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动物与人类共享世界，是人类的好朋友。但由于种种原因，越来越多的野生动物处于濒危状态。假设某英文杂志社举办题为 "Let's protect wild animals!" 的征文比赛，请根据提示写一篇征文。提示如下：
1. 我们为什么要保护野生动物？
2. 我们该如何保护野生动物？
3. 你的倡议：……
要求：
1. 文中须包含所给提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 语言通顺，行文连贯，语法正确，书写规范；
3. 90 词左右；题目已给出，不计入总词数。
Let's protect wild animals!
动物与人类共享世界，是人类的好朋友。但由于种种原因，越来越多的野生动物处于濒危状态。假设某英文杂志社举办题为 "Let's protect wild animals!" 的征文比赛，请根据提示写一篇征文。提示如下：
1. 我们为什么要保护野生动物？
2. 我们该如何保护野生动物？
3. 你的倡议：……
要求：
1. 文中须包含所给提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 语言通顺，行文连贯，语法正确，书写规范；
3. 90 词左右；题目已给出，不计入总词数。
Let's protect wild animals!
One possible version:
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends
and play an important role in keeping
the balance of nature. If they disappear,
the ecosystem will be destroyed, which
will finally affect humans. So it's
necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild
animals? First, we should stop hunting
and killing them. Second, we need to
protect their living environments, such
as not cutting down too many trees.
Also, we can call on more people to join
in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts
can make a big difference. Let's work
together to make wild animals live safely!
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends
and play an important role in keeping
the balance of nature. If they disappear,
the ecosystem will be destroyed, which
will finally affect humans. So it's
necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild
animals? First, we should stop hunting
and killing them. Second, we need to
protect their living environments, such
as not cutting down too many trees.
Also, we can call on more people to join
in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts
can make a big difference. Let's work
together to make wild animals live safely!
答案
One possible version:
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends
and play an important role in keeping
the balance of nature. If they disappear,
the ecosystem will be destroyed, which
will finally affect humans. So it's
necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild
animals? First, we should stop hunting
and killing them. Second, we need to
protect their living environments, such
as not cutting down too many trees.
Also, we can call on more people to join
in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts
can make a big difference. Let's work
together to make wild animals live safely!
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends
and play an important role in keeping
the balance of nature. If they disappear,
the ecosystem will be destroyed, which
will finally affect humans. So it's
necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild
animals? First, we should stop hunting
and killing them. Second, we need to
protect their living environments, such
as not cutting down too many trees.
Also, we can call on more people to join
in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts
can make a big difference. Let's work
together to make wild animals live safely!
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题明确核心要求：主题是保护野生动物，必须覆盖三个指定要点，字数控制在90词左右。首先开篇先回应第一个要点，阐述保护野生动物的原因：先点明野生动物是人类的朋友，对维持自然生态平衡至关重要，一旦它们消失生态系统会被破坏，最终也会危害人类自身，顺理成章说明保护的必要性。接下来回应第二个要点，用逻辑连接词分点列举可落地的保护措施，比如禁止猎杀、保护它们的生存栖息地、向更多人宣传保护理念，内容贴合实际。最后回应第三个要点，向全体读者发出行动倡议，呼吁大家共同努力，同时注意行文连贯，语法准确，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 审题定框架：确定体裁为主题征文，人称以第一人称we为主，整体使用一般现在时，严格对应题干给出的三个写作要点，避免遗漏信息。
2. 分层填充内容：
第一层（开篇）：点明野生动物的重要价值，说明保护野生动物的必要性，完成第一个要点的表述。
第二层（主体）：用first、second等逻辑词衔接，依次列举停止猎杀野生动物、保护它们的生存环境、号召更多人参与保护等具体做法，完成第二个要点的表述。
第三层（收尾）：发出行动倡议，说明微小的努力也能带来巨大改变，呼吁大家共同行动让野生动物安全生存，完成第三个要点的表述。
3. 润色调整：检查语法错误，调整语句通顺度，控制总词数在90词左右，符合题目的字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends and play an important role in keeping the balance of nature. If they disappear, the ecosystem will be destroyed, which will finally affect humans. So it's necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild animals? First, we should stop hunting and killing them. Second, we need to protect their living environments, such as not cutting down too many trees. Also, we can call on more people to join in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts can make a big difference. Let's work together to make wild animals live safely!
【知识点】
英语倡议书写作；生态话题英语表达；逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部三个要点，行文结构清晰，从保护原因到具体举措再到行动倡议层层递进，使用了play an important role in、the balance of nature、make a big difference等亮点短语，逻辑衔接自然，语法准确，字数符合90词左右的要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀习作。同学们写作时可以优先保证所有要点都覆盖，再适当加入亮点表达提升作文得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题明确核心要求：主题是保护野生动物，必须覆盖三个指定要点，字数控制在90词左右。首先开篇先回应第一个要点，阐述保护野生动物的原因：先点明野生动物是人类的朋友，对维持自然生态平衡至关重要，一旦它们消失生态系统会被破坏，最终也会危害人类自身，顺理成章说明保护的必要性。接下来回应第二个要点，用逻辑连接词分点列举可落地的保护措施，比如禁止猎杀、保护它们的生存栖息地、向更多人宣传保护理念，内容贴合实际。最后回应第三个要点，向全体读者发出行动倡议，呼吁大家共同努力，同时注意行文连贯，语法准确，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
写作可按照三步完成：
1. 审题定框架：确定体裁为主题征文，人称以第一人称we为主，整体使用一般现在时，严格对应题干给出的三个写作要点，避免遗漏信息。
2. 分层填充内容：
第一层（开篇）：点明野生动物的重要价值，说明保护野生动物的必要性，完成第一个要点的表述。
第二层（主体）：用first、second等逻辑词衔接，依次列举停止猎杀野生动物、保护它们的生存环境、号召更多人参与保护等具体做法，完成第二个要点的表述。
第三层（收尾）：发出行动倡议，说明微小的努力也能带来巨大改变，呼吁大家共同行动让野生动物安全生存，完成第三个要点的表述。
3. 润色调整：检查语法错误，调整语句通顺度，控制总词数在90词左右，符合题目的字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Let's protect wild animals!
Wild animals are our good friends and play an important role in keeping the balance of nature. If they disappear, the ecosystem will be destroyed, which will finally affect humans. So it's necessary to protect them.
What can we do to protect wild animals? First, we should stop hunting and killing them. Second, we need to protect their living environments, such as not cutting down too many trees. Also, we can call on more people to join in the protection.
Let's take action now. Small efforts can make a big difference. Let's work together to make wild animals live safely!
【知识点】
英语倡议书写作；生态话题英语表达；逻辑连接词运用
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干要求的全部三个要点，行文结构清晰，从保护原因到具体举措再到行动倡议层层递进，使用了play an important role in、the balance of nature、make a big difference等亮点短语，逻辑衔接自然，语法准确，字数符合90词左右的要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀习作。同学们写作时可以优先保证所有要点都覆盖，再适当加入亮点表达提升作文得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
