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为弘扬尊老敬老的传统美德,上周末你们班前往当地敬老院开展志愿服务活动。假设你是班长李华,请根据以下写作要点提示,给你校英语外教 Miss White 写一封电子邮件,介绍一下活动情况并分享你的感受。
注意:
1. 邮件内容应包括所有写作要点,条理清楚,行文连贯,可适当发挥;
2. 邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 词数 80~100。(邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
为弘扬尊老敬老的传统美德,上周末你们班前往当地敬老院开展志愿服务活动。假设你是班长李华,请根据以下写作要点提示,给你校英语外教 Miss White 写一封电子邮件,介绍一下活动情况并分享你的感受。
注意:
1. 邮件内容应包括所有写作要点,条理清楚,行文连贯,可适当发挥;
2. 邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 词数 80~100。(邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
On Saturday morning, all my classmates got together at school. Then we took the school bus to the old people's home. It didn't take us long to get there. When we arrived, we started to do different things. Some students decorated houses with colourful paper cuts. Others cleaned up the rooms. I cooked simple dishes with Wang Tao. The elderly smiled warmly, which moved us deeply.
Though tired, we felt happy because our efforts brightened their day. This activity taught me the importance of respecting and caring for the elderly.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
On Saturday morning, all my classmates got together at school. Then we took the school bus to the old people's home. It didn't take us long to get there. When we arrived, we started to do different things. Some students decorated houses with colourful paper cuts. Others cleaned up the rooms. I cooked simple dishes with Wang Tao. The elderly smiled warmly, which moved us deeply.
Though tired, we felt happy because our efforts brightened their day. This activity taught me the importance of respecting and caring for the elderly.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】首先明确邮件的写作格式，开头已给出，需覆盖三个写作要点：1. 前往敬老院的方式（结合参考短语get together、by school bus）；2. 在敬老院开展的活动（参考短语decorate houses、clean up、cook）；3. 活动后的感受（参考短语tired but happy）。写作时需使用一般过去时，保证语句连贯，词数控制在80-100，避免出现真实姓名和学校信息。
【解析】先说明集合与出行：周六早上同学在学校集合，乘校车前往敬老院；再描述活动内容：部分同学装饰房屋，部分打扫房间，“我”和同学一起做饭；最后表达感受：虽疲惫但开心，因为自己的付出给老人带来了快乐。全程结合参考短语，遵循一般过去时的时态要求，保持邮件的语气自然亲切。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
On Saturday morning, all my classmates got together at school. Then we took the school bus to the old people's home. It didn't take us long to get there. When we arrived, we started to do different things. Some students decorated houses with colourful paper cuts. Others cleaned up the rooms. I cooked simple dishes with Wang Tao. The elderly smiled warmly, which moved us deeply.
Though tired, we felt happy because our efforts brightened their day. This activity taught me the importance of respecting and caring for the elderly.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语书面表达、电子邮件写作、一般过去时
【点评】本题围绕尊老敬老的主题，考查学生整合要点、运用参考短语完成书面表达的能力，贴近生活实际，要求学生兼顾要点覆盖、语句连贯和格式规范，难度适中。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】先说明集合与出行：周六早上同学在学校集合，乘校车前往敬老院；再描述活动内容：部分同学装饰房屋，部分打扫房间，“我”和同学一起做饭；最后表达感受：虽疲惫但开心，因为自己的付出给老人带来了快乐。全程结合参考短语，遵循一般过去时的时态要求，保持邮件的语气自然亲切。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear Miss White,
I'm writing to share with you about our meaningful visit to the old people's home last weekend.
On Saturday morning, all my classmates got together at school. Then we took the school bus to the old people's home. It didn't take us long to get there. When we arrived, we started to do different things. Some students decorated houses with colourful paper cuts. Others cleaned up the rooms. I cooked simple dishes with Wang Tao. The elderly smiled warmly, which moved us deeply.
Though tired, we felt happy because our efforts brightened their day. This activity taught me the importance of respecting and caring for the elderly.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语书面表达、电子邮件写作、一般过去时
【点评】本题围绕尊老敬老的主题，考查学生整合要点、运用参考短语完成书面表达的能力，贴近生活实际，要求学生兼顾要点覆盖、语句连贯和格式规范，难度适中。
【难度系数】0.5
