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五、书面表达。
29. 假如你是Tom,有一位来自坦桑尼亚的笔友Mike。他熟知家乡的乞力马扎罗山,对自然胜景情有独钟。近期他计划开启“世界自然奇观之旅”,第一站锁定中国,特意写信咨询。请你写一封回信,为他推荐一处中国的自然奇观。内容需包含：
(1)What natural wonder do you want to introduce,and where is it in China?
(2)What are its special facts(such as height,length,size...)?
(3)What can tourists do there?
要求:(1)词数80左右;(2)开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Mike,
After knowing your hometown's Mount Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural wonder that is
Yours,
Tom
29. 假如你是Tom,有一位来自坦桑尼亚的笔友Mike。他熟知家乡的乞力马扎罗山,对自然胜景情有独钟。近期他计划开启“世界自然奇观之旅”,第一站锁定中国,特意写信咨询。请你写一封回信,为他推荐一处中国的自然奇观。内容需包含：
(1)What natural wonder do you want to introduce,and where is it in China?
(2)What are its special facts(such as height,length,size...)?
(3)What can tourists do there?
要求:(1)词数80左右;(2)开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Mike,
After knowing your hometown's Mount Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural wonder that is
Yours,
Tom
答案
29. Dear Mike,
After knowing your hometown's Mount
Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural
wonder that is Qinghai Lake. It's in Qinghai
Province,western China.
As the largest saltwater lake in China,it
covers about 4, 340 square kilometres. Its
water is so clear that you can see the soft
grass under the surface. Every spring,
thousands of rare birds fly here to rest,making
it more lively than many other natural spots. A
special fact is that it never freezes completely
in winter,which is quite amazing.
You can walk along the shores, take
photos with birds or enjoy the fresh air. It's
much more peaceful than busy cities, and
you'll easily connect with nature. I'm sure
you'll love it!
Yours,
Tom
After knowing your hometown's Mount
Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural
wonder that is Qinghai Lake. It's in Qinghai
Province,western China.
As the largest saltwater lake in China,it
covers about 4, 340 square kilometres. Its
water is so clear that you can see the soft
grass under the surface. Every spring,
thousands of rare birds fly here to rest,making
it more lively than many other natural spots. A
special fact is that it never freezes completely
in winter,which is quite amazing.
You can walk along the shores, take
photos with birds or enjoy the fresh air. It's
much more peaceful than busy cities, and
you'll easily connect with nature. I'm sure
you'll love it!
Yours,
Tom
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心任务：以Tom的身份给笔友Mike推荐一处中国自然奇观，必须覆盖题干给出的三个指定要点，词数控制在80左右，开头已经给出无需重写。首先第一步，先选定一个你熟悉的、有明确特色数据的中国自然景观，比如青海湖、黄山等；第二步，先回应第一个要点，直接点明景观名称和它在中国的具体地理位置；第三步，补充该景观的专属特殊信息，比如面积、高度、独有自然特征，对应第二个要点的要求；第四步，列举游客在当地可以体验的活动，完成第三个要点，最后用友好的语气收尾，表达对Mike前来游玩的期待，全程注意书信的口语化友好语气，不要生硬堆砌内容。
【解析】
1. 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明推荐的自然奇观是青海湖，同时说明它地处中国西部的青海省，完成第一个要点的输出。
2. 紧接着介绍青海湖的核心特殊属性：它是中国最大的咸水湖，面积约4340平方千米，补充湖水清澈、春季有大量珍稀候鸟栖息、冬季不会完全封冻的独有特色，用具体的事实满足第二个要点的要求。
3. 最后列举游客可以在当地开展的活动：沿湖漫步、和候鸟合影、呼吸新鲜空气，点明在这里可以轻松亲近自然，收尾表达对Mike游玩的期待，完整覆盖第三个要点，整体行文流畅自然，符合笔友交流的语气，词数符合题干要求。
【答案】
Dear Mike,
After knowing your hometown's Mount Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural wonder that is Qinghai Lake. It's in Qinghai Province,western China.
As the largest saltwater lake in China,it covers about 4, 340 square kilometres. Its water is so clear that you can see the soft grass under the surface. Every spring, thousands of rare birds fly here to rest,making it more lively than many other natural spots. A special fact is that it never freezes completely in winter,which is quite amazing.
You can walk along the shores, take photos with birds or enjoy the fresh air. It's much more peaceful than busy cities, and you'll easily connect with nature. I'm sure you'll love it!
Yours,
Tom
【知识点】
英文书信写作，景物话题表达，要点式写作规范
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干指定的全部三个写作要点，选取青海湖作为推荐对象，给出的景观数据准确，特色描述生动真实，推荐的游玩活动贴合景观实际，语气符合笔友之间轻松友好的交流感，行文逻辑层层递进，从基础信息介绍到特色亮点说明再到游玩体验推荐，过渡自然，词数符合题干要求，是一篇合格的应用文范例。学生写作时也可以替换为黄山、九寨沟等其他自然景观，只要完整覆盖三个要点即可符合写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心任务：以Tom的身份给笔友Mike推荐一处中国自然奇观，必须覆盖题干给出的三个指定要点，词数控制在80左右，开头已经给出无需重写。首先第一步，先选定一个你熟悉的、有明确特色数据的中国自然景观，比如青海湖、黄山等；第二步，先回应第一个要点，直接点明景观名称和它在中国的具体地理位置；第三步，补充该景观的专属特殊信息，比如面积、高度、独有自然特征，对应第二个要点的要求；第四步，列举游客在当地可以体验的活动，完成第三个要点，最后用友好的语气收尾，表达对Mike前来游玩的期待，全程注意书信的口语化友好语气，不要生硬堆砌内容。
【解析】
1. 开篇承接给定开头，直接点明推荐的自然奇观是青海湖，同时说明它地处中国西部的青海省，完成第一个要点的输出。
2. 紧接着介绍青海湖的核心特殊属性：它是中国最大的咸水湖，面积约4340平方千米，补充湖水清澈、春季有大量珍稀候鸟栖息、冬季不会完全封冻的独有特色，用具体的事实满足第二个要点的要求。
3. 最后列举游客可以在当地开展的活动：沿湖漫步、和候鸟合影、呼吸新鲜空气，点明在这里可以轻松亲近自然，收尾表达对Mike游玩的期待，完整覆盖第三个要点，整体行文流畅自然，符合笔友交流的语气，词数符合题干要求。
【答案】
Dear Mike,
After knowing your hometown's Mount Kilimanjaro,I'd like to introduce the natural wonder that is Qinghai Lake. It's in Qinghai Province,western China.
As the largest saltwater lake in China,it covers about 4, 340 square kilometres. Its water is so clear that you can see the soft grass under the surface. Every spring, thousands of rare birds fly here to rest,making it more lively than many other natural spots. A special fact is that it never freezes completely in winter,which is quite amazing.
You can walk along the shores, take photos with birds or enjoy the fresh air. It's much more peaceful than busy cities, and you'll easily connect with nature. I'm sure you'll love it!
Yours,
Tom
【知识点】
英文书信写作，景物话题表达，要点式写作规范
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖题干指定的全部三个写作要点，选取青海湖作为推荐对象，给出的景观数据准确，特色描述生动真实，推荐的游玩活动贴合景观实际，语气符合笔友之间轻松友好的交流感，行文逻辑层层递进，从基础信息介绍到特色亮点说明再到游玩体验推荐，过渡自然，词数符合题干要求，是一篇合格的应用文范例。学生写作时也可以替换为黄山、九寨沟等其他自然景观，只要完整覆盖三个要点即可符合写作要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
