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假如你是李华,你的好朋友 Judy 经常脖子痛。请你根据写作要点,给她写封邮件。
写作要点:1. What Judy shouldn't do. 2. What Judy should do.
写作要求:1.包含所有写作要点,条理清晰,行文连贯,可适当发挥;2.文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息;3.不少于 80 词(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)。
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
Yours,
Li Hua
写作要点:1. What Judy shouldn't do. 2. What Judy should do.
写作要求:1.包含所有写作要点,条理清晰,行文连贯,可适当发挥;2.文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息;3.不少于 80 词(开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)。
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
First, you should avoid playing computer games too much. Spending hours in front of the screen with your head in a fixed position can put great pressure on your neck.
Second, don't read books with your head lowered for a long time. Try to keep your neck in a comfortable position while reading.
Besides, it's important to take proper breaks. For example, take a 10-minute break every hour to stretch your body.
Last but not least, doing proper exercise like neck-stretching exercises and jogging can strengthen your neck muscles and improve blood circulation.
I hope you will feel better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
First, you should avoid playing computer games too much. Spending hours in front of the screen with your head in a fixed position can put great pressure on your neck. Second, don't read books with your head lowered for a long time. Try to keep your neck in a comfortable position while reading. Besides, it's important to take proper breaks. For example, take a 10-minute break every hour to stretch your body. Last but not least, doing proper exercise like neck-stretching exercises and jogging can strengthen your neck muscles and improve blood circulation.
I hope you will feel better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
First, you should avoid playing computer games too much. Spending hours in front of the screen with your head in a fixed position can put great pressure on your neck. Second, don't read books with your head lowered for a long time. Try to keep your neck in a comfortable position while reading. Besides, it's important to take proper breaks. For example, take a 10-minute break every hour to stretch your body. Last but not least, doing proper exercise like neck-stretching exercises and jogging can strengthen your neck muscles and improve blood circulation.
I hope you will feel better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】本题为英语应用文写作题，要求以李华的身份给脖子痛的好友Judy写邮件提建议，需覆盖“Judy不该做的事”和“Judy应该做的事”两个要点。解题思路：① 利用已给出的邮件开头，中间部分用连接词分点组织内容，使条理清晰；② 先阐述“不该做”的行为（如长时间玩电脑、低头看书）及原因；③ 再说明“该做”的行为（如定时休息、颈部拉伸运动）；④ 补充合理结尾，确保行文连贯、字数达标，不出现真实信息。
【解析】写作时需遵循以下步骤：1. 分点呈现建议：用First引出“不该做”的内容，如避免长时间玩电脑（固定姿势压迫颈部）、不要长时间低头看书；2. 用Besides、Last but not least等连接词引出“该做”的内容，如每小时休息10分钟拉伸、做颈部拉伸或慢跑等运动；3. 确保所有写作要点都覆盖，行文连贯，符合邮件格式，字数不少于80词。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
First, you should avoid playing computer games too much. Spending hours in front of the screen with your head in a fixed position can put great pressure on your neck. Second, don't read books with your head lowered for a long time. Try to keep your neck in a comfortable position while reading. Besides, it's important to take proper breaks. For example, take a 10-minute break every hour to stretch your body. Last but not least, doing proper exercise like neck-stretching exercises and jogging can strengthen your neck muscles and improve blood circulation.
I hope you will feel better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语邮件写作、健康话题英语表达、英语分点写作
【点评】本题结合生活健康场景，考查实用英语写作能力，要求条理清晰地分点给出建议，既贴近学生日常，又能有效检验学生的语言组织与表达能力，是英语写作中常见的实用题型。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】写作时需遵循以下步骤：1. 分点呈现建议：用First引出“不该做”的内容，如避免长时间玩电脑（固定姿势压迫颈部）、不要长时间低头看书；2. 用Besides、Last but not least等连接词引出“该做”的内容，如每小时休息10分钟拉伸、做颈部拉伸或慢跑等运动；3. 确保所有写作要点都覆盖，行文连贯，符合邮件格式，字数不少于80词。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Judy,
I'm sorry to hear that you often have a sore neck. Here is my advice.
First, you should avoid playing computer games too much. Spending hours in front of the screen with your head in a fixed position can put great pressure on your neck. Second, don't read books with your head lowered for a long time. Try to keep your neck in a comfortable position while reading. Besides, it's important to take proper breaks. For example, take a 10-minute break every hour to stretch your body. Last but not least, doing proper exercise like neck-stretching exercises and jogging can strengthen your neck muscles and improve blood circulation.
I hope you will feel better soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语邮件写作、健康话题英语表达、英语分点写作
【点评】本题结合生活健康场景，考查实用英语写作能力，要求条理清晰地分点给出建议，既贴近学生日常，又能有效检验学生的语言组织与表达能力，是英语写作中常见的实用题型。
【难度系数】0.5
