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时光荏苒,不觉中八年级的学习生活接近尾声。回首过去,一年来自己在学习和生活上的成长与变化良多;展望未来,九年级的机遇与挑战并存,但心中依然憧憬无限。你校八年级同学将以“My growth and changes”为题举行英语演讲比赛,请根据征稿内容写一篇短文,具体内容如下:
要求:1. 所写内容必须包括题目要求的所有信息,可作适当发挥;
2. 不少于80词。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
3. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等信息。
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
Thanks for your listening!
时光荏苒,不觉中八年级的学习生活接近尾声。回首过去,一年来自己在学习和生活上的成长与变化良多;展望未来,九年级的机遇与挑战并存,但心中依然憧憬无限。你校八年级同学将以“My growth and changes”为题举行英语演讲比赛,请根据征稿内容写一篇短文,具体内容如下:
要求:1. 所写内容必须包括题目要求的所有信息,可作适当发挥;
2. 不少于80词。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数;
3. 不得使用真实姓名、校名和地名等信息。
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
Thanks for your listening!
答案
One possible version:
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
In study, I was lazy and didn't like doing homework in the past. Now, I study hard and finish my homework carefully every day. For going green, I try to protect the environment. I always turn off the lights when I leave a room. And I use my own cloth bags when I go shopping. I also have good manners. I queue for my turn patiently in the dining hall. And I give my seat to old people on the bus. To be kind, I donate books and clothes to the children in poor areas.
For Grade 9, there are chances and challenges. I hope I can study better and help more people. I want to be a better person.
Thanks for your listening!
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
In study, I was lazy and didn't like doing homework in the past. Now, I study hard and finish my homework carefully every day. For going green, I try to protect the environment. I always turn off the lights when I leave a room. And I use my own cloth bags when I go shopping. I also have good manners. I queue for my turn patiently in the dining hall. And I give my seat to old people on the bus. To be kind, I donate books and clothes to the children in poor areas.
For Grade 9, there are chances and challenges. I hope I can study better and help more people. I want to be a better person.
Thanks for your listening!
解析
【分析】
这是一道英语话题写作题，要求以“My growth and changes”为题，结合给定的思维导图（学习、环保、良好礼仪、善意、未来希望五个维度），回顾过去一年的成长变化并展望未来。解题思路：1. 先梳理思维导图的所有要点，确保写作不遗漏；2. 针对每个要点，结合“过去与现在对比”的要求补充具体细节（如学习的过去状态与现在改变、环保的具体行为等）；3. 按“已给开头-中间分述成长-已给结尾”的结构组织内容，正确使用时态（过去时写过去情况，现在时写现在变化），语言符合演讲语气，适当发挥细节，保证字数达标。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 搭建框架：开头已给出，中间分五个部分展开：①学习：对比过去（懒惰、不喜欢作业）和现在（努力、认真完成作业）；②环保：列举两个具体行为（离开房间关灯、购物用布袋）；③良好礼仪：排队等候、给老人让座；④善意：捐赠书和衣服给贫困地区孩子；⑤未来希望：九年级要学习更好、帮助更多人。
2. 时态运用：过去情况用一般过去时，现在变化用一般现在时，确保时态一致。
3. 语言润色：使用合适短语（turn off, give seat to, donate...to等），语句流畅，符合八年级英语水平，补充细节让内容充实，字数不少于80词。
4. 检查确认：涵盖所有要求信息，无真实个人信息，语法正确，结构清晰。
【答案】
One possible version:
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
In study, I was lazy and didn't like doing homework in the past. Now, I study hard and finish my homework carefully every day. For going green, I try to protect the environment. I always turn off the lights when I leave a room. And I use my own cloth bags when I go shopping. I also have good manners. I queue for my turn patiently in the dining hall. And I give my seat to old people on the bus. To be kind, I donate books and clothes to the children in poor areas.
For Grade 9, there are chances and challenges. I hope I can study better and help more people. I want to be a better person.
Thanks for your listening!
【知识点】
英语话题写作、时态运用、常用短语搭配
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，全面覆盖题目要求的所有信息点，通过“过去与现在对比”清晰体现成长变化，结构层次分明，语言流畅自然，符合演讲语境，适当的细节补充让内容更具体，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
这是一道英语话题写作题，要求以“My growth and changes”为题，结合给定的思维导图（学习、环保、良好礼仪、善意、未来希望五个维度），回顾过去一年的成长变化并展望未来。解题思路：1. 先梳理思维导图的所有要点，确保写作不遗漏；2. 针对每个要点，结合“过去与现在对比”的要求补充具体细节（如学习的过去状态与现在改变、环保的具体行为等）；3. 按“已给开头-中间分述成长-已给结尾”的结构组织内容，正确使用时态（过去时写过去情况，现在时写现在变化），语言符合演讲语气，适当发挥细节，保证字数达标。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 搭建框架：开头已给出，中间分五个部分展开：①学习：对比过去（懒惰、不喜欢作业）和现在（努力、认真完成作业）；②环保：列举两个具体行为（离开房间关灯、购物用布袋）；③良好礼仪：排队等候、给老人让座；④善意：捐赠书和衣服给贫困地区孩子；⑤未来希望：九年级要学习更好、帮助更多人。
2. 时态运用：过去情况用一般过去时，现在变化用一般现在时，确保时态一致。
3. 语言润色：使用合适短语（turn off, give seat to, donate...to等），语句流畅，符合八年级英语水平，补充细节让内容充实，字数不少于80词。
4. 检查确认：涵盖所有要求信息，无真实个人信息，语法正确，结构清晰。
【答案】
One possible version:
My growth and changes
Hello, everyone! I'm Daniel from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in some ways.
In study, I was lazy and didn't like doing homework in the past. Now, I study hard and finish my homework carefully every day. For going green, I try to protect the environment. I always turn off the lights when I leave a room. And I use my own cloth bags when I go shopping. I also have good manners. I queue for my turn patiently in the dining hall. And I give my seat to old people on the bus. To be kind, I donate books and clothes to the children in poor areas.
For Grade 9, there are chances and challenges. I hope I can study better and help more people. I want to be a better person.
Thanks for your listening!
【知识点】
英语话题写作、时态运用、常用短语搭配
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，全面覆盖题目要求的所有信息点，通过“过去与现在对比”清晰体现成长变化，结构层次分明，语言流畅自然，符合演讲语境，适当的细节补充让内容更具体，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
