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假如你校将举办以“中学生自我保护”为主题的英语征文活动，请根据下图信息写一篇题为“How to Protect Ourselves”的短文。
【注意】1.词数100左右(短文开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3.短文必须包含图中所提供的信息，并适当发挥。
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
假如你校将举办以“中学生自我保护”为主题的英语征文活动，请根据下图信息写一篇题为“How to Protect Ourselves”的短文。
【注意】1.词数100左右(短文开头已给出，不计入总词数)。
2.文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
3.短文必须包含图中所提供的信息，并适当发挥。
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
答案
One possible version
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：主题是中学生自我保护，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的所有信息，词数控制在100左右，不能出现真实个人、学校信息。第一步先拆分思维导图的内容，分为两大模块：校园场景的自我保护、日常生活的自我保护。先梳理校园部分的两个要点：一是严禁携带管制刀具，避免伤害自己和同学；二是不要和他人拥挤，尤其上下楼时注意避让，防止发生意外事故。再梳理日常生活部分的要点：要多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品，在此基础上可以合理补充符合自我保护主题的内容，比如日常出行注意交通安全、遇到紧急情况及时向警察求助等。之后用合适的逻辑连接词把所有要点串联起来，最后收尾总结，点明自我保护的重要性，完成全文，保证行文流畅符合英语征文的表达习惯。
【解析】
1. 确定写作框架：本文为主题类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态为一般现在时，结构分为三部分：开篇已给出，中间分点阐述不同场景的自我保护规则，结尾总结升华发出倡议。
2. 要点排布逻辑：用First、Second、Third、At last这类逻辑词串联内容，先讲校园内的两项安全注意事项，再讲日常饮食健康的要求，补充合理的日常自我保护常识，最后收尾总结。
3. 润色调整：保证所有图中给出的信息全部覆盖，语句通顺自然，词数符合要求，检查没有出现真实姓名、校名等违规内容。
最终成文如下：
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
【答案】
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
【知识点】
主题英语写作，逻辑连接词运用，安全话题表达
【点评】
本题属于图表提示类英语短文写作，既考查学生的基础英语语句组织能力，也通过自我保护的主题引导学生建立安全意识。写作时要注意不能遗漏思维导图给出的所有既定要点，补充的拓展内容要贴合自我保护的核心主题，行文多用分点连接词可以让文章逻辑更清晰，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：主题是中学生自我保护，需要完全覆盖思维导图给出的所有信息，词数控制在100左右，不能出现真实个人、学校信息。第一步先拆分思维导图的内容，分为两大模块：校园场景的自我保护、日常生活的自我保护。先梳理校园部分的两个要点：一是严禁携带管制刀具，避免伤害自己和同学；二是不要和他人拥挤，尤其上下楼时注意避让，防止发生意外事故。再梳理日常生活部分的要点：要多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品，在此基础上可以合理补充符合自我保护主题的内容，比如日常出行注意交通安全、遇到紧急情况及时向警察求助等。之后用合适的逻辑连接词把所有要点串联起来，最后收尾总结，点明自我保护的重要性，完成全文，保证行文流畅符合英语征文的表达习惯。
【解析】
1. 确定写作框架：本文为主题类说明文，使用第一人称，整体时态为一般现在时，结构分为三部分：开篇已给出，中间分点阐述不同场景的自我保护规则，结尾总结升华发出倡议。
2. 要点排布逻辑：用First、Second、Third、At last这类逻辑词串联内容，先讲校园内的两项安全注意事项，再讲日常饮食健康的要求，补充合理的日常自我保护常识，最后收尾总结。
3. 润色调整：保证所有图中给出的信息全部覆盖，语句通顺自然，词数符合要求，检查没有出现真实姓名、校名等违规内容。
最终成文如下：
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
【答案】
How to Protect Ourselves
It's important for us students to protect ourselves.
First, don't take restricted knives to school. They might hurt our classmates or ourselves. Second, there are too many students at school, and our hallways are not too wide. So don't crowd with others, especially when we go upstairs or downstairs. Or it may cause an accident. Third, we should eat more healthy food and we'd better keep away from junk food. At last, we must pay attention to the traffic. Remember to call the police for help when we meet an emergency.
In a word, it's our duty to protect ourselves. Let's start from now on.
【知识点】
主题英语写作，逻辑连接词运用，安全话题表达
【点评】
本题属于图表提示类英语短文写作，既考查学生的基础英语语句组织能力，也通过自我保护的主题引导学生建立安全意识。写作时要注意不能遗漏思维导图给出的所有既定要点，补充的拓展内容要贴合自我保护的核心主题，行文多用分点连接词可以让文章逻辑更清晰，更容易拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
