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七、书面表达。
南通每年都举行风筝节。为进一步了解传统手工文化，你查阅了大量资料，对风筝有了深刻的了解。请你根据下面图示内容介绍风筝。
南通每年都举行风筝节。为进一步了解传统手工文化，你查阅了大量资料，对风筝有了深刻的了解。请你根据下面图示内容介绍风筝。
答案
One possible version:
Kites have a history of thousands of years. Weifang in Shandong is the home of kites. Every year Weifang International Kite Festival takes place here. Visitors from all over the world come to see different kinds of kites.
Kites are in different shapes, such as birds, butterflies and flowers. And some are made of silk, some are made of paper, and others are made of cloth. They are beautiful. Flying kites is suitable for the old and the young. It is great fun. It not only makes people happy but also keeps them healthy.
Kites have a history of thousands of years. Weifang in Shandong is the home of kites. Every year Weifang International Kite Festival takes place here. Visitors from all over the world come to see different kinds of kites.
Kites are in different shapes, such as birds, butterflies and flowers. And some are made of silk, some are made of paper, and others are made of cloth. They are beautiful. Flying kites is suitable for the old and the young. It is great fun. It not only makes people happy but also keeps them healthy.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作核心是介绍风筝，思维导图已经给出了清晰的思考方向：where对应风筝相关的地点、风筝节举办地的内容，when对应风筝的发展历史、风筝节举办时间的内容，what对应风筝的外形、材质等属性内容，最后的省略号可以补充放风筝的受众、好处等延伸内容。接下来我们可以按照总起-介绍相关背景-介绍风筝本身-补充延伸益处的逻辑搭建文章框架，把各个维度的要点自然串联，同时贴合题目里提到的传统手工文化的主题，保证内容完整、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇总起：从when的维度切入，点明风筝拥有数千年的悠久历史，引出写作主题。
2. 背景介绍：从where的维度切入，介绍风筝之乡山东潍坊，以及每年举办潍坊国际风筝节、吸引全球游客的相关信息，补充风筝节的相关内容。
3. 事物属性介绍：从what的维度切入，介绍风筝丰富多样的外形，以及丝绸、纸张、布料等不同的制作材料，展现传统手工艺品的特点。
4. 延伸补充：对应思维导图的省略部分，介绍放风筝老少皆宜，不仅充满乐趣，还能愉悦身心、强身健体，升华内容，完整收尾。
最后通读全文，检查语法错误，确认所有提示维度都覆盖，逻辑连贯符合介绍类说明文的要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Kites have a history of thousands of years. Weifang in Shandong is the home of kites. Every year Weifang International Kite Festival takes place here. Visitors from all over the world come to see different kinds of kites.
Kites are in different shapes, such as birds, butterflies and flowers. And some are made of silk, some are made of paper, and others are made of cloth. They are beautiful. Flying kites is suitable for the old and the young. It is great fun. It not only makes people happy but also keeps them healthy.
【知识点】
说明文写作，常用短语搭配，传统民俗表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全紧扣思维导图给出的思考维度展开，逻辑层层递进，内容完整覆盖了历史、地点活动、风筝属性、活动益处多个要点，灵活使用了be made of、not only...but also等常用短语和并列结构，语言流畅自然，既完成了介绍风筝的写作任务，也体现了中国传统风筝文化的特色，符合题目的要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道书面表达题，先明确写作核心是介绍风筝，思维导图已经给出了清晰的思考方向：where对应风筝相关的地点、风筝节举办地的内容，when对应风筝的发展历史、风筝节举办时间的内容，what对应风筝的外形、材质等属性内容，最后的省略号可以补充放风筝的受众、好处等延伸内容。接下来我们可以按照总起-介绍相关背景-介绍风筝本身-补充延伸益处的逻辑搭建文章框架，把各个维度的要点自然串联，同时贴合题目里提到的传统手工文化的主题，保证内容完整、语句通顺即可。
【解析】
1. 开篇总起：从when的维度切入，点明风筝拥有数千年的悠久历史，引出写作主题。
2. 背景介绍：从where的维度切入，介绍风筝之乡山东潍坊，以及每年举办潍坊国际风筝节、吸引全球游客的相关信息，补充风筝节的相关内容。
3. 事物属性介绍：从what的维度切入，介绍风筝丰富多样的外形，以及丝绸、纸张、布料等不同的制作材料，展现传统手工艺品的特点。
4. 延伸补充：对应思维导图的省略部分，介绍放风筝老少皆宜，不仅充满乐趣，还能愉悦身心、强身健体，升华内容，完整收尾。
最后通读全文，检查语法错误，确认所有提示维度都覆盖，逻辑连贯符合介绍类说明文的要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Kites have a history of thousands of years. Weifang in Shandong is the home of kites. Every year Weifang International Kite Festival takes place here. Visitors from all over the world come to see different kinds of kites.
Kites are in different shapes, such as birds, butterflies and flowers. And some are made of silk, some are made of paper, and others are made of cloth. They are beautiful. Flying kites is suitable for the old and the young. It is great fun. It not only makes people happy but also keeps them healthy.
【知识点】
说明文写作，常用短语搭配，传统民俗表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全紧扣思维导图给出的思考维度展开，逻辑层层递进，内容完整覆盖了历史、地点活动、风筝属性、活动益处多个要点，灵活使用了be made of、not only...but also等常用短语和并列结构，语言流畅自然，既完成了介绍风筝的写作任务，也体现了中国传统风筝文化的特色，符合题目的要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
