m. to 3 p.m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation,
Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a.m. to 3 p.m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题，先明确写作体裁是学生会发布的公益募捐公开信，第一步先梳理所有必须覆盖的要点：1. 陈明的基本信息：八年级学生，性格热爱运动、乐于助人，身患严重骨病，上月起就没来上学；2. 陈明的困境：手术是恢复健康的必要选择，手术费用高昂，家庭仅靠父母开出租车维生，无力承担手术费；3. 明确设计的公益活动的具体时间、地点，最后发出呼吁。接下来要按照公开信的常规逻辑排布内容：先开门见山引出求助对象陈明，再说明他面临的经济困境，接着公布我们策划的筹款公益活动信息，最后号召全校师生参与，全程控制字数在90词左右，语气真诚有感染力，符合公益呼吁的场景。
【解析】
1. 开篇使用Dear all作为公开信的通用称呼，直接点明核心事件：八年级学生陈明急需大家的帮助。
2. 依次介绍陈明的患病情况：患上严重骨病，自上月起就无法到校上学，说明手术是他康复的必要途径，同时点明手术费用高昂，靠开出租车谋生的父母无力承担这笔开销，让读者快速了解他的困境。
3. 清晰公布策划的校园公益筹款活动：设置旧书义卖的活动形式，明确活动时间为下周六上午10点至下午3点，活动地点设在学校图书馆。
4. 最后发出暖心呼吁，号召大家伸出援手，落款标注发布主体校学生会，完全符合应用文格式要求。
【答案】
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a.m. to 3 p.m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
英文应用文写作，倡议书格式，信息整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中英语应用文写作题型，给定的要点清晰明确，学生只需要按照公开信的逻辑顺序整合所有信息，补充合理的活动细节，控制好字数，就能完成写作，同时也能锻炼学生用英文传递善意、完成公益呼吁的表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道题，先明确写作体裁是学生会发布的公益募捐公开信，第一步先梳理所有必须覆盖的要点：1. 陈明的基本信息：八年级学生，性格热爱运动、乐于助人，身患严重骨病，上月起就没来上学；2. 陈明的困境：手术是恢复健康的必要选择，手术费用高昂，家庭仅靠父母开出租车维生，无力承担手术费；3. 明确设计的公益活动的具体时间、地点，最后发出呼吁。接下来要按照公开信的常规逻辑排布内容：先开门见山引出求助对象陈明，再说明他面临的经济困境，接着公布我们策划的筹款公益活动信息，最后号召全校师生参与，全程控制字数在90词左右，语气真诚有感染力，符合公益呼吁的场景。
【解析】
1. 开篇使用Dear all作为公开信的通用称呼，直接点明核心事件：八年级学生陈明急需大家的帮助。
2. 依次介绍陈明的患病情况：患上严重骨病，自上月起就无法到校上学，说明手术是他康复的必要途径，同时点明手术费用高昂，靠开出租车谋生的父母无力承担这笔开销，让读者快速了解他的困境。
3. 清晰公布策划的校园公益筹款活动：设置旧书义卖的活动形式，明确活动时间为下周六上午10点至下午3点，活动地点设在学校图书馆。
4. 最后发出暖心呼吁，号召大家伸出援手，落款标注发布主体校学生会，完全符合应用文格式要求。
【答案】
Dear all,
Chen Ming, a hard - working Grade 8 student, needs our help!
Chen Ming is suffering from a serious bone disease and has been absent from school since last month. A necessary operation can heal him, but it costs over 300,000 yuan.
Chen Ming's parents are both taxi drivers. They cannot afford such an expensive operation. Without this operation, Chen Ming's life would be at risk.
Let's come together to support Chen Ming. We are planning to organize a book fair to raise money next Saturday from 10 a.m. to 3 p.m. in the school library.
Join us to show Chen Ming that he is not alone. If all of us give a helping hand, we can save Chen Ming!
The Students' Union
【知识点】
英文应用文写作，倡议书格式，信息整合表达
【点评】
本题属于初中英语应用文写作题型，给定的要点清晰明确，学生只需要按照公开信的逻辑顺序整合所有信息，补充合理的活动细节，控制好字数，就能完成写作，同时也能锻炼学生用英文传递善意、完成公益呼吁的表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
