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学校要举办英语演讲比赛,主题是"爱使我幸福"。请你积极参与,分享你的幸福故事。
要求:(1)中心突出,语义连贯,层次清晰,书写规范;
(2)文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名;
(3)词数80左右,开头已经写好,不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to stand here to share my experience about love with you.
要求:(1)中心突出,语义连贯,层次清晰,书写规范;
(2)文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名;
(3)词数80左右,开头已经写好,不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to stand here to share my experience about love with you.
It was a snowy afternoon and I was
eating some snacks and watching TV in the
sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew
my attention. That was about some children
from the children's home. They wanted to sell
their drawings to raise money. Everyone held
their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was
touched and decided to help them, so I asked
my father to take me there. I put all my
favourite snacks into a big bag and finally
we arrived there. I gave all the food to them
and bought some of their drawings. I saw
the smiles on their faces and the light in
their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that
moment, I learned the secret of happiness—
"Help others, help ourselves."
eating some snacks and watching TV in the
sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew
my attention. That was about some children
from the children's home. They wanted to sell
their drawings to raise money. Everyone held
their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was
touched and decided to help them, so I asked
my father to take me there. I put all my
favourite snacks into a big bag and finally
we arrived there. I gave all the food to them
and bought some of their drawings. I saw
the smiles on their faces and the light in
their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that
moment, I learned the secret of happiness—
"Help others, help ourselves."
答案
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to
stand here to share my experience about love
with you. It was a snowy afternoon and I was
eating some snacks and watching TV in the
sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew
my attention. That was about some children
from the children's home. They wanted to sell
their drawings to raise money. Everyone held
their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was
touched and decided to help them, so I asked
my father to take me there. I put all my
favourite snacks into a big bag and finally
we arrived there. I gave all the food to them
and bought some of their drawings. I saw
the smiles on their faces and the light in
their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that
moment, I learned the secret of happiness—
"Help others, help ourselves."
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to
stand here to share my experience about love
with you. It was a snowy afternoon and I was
eating some snacks and watching TV in the
sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew
my attention. That was about some children
from the children's home. They wanted to sell
their drawings to raise money. Everyone held
their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was
touched and decided to help them, so I asked
my father to take me there. I put all my
favourite snacks into a big bag and finally
we arrived there. I gave all the food to them
and bought some of their drawings. I saw
the smiles on their faces and the light in
their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that
moment, I learned the secret of happiness—
"Help others, help ourselves."
解析
【分析】
本题为英语话题续写作文，主题是“爱使我幸福”，要求在给定开头基础上续写，需围绕“爱带来幸福”的核心，选取具体小事例，做到中心突出、语义连贯，词数80左右且不出现真实信息。解题思路：先承接开头设定具体场景（如接触需要帮助的群体），再描述自己的爱心行动，最后点明“爱使我幸福”的感悟，确保内容贴合主题、语言流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，设定场景：以“下雪天看到福利院孩子卖画筹钱”为具体事例，引出爱心行动的契机；
2. 描述行动：写自己带零食、买画帮助孩子的具体行为；
3. 点明感悟：通过看到孩子的笑容，体会到“帮助他人就是帮助自己”的幸福真谛，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to stand here to share my experience about love with you. It was a snowy afternoon and I was eating some snacks and watching TV in the sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew my attention. That was about some children from the children's home. They wanted to sell their drawings to raise money. Everyone held their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was touched and decided to help them, so I asked my father to take me there. I put all my favourite snacks into a big bag and finally we arrived there. I gave all the food to them and bought some of their drawings. I saw the smiles on their faces and the light in their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that moment, I learned the secret of happiness—"Help others, help ourselves."
【知识点】
英语话题作文写作，英语记叙文写作，主题表达
【点评】
范文紧扣“爱使我幸福”主题，通过帮助福利院孩子的具体事例，情感真挚自然，层次清晰，语言简洁流畅，准确诠释了爱带来的幸福感，符合题目各项要求，是一篇优秀的续写作文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语话题续写作文，主题是“爱使我幸福”，要求在给定开头基础上续写，需围绕“爱带来幸福”的核心，选取具体小事例，做到中心突出、语义连贯，词数80左右且不出现真实信息。解题思路：先承接开头设定具体场景（如接触需要帮助的群体），再描述自己的爱心行动，最后点明“爱使我幸福”的感悟，确保内容贴合主题、语言流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，设定场景：以“下雪天看到福利院孩子卖画筹钱”为具体事例，引出爱心行动的契机；
2. 描述行动：写自己带零食、买画帮助孩子的具体行为；
3. 点明感悟：通过看到孩子的笑容，体会到“帮助他人就是帮助自己”的幸福真谛，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone! I'm really excited to stand here to share my experience about love with you. It was a snowy afternoon and I was eating some snacks and watching TV in the sofa. Suddenly, an unusual advertisement drew my attention. That was about some children from the children's home. They wanted to sell their drawings to raise money. Everyone held their pictures with their sweet smiles. I was touched and decided to help them, so I asked my father to take me there. I put all my favourite snacks into a big bag and finally we arrived there. I gave all the food to them and bought some of their drawings. I saw the smiles on their faces and the light in their eyes. I felt warm and happy. At that moment, I learned the secret of happiness—"Help others, help ourselves."
【知识点】
英语话题作文写作，英语记叙文写作，主题表达
【点评】
范文紧扣“爱使我幸福”主题，通过帮助福利院孩子的具体事例，情感真挚自然，层次清晰，语言简洁流畅，准确诠释了爱带来的幸福感，符合题目各项要求，是一篇优秀的续写作文。
【难度系数】
0.5
