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Ⅶ.书面表达(满分20分)
假如你是李华，学校英语报正在举办征文比赛，题目是“An Invention that Is Changing the World”。请你根据以下提示，写一篇短文投稿，介绍智能手机(smartphones)给我们的生活带来的变化。
提示:1.简要介绍(What do you know about smartphones?)
2.对比变化(How have our lives changed compared with the past because of smartphones?)
3.你的观点(How do you like smartphones?)
要求:1.80词左右；
2.书写规范，要点齐全，包括表格全部信息；
3.文中不得出现真实人名、校名等信息。
假如你是李华，学校英语报正在举办征文比赛，题目是“An Invention that Is Changing the World”。请你根据以下提示，写一篇短文投稿，介绍智能手机(smartphones)给我们的生活带来的变化。
提示:1.简要介绍(What do you know about smartphones?)
2.对比变化(How have our lives changed compared with the past because of smartphones?)
3.你的观点(How do you like smartphones?)
要求:1.80词左右；
2.书写规范，要点齐全，包括表格全部信息；
3.文中不得出现真实人名、校名等信息。
答案
One possible version:
An Invention that Is Changing the World
Smartphones are one of the greatest inventions in the world. They were first invented by IBM in New York, the US, in 1992.
In the past, people used phones only to talk. Now, with smartphones, we can do almost everything: chat with friends, take photos, shop online and even study. We can share our happy moments with others anytime. They make our lives much easier and more colourful.
In my opinion, smartphones are really helpful, but we should use them in the right way. Don’t spend too much time on them, or they will be bad for our study and health.
An Invention that Is Changing the World
Smartphones are one of the greatest inventions in the world. They were first invented by IBM in New York, the US, in 1992.
In the past, people used phones only to talk. Now, with smartphones, we can do almost everything: chat with friends, take photos, shop online and even study. We can share our happy moments with others anytime. They make our lives much easier and more colourful.
In my opinion, smartphones are really helpful, but we should use them in the right way. Don’t spend too much time on them, or they will be bad for our study and health.
解析
【分析】
这是一道英语书面表达题，需围绕“An Invention that Is Changing the World”主题写作。解题时，先梳理题目要求的三个核心要点：1. 简要介绍智能手机（必须包含表格里的发明方IBM、发明时间1992、发明地点美国纽约）；2. 对比智能手机出现前后的生活变化（过去手机仅用于通话，现在可实现聊天、拍照、网购、学习等多种功能，让生活更便捷多彩）；3. 表达个人观点（智能手机虽有用，但要合理使用，避免过度沉迷）。写作时需注意字数控制在80词左右，不得出现真实人名、校名，确保要点齐全、语句通顺。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头点明主题，介绍智能手机的基本信息（点明其是伟大发明之一，补充表格中的发明方、时间、地点）；2. 中间对比变化，说明智能手机带来的便利（将过去和现在的手机功能对比，突出生活的改变）；3. 结尾表达观点，强调合理使用智能手机的重要性。全程注意语言简洁，符合英语表达习惯，控制字数。
【答案】
One possible version:
An Invention that Is Changing the World
Smartphones are one of the greatest inventions in the world. They were first invented by IBM in New York, the US, in 1992.
In the past, people used phones only to talk. Now, with smartphones, we can do almost everything: chat with friends, take photos, shop online and even study. We can share our happy moments with others anytime. They make our lives much easier and more colourful.
In my opinion, smartphones are really helpful, but we should use them in the right way. Don’t spend too much time on them, or they will be bad for our study and health.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、信息整合、观点表达
【点评】
该作文紧扣题目要求，涵盖所有提示要点，结构清晰，对比鲜明，观点明确，语言流畅，符合字数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达作品。
【难度系数】
0.3
这是一道英语书面表达题，需围绕“An Invention that Is Changing the World”主题写作。解题时，先梳理题目要求的三个核心要点：1. 简要介绍智能手机（必须包含表格里的发明方IBM、发明时间1992、发明地点美国纽约）；2. 对比智能手机出现前后的生活变化（过去手机仅用于通话，现在可实现聊天、拍照、网购、学习等多种功能，让生活更便捷多彩）；3. 表达个人观点（智能手机虽有用，但要合理使用，避免过度沉迷）。写作时需注意字数控制在80词左右，不得出现真实人名、校名，确保要点齐全、语句通顺。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：1. 开头点明主题，介绍智能手机的基本信息（点明其是伟大发明之一，补充表格中的发明方、时间、地点）；2. 中间对比变化，说明智能手机带来的便利（将过去和现在的手机功能对比，突出生活的改变）；3. 结尾表达观点，强调合理使用智能手机的重要性。全程注意语言简洁，符合英语表达习惯，控制字数。
【答案】
One possible version:
An Invention that Is Changing the World
Smartphones are one of the greatest inventions in the world. They were first invented by IBM in New York, the US, in 1992.
In the past, people used phones only to talk. Now, with smartphones, we can do almost everything: chat with friends, take photos, shop online and even study. We can share our happy moments with others anytime. They make our lives much easier and more colourful.
In my opinion, smartphones are really helpful, but we should use them in the right way. Don’t spend too much time on them, or they will be bad for our study and health.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、信息整合、观点表达
【点评】
该作文紧扣题目要求，涵盖所有提示要点，结构清晰，对比鲜明，观点明确，语言流畅，符合字数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达作品。
【难度系数】
0.3
