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假设你是社区中心志愿者的一员。你了解到社区里有一位孤寡老人(Mr Zhang)需要帮助。请根据下面的思维导图组织内容，代表社区中心写一封倡议信，号召人们伸出援手，请用文字传递温暖与支持吧！
注意事项：
1. 倡议书须包括所给内容要点，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 须展开合理想象，作适当发挥；
3. 词数不少于 90，倡议书的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help!
If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
假设你是社区中心志愿者的一员。你了解到社区里有一位孤寡老人(Mr Zhang)需要帮助。请根据下面的思维导图组织内容，代表社区中心写一封倡议信，号召人们伸出援手，请用文字传递温暖与支持吧！
注意事项：
1. 倡议书须包括所给内容要点，要求语句通顺、意思连贯；
2. 须展开合理想象，作适当发挥；
3. 词数不少于 90，倡议书的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help!
His name is Mr Zhang. He is old and lives alone. He suffers from lots of problems. For example, he has difficulty walking and seeing clearly. Therefore, he cannot go shopping for food or clean his house by himself. What' worse, his family is not here. Let's come together to help him. We can visit him every other morning. We can help him buy food, clean his house, and read letters to him. Many hands make light work. We require support from all of you to do some voluntary work. If you have some free time, please join us.
If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
答案
One possible version:
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help! His name is Mr Zhang. He is old and lives alone. He suffers from lots of problems. For example, he has difficulty walking and seeing clearly. Therefore, he cannot go shopping for food or clean his house by himself. What' worse, his family is not here.
Let's come together to help him. We can visit him every other morning. We can help him buy food, clean his house, and read letters to him.
Many hands make light work. We require support from all of you to do some voluntary work. If you have some free time, please join us. If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
(90 words)
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help! His name is Mr Zhang. He is old and lives alone. He suffers from lots of problems. For example, he has difficulty walking and seeing clearly. Therefore, he cannot go shopping for food or clean his house by himself. What' worse, his family is not here.
Let's come together to help him. We can visit him every other morning. We can help him buy food, clean his house, and read letters to him.
Many hands make light work. We require support from all of you to do some voluntary work. If you have some free time, please join us. If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
(90 words)
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作类型是社区倡议信，核心目的是号召社区居民帮助独居老人张爷爷。第一步先梳理思维导图给出的全部必填要点：1. 需要帮助的对象是老人张先生；2. 他的三个困境：独居、附近没有家人，行走和视物有困难，无法自行购物和打扫房屋；3. 补充合理可落地的帮扶措施。写作时可以把中间内容分成两部分完成：第一部分完整介绍张爷爷的基本情况和他面临的所有困难，把给定要点自然融入，用逻辑连接词让语句通顺；第二部分针对他的困难提出对应的帮扶方案，再发出温暖的号召，衔接好题目已经给出的开头和结尾，保证总词数达标，内容贴合主题。
【解析】
1. 承接题目给出的开头，先点明求助老人的身份是Mr Zhang，依次介绍他的现状：独自居住，身边没有家人照料；身体上行走不便、视力不佳，因此没办法独自外出购物，也没法自己打扫房屋，用for example、what's worse这类连接词串联内容，让逻辑流畅，所有给定要点全部覆盖。
2. 过渡到帮扶方案的部分，结合老人的困境合理发挥：比如大家可以轮流定期上门探望，帮他采购生活物资、打扫屋子，还可以给他读信件、陪他解闷，这些内容都符合老人的实际需求，不会脱离主题。
3. 最后加入符合倡议书风格的过渡语句，比如引用谚语Many hands make light work（众人拾柴火焰高），呼吁有空闲时间的居民都加入志愿帮扶，自然衔接题目给出的结尾句，整体语气温暖有号召力，词数满足不少于90的要求。
【答案】
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help! His name is Mr Zhang. He is old and lives alone. He suffers from lots of problems. For example, he has difficulty walking and seeing clearly. Therefore, he cannot go shopping for food or clean his house by himself. What' worse, his family is not here.
Let's come together to help him. We can visit him every other morning. We can help him buy food, clean his house, and read letters to him.
Many hands make light work. We require support from all of you to do some voluntary work. If you have some free time, please join us. If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
【知识点】
倡议书写作，提纲类英语作文，一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题属于贴近生活的应用文写作，既考查学生整合思维导图要点、连贯组织英语语句的基础写作能力，也引导学生结合生活实际补充合理的帮扶细节，同时渗透了关爱老年群体的德育导向，写作时要注意不要遗漏题干给出的所有要点，补充的内容要贴合独居老人的实际需求，保证倡议内容真实有感染力。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作类型是社区倡议信，核心目的是号召社区居民帮助独居老人张爷爷。第一步先梳理思维导图给出的全部必填要点：1. 需要帮助的对象是老人张先生；2. 他的三个困境：独居、附近没有家人，行走和视物有困难，无法自行购物和打扫房屋；3. 补充合理可落地的帮扶措施。写作时可以把中间内容分成两部分完成：第一部分完整介绍张爷爷的基本情况和他面临的所有困难，把给定要点自然融入，用逻辑连接词让语句通顺；第二部分针对他的困难提出对应的帮扶方案，再发出温暖的号召，衔接好题目已经给出的开头和结尾，保证总词数达标，内容贴合主题。
【解析】
1. 承接题目给出的开头，先点明求助老人的身份是Mr Zhang，依次介绍他的现状：独自居住，身边没有家人照料；身体上行走不便、视力不佳，因此没办法独自外出购物，也没法自己打扫房屋，用for example、what's worse这类连接词串联内容，让逻辑流畅，所有给定要点全部覆盖。
2. 过渡到帮扶方案的部分，结合老人的困境合理发挥：比如大家可以轮流定期上门探望，帮他采购生活物资、打扫屋子，还可以给他读信件、陪他解闷，这些内容都符合老人的实际需求，不会脱离主题。
3. 最后加入符合倡议书风格的过渡语句，比如引用谚语Many hands make light work（众人拾柴火焰高），呼吁有空闲时间的居民都加入志愿帮扶，自然衔接题目给出的结尾句，整体语气温暖有号召力，词数满足不少于90的要求。
【答案】
Dear all,
An elderly man in our community needs our help! His name is Mr Zhang. He is old and lives alone. He suffers from lots of problems. For example, he has difficulty walking and seeing clearly. Therefore, he cannot go shopping for food or clean his house by himself. What' worse, his family is not here.
Let's come together to help him. We can visit him every other morning. We can help him buy food, clean his house, and read letters to him.
Many hands make light work. We require support from all of you to do some voluntary work. If you have some free time, please join us. If all of us give a helping hand, we can make Mr Zhang's life much better!
The Community Centre
【知识点】
倡议书写作，提纲类英语作文，一般现在时运用
【点评】
本题属于贴近生活的应用文写作，既考查学生整合思维导图要点、连贯组织英语语句的基础写作能力，也引导学生结合生活实际补充合理的帮扶细节，同时渗透了关爱老年群体的德育导向，写作时要注意不要遗漏题干给出的所有要点，补充的内容要贴合独居老人的实际需求，保证倡议内容真实有感染力。
【难度系数】
0.6
