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六、书面表达。
假如你是一条小鱼，你所居住的小河在治理之前充斥着塑料垃圾和废水，你和同伴们深受水污染和塑料污染的毒害。但人类意识到了这个问题并积极地对河流进行了治理和保护。现在你居住的家园变得干净清澈，你和同伴们的心情也很愉快。请结合下面的表格内容，以 “Changes in My River Home”为题，描写你的居住环境的改变以及对人类的感谢。
注意：
1. 短文须包括以上提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 文中不得出现学生真实的姓名和校名；
3. 词数80个左右。
Changes in My River Home
假如你是一条小鱼，你所居住的小河在治理之前充斥着塑料垃圾和废水，你和同伴们深受水污染和塑料污染的毒害。但人类意识到了这个问题并积极地对河流进行了治理和保护。现在你居住的家园变得干净清澈，你和同伴们的心情也很愉快。请结合下面的表格内容，以 “Changes in My River Home”为题，描写你的居住环境的改变以及对人类的感谢。
注意：
1. 短文须包括以上提示信息，可适当发挥；
2. 文中不得出现学生真实的姓名和校名；
3. 词数80个左右。
Changes in My River Home
答案
范例：
Changes in My River Home
I am a small fish living in a river. A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic bags and bottles were everywhere, and I often got stuck in them. Dirty water from factories made the river smelly and dark. Gray smoke filled the air above, and noisy machines by the river scared me a lot. I felt sad and could hardly breathe.
But now, everything is different! People clean up the trash, and factories stop pouring dirty water. Trees along the river make the air fresh. The noise is gone, and the water is clear. I swim happily with friends every day.
Thank you, kind protectors—you gave me back a beautiful home!
Changes in My River Home
I am a small fish living in a river. A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic bags and bottles were everywhere, and I often got stuck in them. Dirty water from factories made the river smelly and dark. Gray smoke filled the air above, and noisy machines by the river scared me a lot. I felt sad and could hardly breathe.
But now, everything is different! People clean up the trash, and factories stop pouring dirty water. Trees along the river make the air fresh. The noise is gone, and the water is clear. I swim happily with friends every day.
Thank you, kind protectors—you gave me back a beautiful home!
解析
【分析】
本题要求以小鱼的身份，结合表格中河流过去与现在的环境、自身感受，描写河流的变化并感谢人类。解题思路：1. 确定第一人称视角（小鱼）；2. 梳理表格核心信息：过去的污染状况（塑料垃圾、脏水、黑烟、噪音）、感受（sad, tired），现在的治理成果（无垃圾、清水、新鲜空气、安静）、感受（happy, free）；3. 适当补充细节（如被塑料卡住、自由游动），控制词数在80左右；4. 结尾表达对人类的感谢，紧扣主题。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 开头点明身份：I am a small fish living in a river.
2. 描述过去的污染情况：结合表格，写塑料垃圾、脏水、黑烟、噪音，以及自身感受，如“A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic waste was everywhere, dirty water made it smelly and dark, gray smoke and noisy machines were around. I felt sad and tired.”
3. 描述现在的变化：对应表格，写治理后的环境和自身感受，如“Now, there’s no garbage, the water is clear and fresh, air is clean, and it’s quiet. I feel happy and free.”
4. 结尾感谢人类：“Thank you for making my home beautiful!”
注意调整语句流畅，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
Changes in My River Home
I am a small fish living in a river. A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic bags and bottles were everywhere, and I often got stuck in them. Dirty water from factories made the river smelly and dark. Gray smoke filled the air above, and noisy machines by the river scared me a lot. I felt sad and could hardly breathe.
But now, everything is different! People clean up the trash, and factories stop pouring dirty water. Trees along the river make the air fresh. The noise is gone, and the water is clear. I swim happily with friends every day.
Thank you, kind protectors—you gave me back a beautiful home!
【知识点】
英语书面表达；环境保护话题写作
【点评】
范文以小鱼的第一人称视角，紧扣表格信息，生动展现了河流从污染到治理后的变化，情感真挚自然，符合题目要求，词数合适，语句流畅，是一篇优秀的书面表达范例。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以小鱼的身份，结合表格中河流过去与现在的环境、自身感受，描写河流的变化并感谢人类。解题思路：1. 确定第一人称视角（小鱼）；2. 梳理表格核心信息：过去的污染状况（塑料垃圾、脏水、黑烟、噪音）、感受（sad, tired），现在的治理成果（无垃圾、清水、新鲜空气、安静）、感受（happy, free）；3. 适当补充细节（如被塑料卡住、自由游动），控制词数在80左右；4. 结尾表达对人类的感谢，紧扣主题。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 开头点明身份：I am a small fish living in a river.
2. 描述过去的污染情况：结合表格，写塑料垃圾、脏水、黑烟、噪音，以及自身感受，如“A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic waste was everywhere, dirty water made it smelly and dark, gray smoke and noisy machines were around. I felt sad and tired.”
3. 描述现在的变化：对应表格，写治理后的环境和自身感受，如“Now, there’s no garbage, the water is clear and fresh, air is clean, and it’s quiet. I feel happy and free.”
4. 结尾感谢人类：“Thank you for making my home beautiful!”
注意调整语句流畅，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】
Changes in My River Home
I am a small fish living in a river. A few years ago, my home was terrible. Plastic bags and bottles were everywhere, and I often got stuck in them. Dirty water from factories made the river smelly and dark. Gray smoke filled the air above, and noisy machines by the river scared me a lot. I felt sad and could hardly breathe.
But now, everything is different! People clean up the trash, and factories stop pouring dirty water. Trees along the river make the air fresh. The noise is gone, and the water is clear. I swim happily with friends every day.
Thank you, kind protectors—you gave me back a beautiful home!
【知识点】
英语书面表达；环境保护话题写作
【点评】
范文以小鱼的第一人称视角，紧扣表格信息，生动展现了河流从污染到治理后的变化，情感真挚自然，符合题目要求，词数合适，语句流畅，是一篇优秀的书面表达范例。
【难度系数】
0.6
