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三、书面表达。
假设你是李辉，刚刚在英文杂志上读到一篇关于自然灾害的文章，你非常想和你的英国朋友戴卫分享。请给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括：
1. 你最害怕的一种自然灾害；
2. 简单介绍这种灾害并说明害怕的原因；
3. 期待回复。
写作要求：
1. 文中须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 不得使用真实的姓名和学校名称；
3. 词数80个左右。
Dear David,
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I have read an article about natural disasters.
Yours,
Li Hui
假设你是李辉，刚刚在英文杂志上读到一篇关于自然灾害的文章，你非常想和你的英国朋友戴卫分享。请给他写一封电子邮件，内容包括：
1. 你最害怕的一种自然灾害；
2. 简单介绍这种灾害并说明害怕的原因；
3. 期待回复。
写作要求：
1. 文中须包含所有提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 不得使用真实的姓名和学校名称；
3. 词数80个左右。
Dear David,
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I have read an article about natural disasters.
It made me think a lot, and I really want to share my thoughts with you. Among all natural disasters, I'm most afraid of floods. They usually happen during heavy rains, and when rivers rise, people die in great numbers. What scares me most is that they can wash away everything in their path, leaving people homeless. I once saw news about a flood. Families lost their homes and had to leave their hometowns. It was really terrible. What about you? Are you afraid of natural disasters? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hui
答案
三、Dear David,
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I
have read an article about natural
disasters. It made me think a lot, and I
really want to share my thoughts with you.
Among all natural disasters, I'm most
afraid of floods. They usually happen
during heavy rains, and when rivers rise,
people die in great numbers. What scares
me most is that they can wash away
everything in their path, leaving people
homeless. I once saw news about a flood.
Families lost their homes and had to leave
their hometowns. It was really terrible.
What about you? Are you afraid of
natural disasters? I'm looking forward to
your reply.
Yours,
Li Hui
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I
have read an article about natural
disasters. It made me think a lot, and I
really want to share my thoughts with you.
Among all natural disasters, I'm most
afraid of floods. They usually happen
during heavy rains, and when rivers rise,
people die in great numbers. What scares
me most is that they can wash away
everything in their path, leaving people
homeless. I once saw news about a flood.
Families lost their homes and had to leave
their hometowns. It was really terrible.
What about you? Are you afraid of
natural disasters? I'm looking forward to
your reply.
Yours,
Li Hui
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先完成审题：确定文体是写给好友的英文电子邮件，语气要亲切自然，不需要过于正式；明确必须覆盖的三个核心要点：点明自己最害怕的自然灾害、介绍该灾害并说明害怕的原因、表达期待回复的意愿，同时要控制词数在80左右，不能出现真实的姓名和学校信息。接下来梳理行文逻辑：先承接题目已经给出的开篇语句，自然过渡到想要和对方分享相关感受，之后直接点明自己最怕的灾害，接着简单介绍灾害的发生场景，结合具体危害说明害怕的理由，最后向对方抛出相关问题，引出期待回复的内容，全程顺着逻辑写就不会遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 衔接开篇：顺着题干给出的开头句，补充说明读完文章后自己有很多想法想要和David分享，自然引出后续内容，衔接流畅不突兀。
2. 完成第一个要点：直接点明自己最害怕的自然灾害是洪水，清晰回应题干要求。
3. 完成第二个要点：先介绍洪水的发生场景——多伴随暴雨出现，河流水位上涨时爆发，再说明害怕的原因：洪水会造成大量人员伤亡，冲毁沿途所有物品，让人们无家可归，还补充了自己看过相关洪水新闻的细节，让理由更真实有说服力。
4. 完成第三个要点：向David提问他是否害怕自然灾害，明确表达自己期待收到回复的想法，收尾符合邮件交流的逻辑，整体词数符合80左右的要求，没有出现违规的真实个人信息。
【答案】
Dear David,
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I have read an article about natural disasters. It made me think a lot, and I really want to share my thoughts with you.
Among all natural disasters, I'm most afraid of floods. They usually happen during heavy rains, and when rivers rise, people die in great numbers. What scares me most is that they can wash away everything in their path, leaving people homeless. I once saw news about a flood. Families lost their homes and had to leave their hometowns. It was really terrible.
What about you? Are you afraid of natural disasters? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hui
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，话题类书面表达，要点整合写作
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部要点，行文衔接流畅自然，从引出分享想法到介绍灾害、说明恐惧原因再到互动收尾的逻辑非常通顺，加入的洪水相关新闻的细节让内容更真实生动，用词地道贴合好友日常交流的非正式语气，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实信息，是非常适合学生参考的同话题写作范本。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先先完成审题：确定文体是写给好友的英文电子邮件，语气要亲切自然，不需要过于正式；明确必须覆盖的三个核心要点：点明自己最害怕的自然灾害、介绍该灾害并说明害怕的原因、表达期待回复的意愿，同时要控制词数在80左右，不能出现真实的姓名和学校信息。接下来梳理行文逻辑：先承接题目已经给出的开篇语句，自然过渡到想要和对方分享相关感受，之后直接点明自己最怕的灾害，接着简单介绍灾害的发生场景，结合具体危害说明害怕的理由，最后向对方抛出相关问题，引出期待回复的内容，全程顺着逻辑写就不会遗漏要点。
【解析】
1. 衔接开篇：顺着题干给出的开头句，补充说明读完文章后自己有很多想法想要和David分享，自然引出后续内容，衔接流畅不突兀。
2. 完成第一个要点：直接点明自己最害怕的自然灾害是洪水，清晰回应题干要求。
3. 完成第二个要点：先介绍洪水的发生场景——多伴随暴雨出现，河流水位上涨时爆发，再说明害怕的原因：洪水会造成大量人员伤亡，冲毁沿途所有物品，让人们无家可归，还补充了自己看过相关洪水新闻的细节，让理由更真实有说服力。
4. 完成第三个要点：向David提问他是否害怕自然灾害，明确表达自己期待收到回复的想法，收尾符合邮件交流的逻辑，整体词数符合80左右的要求，没有出现违规的真实个人信息。
【答案】
Dear David,
Haven't seen you for long! Recently I have read an article about natural disasters. It made me think a lot, and I really want to share my thoughts with you.
Among all natural disasters, I'm most afraid of floods. They usually happen during heavy rains, and when rivers rise, people die in great numbers. What scares me most is that they can wash away everything in their path, leaving people homeless. I once saw news about a flood. Families lost their homes and had to leave their hometowns. It was really terrible.
What about you? Are you afraid of natural disasters? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hui
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，话题类书面表达，要点整合写作
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部要点，行文衔接流畅自然，从引出分享想法到介绍灾害、说明恐惧原因再到互动收尾的逻辑非常通顺，加入的洪水相关新闻的细节让内容更真实生动，用词地道贴合好友日常交流的非正式语气，词数符合要求，没有出现违规的真实信息，是非常适合学生参考的同话题写作范本。
【难度系数】
0.6
