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七、书面表达(22分)
地震能够严重威胁人们的生命和财产安全,掌握地震逃生技能是我们中学生必备的能力。请你以“How to Survive an Earthquake”为题,写一篇英语短文。
提示词:sturdy furniture(结实的家具);elevator(电梯);drill(演习)
要求:1.要点齐全,书写工整,卷面干净。2.文中不能出现真实的学校名称、班级和姓名。3.语言表达准确,内容完整,可适当补充。90词左右。
How to Survive an Earthquake
地震能够严重威胁人们的生命和财产安全,掌握地震逃生技能是我们中学生必备的能力。请你以“How to Survive an Earthquake”为题,写一篇英语短文。
提示词:sturdy furniture(结实的家具);elevator(电梯);drill(演习)
要求:1.要点齐全,书写工整,卷面干净。2.文中不能出现真实的学校名称、班级和姓名。3.语言表达准确,内容完整,可适当补充。90词左右。
How to Survive an Earthquake
答案
七、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇说明文。②时态:一般现在时。③提示:写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏提示要点并适当发挥。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图，强调地震的突发性和防护知识的重要性；第二步，具体阐述地震中的逃生技巧；第三步，书写结语，强化安全意识，呼吁经常进行日常演习。
[词句积累]
①hold on 坚持住 ②stay away from 远离……
③When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately.(when 引导时间状语从句)
④Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives.(并列的动名词作主语)
One possible version:
How to Survive an Earthquake
Earthquakes often happen in many areas in China, causing serious damage. Knowing proper self-protection methods is important for everyone.
When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately. Stay under sturdy furniture like tables and hold on until the shaking stops. Stay away from windows or heavy objects that may fall. Never use elevators during or after earthquakes. If outdoors, move to open areas away from buildings.
Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives. Practise earthquake drills often with your family. Being prepared makes us safer!
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇说明文。②时态:一般现在时。③提示:写作要点已给出，注意不要遗漏提示要点并适当发挥。
[写作步骤]
第一步，表明写作意图，强调地震的突发性和防护知识的重要性；第二步，具体阐述地震中的逃生技巧；第三步，书写结语，强化安全意识，呼吁经常进行日常演习。
[词句积累]
①hold on 坚持住 ②stay away from 远离……
③When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately.(when 引导时间状语从句)
④Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives.(并列的动名词作主语)
One possible version:
How to Survive an Earthquake
Earthquakes often happen in many areas in China, causing serious damage. Knowing proper self-protection methods is important for everyone.
When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately. Stay under sturdy furniture like tables and hold on until the shaking stops. Stay away from windows or heavy objects that may fall. Never use elevators during or after earthquakes. If outdoors, move to open areas away from buildings.
Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives. Practise earthquake drills often with your family. Being prepared makes us safer!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先完成审题：明确体裁是介绍地震逃生方法的说明文，全文统一使用一般现在时，要把题干给出的三个提示词sturdy furniture、elevator、drill全部自然融入文中，不能遗漏要点，同时规避真实个人信息，词数控制在90词左右。接下来搭建写作逻辑：开头先点明地震的危害性，引出掌握逃生技能的重要性；中间部分分场景清晰罗列地震发生时的正确逃生做法，把三个提示词对应到不同的规则里；最后收尾呼吁大家重视日常演练，强化安全意识，整个行文逻辑通顺，要点齐全就可以完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：
体裁为实用说明文，时态统一用一般现在时，需覆盖所有提示要点，不得出现真实校名、人名等信息，词数符合90词左右的要求。
2. 行文结构搭建：
① 开篇段：直接点明地震会带来严重损失，引出掌握正确自护方法十分重要，开门见山点题。
② 主体段：分场景介绍逃生规则：地震晃动时立刻蹲伏躲在结实家具下方，远离窗户和高空坠物，绝对不要使用电梯，在室外要远离建筑前往开阔区域，自然融入sturdy furniture、elevator两个提示词。
③ 结尾段：强调冷静正确行动的重要性，呼吁日常和家人多开展地震演习，融入drill提示词，收尾升华主题。
【答案】
How to Survive an Earthquake
Earthquakes often happen in many areas in China, causing serious damage. Knowing proper self-protection methods is important for everyone.
When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately. Stay under sturdy furniture like tables and hold on until the shaking stops. Stay away from windows or heavy objects that may fall. Never use elevators during or after earthquakes. If outdoors, move to open areas away from buildings.
Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives. Practise earthquake drills often with your family. Being prepared makes us safer!
【知识点】
英语说明文写作；安全类话题表达；提示信息整合
【点评】
本题是贴近生活的实用类话题写作，难度较低，学生容易出现的失分点是遗漏给定提示词、逃生方法表述逻辑混乱。写作时按照“引入话题-罗列具体逃生技巧-总结呼吁”的三段式结构展开，合理使用时间状语从句、动名词作主语的基础句式提升表达丰富度，覆盖所有要点且词数合规，就能拿到较高分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先完成审题：明确体裁是介绍地震逃生方法的说明文，全文统一使用一般现在时，要把题干给出的三个提示词sturdy furniture、elevator、drill全部自然融入文中，不能遗漏要点，同时规避真实个人信息，词数控制在90词左右。接下来搭建写作逻辑：开头先点明地震的危害性，引出掌握逃生技能的重要性；中间部分分场景清晰罗列地震发生时的正确逃生做法，把三个提示词对应到不同的规则里；最后收尾呼吁大家重视日常演练，强化安全意识，整个行文逻辑通顺，要点齐全就可以完成写作。
【解析】
1. 审题梳理：
体裁为实用说明文，时态统一用一般现在时，需覆盖所有提示要点，不得出现真实校名、人名等信息，词数符合90词左右的要求。
2. 行文结构搭建：
① 开篇段：直接点明地震会带来严重损失，引出掌握正确自护方法十分重要，开门见山点题。
② 主体段：分场景介绍逃生规则：地震晃动时立刻蹲伏躲在结实家具下方，远离窗户和高空坠物，绝对不要使用电梯，在室外要远离建筑前往开阔区域，自然融入sturdy furniture、elevator两个提示词。
③ 结尾段：强调冷静正确行动的重要性，呼吁日常和家人多开展地震演习，融入drill提示词，收尾升华主题。
【答案】
How to Survive an Earthquake
Earthquakes often happen in many areas in China, causing serious damage. Knowing proper self-protection methods is important for everyone.
When the ground starts shaking, drop to the ground immediately. Stay under sturdy furniture like tables and hold on until the shaking stops. Stay away from windows or heavy objects that may fall. Never use elevators during or after earthquakes. If outdoors, move to open areas away from buildings.
Remember, staying calm and acting correctly can save lives. Practise earthquake drills often with your family. Being prepared makes us safer!
【知识点】
英语说明文写作；安全类话题表达；提示信息整合
【点评】
本题是贴近生活的实用类话题写作，难度较低，学生容易出现的失分点是遗漏给定提示词、逃生方法表述逻辑混乱。写作时按照“引入话题-罗列具体逃生技巧-总结呼吁”的三段式结构展开，合理使用时间状语从句、动名词作主语的基础句式提升表达丰富度，覆盖所有要点且词数合规，就能拿到较高分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
