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初中三年来，你一定有最想感谢的人。某校英语报社正在举行“The Person I Want to Thank Most”的征文活动，请根据下列内容提示，写一篇英语短文参加投稿，谈谈你最想感谢谁？你们之间有过什么经历或故事？他/她带给你什么影响？
【要点】1. What's he/she like?
2. What's the experience?
3. What do you learn from him/her?
【要求】1. 短文应包括所有的要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名。
3. 词数80—120，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me.
初中三年来，你一定有最想感谢的人。某校英语报社正在举行“The Person I Want to Thank Most”的征文活动，请根据下列内容提示，写一篇英语短文参加投稿，谈谈你最想感谢谁？你们之间有过什么经历或故事？他/她带给你什么影响？
【要点】1. What's he/she like?
2. What's the experience?
3. What do you learn from him/her?
【要求】1. 短文应包括所有的要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名。
3. 词数80—120，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me.
答案
One possible version
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me. The person I want to thank most is my father. He is a tall man with a pair of glasses. Everyone says he is a kind-hearted man. He often helps his neighbours and some strangers whom he doesn't know at all. Besides, my father is the person who knows me best.
On special days like my birthday, my father always gives me a surprise. He knows exactly what I like. Besides, whenever I meet difficulties or feel depressed in my study, my father will immediately read my thoughts, tell me the right way to do things, and tell me to face it bravely.
All in all, my father has a great influence on me. He has helped me get through those hard times and will surely lead me to a bright future.
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me. The person I want to thank most is my father. He is a tall man with a pair of glasses. Everyone says he is a kind-hearted man. He often helps his neighbours and some strangers whom he doesn't know at all. Besides, my father is the person who knows me best.
On special days like my birthday, my father always gives me a surprise. He knows exactly what I like. Besides, whenever I meet difficulties or feel depressed in my study, my father will immediately read my thoughts, tell me the right way to do things, and tell me to face it bravely.
All in all, my father has a great influence on me. He has helped me get through those hard times and will surely lead me to a bright future.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：主题是“最想感谢的人”，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在80-120，不能出现真实人名地名。解题思路可以按三步走：1. 开篇承接题目给出的开头，直接点明你最想感谢的对象，紧接着描述对方的外貌、性格特质，完成第一个要点的内容；2. 选取1-2件贴合初中日常学习生活的真实感强的小事，比如你考试失利情绪低落时对方的开导、对方日常热心助人的细节，把事件的经过讲清楚，完成第二个要点的内容；3. 最后总结对方对你的影响，点明你从他身上学到的宝贵品质，收尾点题，完成第三个要点。写作过程中可以适当用besides、whenever这类衔接词让行文更连贯，写完后检查要点是否齐全、有没有违规的真实信息、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
这是一篇提示类感恩主题记叙文，写作步骤如下：
步骤1：承接给定开头，直接点明最想感谢的人是父亲，补充描述他的外貌（戴眼镜的高个子）和性格（热心善良、最懂我），覆盖第一个要点“人物特征”。
步骤2：选取两个生活化的经历：生日时总能准备我喜欢的惊喜，我学习遇到困难情绪低落时总能及时开导我、教我勇敢面对，把事件细节写清楚，覆盖第二个要点“相关经历”。
步骤3：收尾总结父亲对自己的深远影响，点明他陪我度过难关、指引我走向未来，写出自己从他身上学到的待人友善、直面困难的品质，覆盖第三个要点“收获与影响”。
全文逻辑清晰，没有出现真实人名地名，词数符合要求，行文流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me. The person I want to thank most is my father. He is a tall man with a pair of glasses. Everyone says he is a kind-hearted man. He often helps his neighbours and some strangers whom he doesn't know at all. Besides, my father is the person who knows me best.
On special days like my birthday, my father always gives me a surprise. He knows exactly what I like. Besides, whenever I meet difficulties or feel depressed in my study, my father will immediately read my thoughts, tell me the right way to do things, and tell me to face it bravely.
All in all, my father has a great influence on me. He has helped me get through those hard times and will surely lead me to a bright future.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点类书面表达
【点评】
本题是初中英语高频考察的感恩类话题作文，贴近学生的真实生活，给出的三个写作要点指向明确，不容易出现跑题问题。写作时注意不要堆砌过多无关事例，选取1-2件印象最深的经历细化描写，同时注意区分时态：描述人物常态特征用一般现在时，描述过往经历用对应的过去时态，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：主题是“最想感谢的人”，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在80-120，不能出现真实人名地名。解题思路可以按三步走：1. 开篇承接题目给出的开头，直接点明你最想感谢的对象，紧接着描述对方的外貌、性格特质，完成第一个要点的内容；2. 选取1-2件贴合初中日常学习生活的真实感强的小事，比如你考试失利情绪低落时对方的开导、对方日常热心助人的细节，把事件的经过讲清楚，完成第二个要点的内容；3. 最后总结对方对你的影响，点明你从他身上学到的宝贵品质，收尾点题，完成第三个要点。写作过程中可以适当用besides、whenever这类衔接词让行文更连贯，写完后检查要点是否齐全、有没有违规的真实信息、词数是否符合要求即可。
【解析】
这是一篇提示类感恩主题记叙文，写作步骤如下：
步骤1：承接给定开头，直接点明最想感谢的人是父亲，补充描述他的外貌（戴眼镜的高个子）和性格（热心善良、最懂我），覆盖第一个要点“人物特征”。
步骤2：选取两个生活化的经历：生日时总能准备我喜欢的惊喜，我学习遇到困难情绪低落时总能及时开导我、教我勇敢面对，把事件细节写清楚，覆盖第二个要点“相关经历”。
步骤3：收尾总结父亲对自己的深远影响，点明他陪我度过难关、指引我走向未来，写出自己从他身上学到的待人友善、直面困难的品质，覆盖第三个要点“收获与影响”。
全文逻辑清晰，没有出现真实人名地名，词数符合要求，行文流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version
The Person I Want to Thank Most
Looking back at these past three years, many people have helped me. The person I want to thank most is my father. He is a tall man with a pair of glasses. Everyone says he is a kind-hearted man. He often helps his neighbours and some strangers whom he doesn't know at all. Besides, my father is the person who knows me best.
On special days like my birthday, my father always gives me a surprise. He knows exactly what I like. Besides, whenever I meet difficulties or feel depressed in my study, my father will immediately read my thoughts, tell me the right way to do things, and tell me to face it bravely.
All in all, my father has a great influence on me. He has helped me get through those hard times and will surely lead me to a bright future.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作，要点类书面表达
【点评】
本题是初中英语高频考察的感恩类话题作文，贴近学生的真实生活，给出的三个写作要点指向明确，不容易出现跑题问题。写作时注意不要堆砌过多无关事例，选取1-2件印象最深的经历细化描写，同时注意区分时态：描述人物常态特征用一般现在时，描述过往经历用对应的过去时态，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
