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B. 书面表达
假如你是Lucy，昨天下午你所居住的地方遭遇了一场暴风雨。请根据以下思维导图内容提示，给你的好友Lily写一封电子邮件，向她描述暴风雨来临时你的家人都在干什么，以及暴风雨带来的影响。
注意：
(1)可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息。
(2)语句连贯，词数80左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
Yours,
Lucy
假如你是Lucy，昨天下午你所居住的地方遭遇了一场暴风雨。请根据以下思维导图内容提示，给你的好友Lily写一封电子邮件，向她描述暴风雨来临时你的家人都在干什么，以及暴风雨带来的影响。
注意：
(1)可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息。
(2)语句连贯，词数80左右。开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
Yours,
Lucy
答案
参考范文：
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
At half past six yesterday afternoon, the rainstorm came. It felt like midnight. When the rainstorm hit, my family were doing different things. My father was looking through the newspaper in the living room. My mother was cooking dinner in the kitchen. My sister was reading a storybook while I was doing my English homework online. Outside, thunder rolled across the sky. Then it started to pour. The wind was so strong that trees were blown down. After the rainstorm, our neighbours helped each other. The rainstorm was so strong that it broke many things apart, but it brought families and neighbours closer than before.
Yours,
Lucy
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
At half past six yesterday afternoon, the rainstorm came. It felt like midnight. When the rainstorm hit, my family were doing different things. My father was looking through the newspaper in the living room. My mother was cooking dinner in the kitchen. My sister was reading a storybook while I was doing my English homework online. Outside, thunder rolled across the sky. Then it started to pour. The wind was so strong that trees were blown down. After the rainstorm, our neighbours helped each other. The rainstorm was so strong that it broke many things apart, but it brought families and neighbours closer than before.
Yours,
Lucy
解析
【分析】
本题要求以Lucy的身份给好友Lily写电子邮件，描述昨天下午暴风雨来临时家人的活动及暴风雨的影响。解题思路：1. 确定时态：描述过去某一时刻正在进行的动作需用过去进行时；2. 紧扣思维导图要点：明确暴风雨发生时间，分别梳理爸爸、妈妈、妹妹和“我”的活动，再补充暴风雨的破坏情况与人们的行动；3. 适当拓展细节，保证语句连贯，符合词数要求，利用已给开头结尾补充中间内容即可。
【解析】
先承接开头点明暴风雨到来的时间，接着用过去进行时依次描述家人的活动：爸爸在客厅看报纸，妈妈在厨房做饭，妹妹在读故事书，“我”在做英语作业；然后描述暴风雨的影响：电闪雷鸣、大雨倾盆，树木被吹倒，多处物品被破坏；最后补充暴风雨后人们的行动，比如邻居互相帮助，让内容更完整，体现情感升华。
【答案】
参考范文：
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
At half past six yesterday afternoon, the rainstorm came. It felt like midnight. When the rainstorm hit, my family were doing different things. My father was looking through the newspaper in the living room. My mother was cooking dinner in the kitchen. My sister was reading a storybook while I was doing my English homework online. Outside, thunder rolled across the sky. Then it started to pour. The wind was so strong that trees were blown down. After the rainstorm, our neighbours helped each other. The rainstorm was so strong that it broke many things apart, but it brought families and neighbours closer than before.
Yours,
Lucy
【知识点】
过去进行时；电子邮件写作；书面表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，准确运用过去进行时描述场景，清晰呈现了暴风雨的破坏与人们的行动，语句连贯，内容充实，适当拓展细节，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题要求以Lucy的身份给好友Lily写电子邮件，描述昨天下午暴风雨来临时家人的活动及暴风雨的影响。解题思路：1. 确定时态：描述过去某一时刻正在进行的动作需用过去进行时；2. 紧扣思维导图要点：明确暴风雨发生时间，分别梳理爸爸、妈妈、妹妹和“我”的活动，再补充暴风雨的破坏情况与人们的行动；3. 适当拓展细节，保证语句连贯，符合词数要求，利用已给开头结尾补充中间内容即可。
【解析】
先承接开头点明暴风雨到来的时间，接着用过去进行时依次描述家人的活动：爸爸在客厅看报纸，妈妈在厨房做饭，妹妹在读故事书，“我”在做英语作业；然后描述暴风雨的影响：电闪雷鸣、大雨倾盆，树木被吹倒，多处物品被破坏；最后补充暴风雨后人们的行动，比如邻居互相帮助，让内容更完整，体现情感升华。
【答案】
参考范文：
Dear Lily,
Let me tell you something about the rainstorm yesterday afternoon.
At half past six yesterday afternoon, the rainstorm came. It felt like midnight. When the rainstorm hit, my family were doing different things. My father was looking through the newspaper in the living room. My mother was cooking dinner in the kitchen. My sister was reading a storybook while I was doing my English homework online. Outside, thunder rolled across the sky. Then it started to pour. The wind was so strong that trees were blown down. After the rainstorm, our neighbours helped each other. The rainstorm was so strong that it broke many things apart, but it brought families and neighbours closer than before.
Yours,
Lucy
【知识点】
过去进行时；电子邮件写作；书面表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，准确运用过去进行时描述场景，清晰呈现了暴风雨的破坏与人们的行动，语句连贯，内容充实，适当拓展细节，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达。
【难度系数】
0.6
