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Ⅳ.书面表达
假设你是李华,你的美国笔友Mary听说中国地大物博、山川秀丽、风景迷人,因
此暑假要来中国旅游。请你根据她的问题回复邮件。
提示问题:Which places of interest should I visit?
How can I get there?
提示词语:mountain,pay a visit,by plane,enjoy
要求:1.内容应包含所有提示内容,可适当发挥;
2.语言表达要准确,语句要通顺;
3.80~100词。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
I'm sure you will have a good time there.
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是李华,你的美国笔友Mary听说中国地大物博、山川秀丽、风景迷人,因
此暑假要来中国旅游。请你根据她的问题回复邮件。
提示问题:Which places of interest should I visit?
How can I get there?
提示词语:mountain,pay a visit,by plane,enjoy
要求:1.内容应包含所有提示内容,可适当发挥;
2.语言表达要准确,语句要通顺;
3.80~100词。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
I'm sure you will have a good time there.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
The Yellow Mountain is one of the most famous mountains in China. It lies
in the south of Anhui. Every year, thousands of Chinese and foreigners pay a
visit there. It is convenient to get there. You can go there by train or by plane.
While climbing the mountain, you can enjoy the sea of clouds, beautiful pines
and unique rocks around you. What's more, in the early morning, when the
sun rises, the sky looks beautiful. You will never forget the breath-taking
scenery and fresh mountain air. I'm sure you will have a good time in China.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
The Yellow Mountain is one of the most famous mountains in China. It lies
in the south of Anhui. Every year, thousands of Chinese and foreigners pay a
visit there. It is convenient to get there. You can go there by train or by plane.
While climbing the mountain, you can enjoy the sea of clouds, beautiful pines
and unique rocks around you. What's more, in the early morning, when the
sun rises, the sky looks beautiful. You will never forget the breath-taking
scenery and fresh mountain air. I'm sure you will have a good time in China.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要理清核心写作要求：你要以李华的身份给要来中国旅游的美国笔友写回信，必须覆盖“推荐游览的景点、前往景点的交通方式”两个提示问题，还要自然用上给出的所有提示词，词数控制在80-100词。首先第一步结合提示词里的mountain，选择黄山作为推荐景点非常贴合主题；第二步先简单介绍黄山的知名度，顺理成章带出“大量游客前来游览”的内容，用上提示词pay a visit；第三步回答交通问题，点明可以选择乘飞机出行，用上提示词by plane，还可以补充其他交通方式让内容更真实；第四步描述游览体验，说明你可以欣赏到诸多特色美景，用上提示词enjoy，最后补充少量景观细节让行文流畅饱满，就可以满足所有得分要求。
【解析】
写作按照以下步骤完成即可：
1. 承接给定开头，首先推荐核心景点黄山，点明它是中国最知名的名山之一，坐落于安徽南部，对应提示词mountain；
2. 补充说明每年都有成千上万中外游客慕名前来游览，自然用上提示词pay a visit；
3. 回应交通方式的问题，说明前往黄山十分便利，你既可以坐火车也可以乘飞机抵达，用上提示词by plane；
4. 描述游览体验：爬山过程中你可以欣赏云海、奇松、怪石等特色景观，用上提示词enjoy，再补充清晨日出的绝美景色的细节，让内容更生动，最后衔接给定的结尾即可，全程控制词数在要求区间，保证语句通顺符合英语表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
The Yellow Mountain is one of the most famous mountains in China. It lies in the south of Anhui. Every year, thousands of Chinese and foreigners pay a visit there. It is convenient to get there. You can go there by train or by plane. While climbing the mountain, you can enjoy the sea of clouds, beautiful pines and unique rocks around you. What's more, in the early morning, when the sun rises, the sky looks beautiful. You will never forget the breath-taking scenery and fresh mountain air.
I'm sure you will have a good time there.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，旅游话题表达，提示词整合
【点评】
本题是提示引导类的应用文写作，所有得分要点都给出了明确提示，难度较低，考生只需要紧扣两个指定问题，把所有提示词自然融入行文，适当补充合理的游览细节，规避基础语法错误，控制词数在要求范围内，就可以拿到不错的分数，适合用来练习基础应用文写作的逻辑梳理能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要理清核心写作要求：你要以李华的身份给要来中国旅游的美国笔友写回信，必须覆盖“推荐游览的景点、前往景点的交通方式”两个提示问题，还要自然用上给出的所有提示词，词数控制在80-100词。首先第一步结合提示词里的mountain，选择黄山作为推荐景点非常贴合主题；第二步先简单介绍黄山的知名度，顺理成章带出“大量游客前来游览”的内容，用上提示词pay a visit；第三步回答交通问题，点明可以选择乘飞机出行，用上提示词by plane，还可以补充其他交通方式让内容更真实；第四步描述游览体验，说明你可以欣赏到诸多特色美景，用上提示词enjoy，最后补充少量景观细节让行文流畅饱满，就可以满足所有得分要求。
【解析】
写作按照以下步骤完成即可：
1. 承接给定开头，首先推荐核心景点黄山，点明它是中国最知名的名山之一，坐落于安徽南部，对应提示词mountain；
2. 补充说明每年都有成千上万中外游客慕名前来游览，自然用上提示词pay a visit；
3. 回应交通方式的问题，说明前往黄山十分便利，你既可以坐火车也可以乘飞机抵达，用上提示词by plane；
4. 描述游览体验：爬山过程中你可以欣赏云海、奇松、怪石等特色景观，用上提示词enjoy，再补充清晨日出的绝美景色的细节，让内容更生动，最后衔接给定的结尾即可，全程控制词数在要求区间，保证语句通顺符合英语表达习惯。
【答案】
Dear Mary,
I'm happy to hear that you are coming to visit China.
The Yellow Mountain is one of the most famous mountains in China. It lies in the south of Anhui. Every year, thousands of Chinese and foreigners pay a visit there. It is convenient to get there. You can go there by train or by plane. While climbing the mountain, you can enjoy the sea of clouds, beautiful pines and unique rocks around you. What's more, in the early morning, when the sun rises, the sky looks beautiful. You will never forget the breath-taking scenery and fresh mountain air.
I'm sure you will have a good time there.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，旅游话题表达，提示词整合
【点评】
本题是提示引导类的应用文写作，所有得分要点都给出了明确提示，难度较低，考生只需要紧扣两个指定问题，把所有提示词自然融入行文，适当补充合理的游览细节，规避基础语法错误，控制词数在要求范围内，就可以拿到不错的分数，适合用来练习基础应用文写作的逻辑梳理能力。
【难度系数】
0.6
