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学校正在开展 "公益世界·少年同行" 主题英语征文活动，旨在让同学们了解全球慈善力量，践行社会责任。请结合参考案例与搜索信息，完成一篇英语短文，内容需涵盖以下两点：
1. Briefly (简要) introduce at least two well-known charities (e.g. World Vision, Orbis, UNICEF...) and their ways of helping others.
2. Share your understanding of charity and what middle school students can do for charity.
注意事项：
1. 要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数不少于 90，短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
学校正在开展 "公益世界·少年同行" 主题英语征文活动，旨在让同学们了解全球慈善力量，践行社会责任。请结合参考案例与搜索信息，完成一篇英语短文，内容需涵盖以下两点：
1. Briefly (简要) introduce at least two well-known charities (e.g. World Vision, Orbis, UNICEF...) and their ways of helping others.
2. Share your understanding of charity and what middle school students can do for charity.
注意事项：
1. 要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 词数不少于 90，短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
One well-known charity is World Vision. It helps poor children and families by providing clean water, food, and education. For example, it trains local people to become teachers and supports health programmes. Another charity, Orbis, uses a Flying Eye Hospital to treat people with eye problems in poor areas. It also trains local doctors and nurses.
I think charity means giving help and hope to those in need. We students can donate our pocket money and raise money by selling old toys or books. Handing out leaflets is also a good choice.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
答案
One possible version:
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
One well-known charity is World Vision. It helps poor children and families by providing clean water, food, and education. For example, it trains local people to become teachers and supports health programmes. Another charity, Orbis, uses a Flying Eye Hospital to treat people with eye problems in poor areas. It also trains local doctors and nurses.
I think charity means giving help and hope to those in need. We students can donate our pocket money and raise money by selling old toys or books. Handing out leaflets is also a good choice.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
(90 words)
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
One well-known charity is World Vision. It helps poor children and families by providing clean water, food, and education. For example, it trains local people to become teachers and supports health programmes. Another charity, Orbis, uses a Flying Eye Hospital to treat people with eye problems in poor areas. It also trains local doctors and nurses.
I think charity means giving help and hope to those in need. We students can donate our pocket money and raise money by selling old toys or books. Handing out leaflets is also a good choice.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
(90 words)
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要先审题，明确核心要求：一是要介绍至少2个知名国际慈善组织的帮扶方式，二是要分享自己对慈善的理解以及中学生可参与的公益行动，且首尾已经给出无需自行创作，词数要求不少于90。接下来梳理写作逻辑：首先承接给定的开头句，先依次介绍两个你熟悉的指定范围内的慈善机构，每个机构都点明它的核心帮扶对象和具体的帮扶举措，内容要具体不空洞；之后自然过渡到个人感悟，结合中学生的身份谈对慈善的理解，再列举几个中学生力所能及的公益行为，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾，写完后检查要点是否全部覆盖、语句是否通顺、词数是否达标即可。
【解析】
按照题目要求的写作逻辑，分步完成内容填充：
1. 承接开头，引出第一个慈善机构World Vision：点明它的帮扶对象是贫困儿童和家庭，具体帮扶方式包括提供干净的饮用水、食物和教育资源，补充它会培训当地居民成为教师、落地健康项目，让介绍更详实。
2. 引出第二个慈善机构Orbis：点明它的特色项目是飞行眼科医院，为贫困地区的眼疾患者提供治疗，同时还会培训当地的医护人员，内容符合该机构的实际职能。
3. 过渡到个人观点：先点明自己对慈善的理解——慈善就是向有需要的人传递帮助和希望，之后列举中学生可以落地的行动：比如捐出零花钱、通过售卖旧玩具旧书筹款、分发公益宣传页等，内容贴合学生身份，最后衔接题目给定的结尾即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
One well-known charity is World Vision. It helps poor children and families by providing clean water, food, and education. For example, it trains local people to become teachers and supports health programmes. Another charity, Orbis, uses a Flying Eye Hospital to treat people with eye problems in poor areas. It also trains local doctors and nurses.
I think charity means giving help and hope to those in need. We students can donate our pocket money and raise money by selling old toys or books. Handing out leaflets is also a good choice.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
(90 words)
【知识点】
1. 公益话题英语写作
2. 要点类作文写作规范
3. 英语语句连贯表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部核心要点，两个慈善机构的介绍准确清晰，列举的中学生公益行动贴合实际，语言表达流畅自然，词数符合要求，完全符合本次英语征文的评分标准。同学们写作这类要点类作文时，可以优先选择自己熟悉的词汇和句式表达，优先保证所有题干要求的要点都覆盖到，避免遗漏失分。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步要先审题，明确核心要求：一是要介绍至少2个知名国际慈善组织的帮扶方式，二是要分享自己对慈善的理解以及中学生可参与的公益行动，且首尾已经给出无需自行创作，词数要求不少于90。接下来梳理写作逻辑：首先承接给定的开头句，先依次介绍两个你熟悉的指定范围内的慈善机构，每个机构都点明它的核心帮扶对象和具体的帮扶举措，内容要具体不空洞；之后自然过渡到个人感悟，结合中学生的身份谈对慈善的理解，再列举几个中学生力所能及的公益行为，最后自然衔接题目给出的结尾，写完后检查要点是否全部覆盖、语句是否通顺、词数是否达标即可。
【解析】
按照题目要求的写作逻辑，分步完成内容填充：
1. 承接开头，引出第一个慈善机构World Vision：点明它的帮扶对象是贫困儿童和家庭，具体帮扶方式包括提供干净的饮用水、食物和教育资源，补充它会培训当地居民成为教师、落地健康项目，让介绍更详实。
2. 引出第二个慈善机构Orbis：点明它的特色项目是飞行眼科医院，为贫困地区的眼疾患者提供治疗，同时还会培训当地的医护人员，内容符合该机构的实际职能。
3. 过渡到个人观点：先点明自己对慈善的理解——慈善就是向有需要的人传递帮助和希望，之后列举中学生可以落地的行动：比如捐出零花钱、通过售卖旧玩具旧书筹款、分发公益宣传页等，内容贴合学生身份，最后衔接题目给定的结尾即可。
【答案】
One possible version:
Charities play an important role in changing people's lives for the better. Many famous charities around the world have helped lots of people in need.
One well-known charity is World Vision. It helps poor children and families by providing clean water, food, and education. For example, it trains local people to become teachers and supports health programmes. Another charity, Orbis, uses a Flying Eye Hospital to treat people with eye problems in poor areas. It also trains local doctors and nurses.
I think charity means giving help and hope to those in need. We students can donate our pocket money and raise money by selling old toys or books. Handing out leaflets is also a good choice.
Let's work hand in hand to make the world a better place!
(90 words)
【知识点】
1. 公益话题英语写作
2. 要点类作文写作规范
3. 英语语句连贯表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题干要求的全部核心要点，两个慈善机构的介绍准确清晰，列举的中学生公益行动贴合实际，语言表达流畅自然，词数符合要求，完全符合本次英语征文的评分标准。同学们写作这类要点类作文时，可以优先选择自己熟悉的词汇和句式表达，优先保证所有题干要求的要点都覆盖到，避免遗漏失分。
【难度系数】
0.7
