② 典例赏析
如今我们的零花钱逐渐增多,这无疑是对我们理财能力的考验。请根据以下提示写一篇短文,谈一谈你平时是怎样使用零花钱的。
1. How do you spend your pocket money? 2. Do you think you use it wisely?
3. How do you plan to spend your pocket money in the future?
注意:
1. 短文需包含上述要点,可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
2. 70词左右。


90 英语 七年级 上册 译林版
审题指导:
1.体裁:说明文 2.时态:以一般现在时为主 3.人称:第一人称
写作框架:

优秀范文:

Now parents give us more and more pocket money, and each of us has our own way of spending it.
I usually spend most of my pocket money on books and school things, and sometimes I buy my favourite snacks. I think I use it wisely, because I never waste money on useless things.
In the future, I plan to save some pocket money to help children in poor areas buy school things. I think it is very meaningful, and helping others can make me happy.

【分析】
本题为七年级英语要点式写作题，要求围绕零花钱的使用展开，需覆盖三个指定问题，人称用第一人称，时态以一般现在时为主，未来计划用一般将来时，字数控制在70词左右。解题思路：1. 开头引出零花钱话题；2. 回答平时如何使用零花钱（购买学习用品、书籍，偶尔买零食）；3. 说明自己是否明智使用（不浪费在无用物品，因此明智）；4. 阐述未来计划（存钱帮助贫困地区孩子买学习用品），确保内容连贯，符合要求。
【解析】
写作时需注意：① 人称统一用第一人称，时态：描述日常情况用一般现在时，未来计划用一般将来时；② 必须覆盖三个核心要点：零花钱的日常花费方式、是否明智使用、未来花费计划；③ 适当添加细节（如“不浪费在无用东西”“帮助贫困孩子买学习用品”）使行文连贯，控制字数在70词左右，契合七年级英语写作要求。
【答案】
Now parents give us more and more pocket money, and each of us has our own way of spending it.
I usually spend most of my pocket money on books and school things, and sometimes I buy my favourite snacks. I think I use it wisely, because I never waste money on useless things.
In the future, I plan to save some pocket money to help children in poor areas buy school things. I think it is very meaningful, and helping others can make me happy.
【知识点】
英语要点式写作，初中英语应用文写作，时态运用
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目所有要点，内容具体充实，行文逻辑清晰，第一人称和时态运用准确恰当，还融入了帮助他人的积极情感，符合七年级学生的写作水平，是一篇优秀的要点式短文。
【难度系数】
0.7