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假设你是李华,你的英国笔友 Tom 计划来中国旅行。他了解到自然灾害偶有发生,特询问相关信息。请你给他回复一封邮件。
注意:1.涵盖所有要点,语句通顺,意思连贯,书写规范。2.词数 80左右。邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。3.文中不得提及有关个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip. Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是李华,你的英国笔友 Tom 计划来中国旅行。他了解到自然灾害偶有发生,特询问相关信息。请你给他回复一封邮件。
注意:1.涵盖所有要点,语句通顺,意思连贯,书写规范。2.词数 80左右。邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。3.文中不得提及有关个人身份的任何信息,如校名、人名等。
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
If an earthquake hits, don't run around in a hurry. Stay calm first. If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby.
Never walk through deep water, because it's easy to fall down or get into danger. Besides, remember simple emergency numbers and listen to local news or warnings carefully.
Following these easy rules will help you stay safe all the time during your trip to China.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip. Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁：本文是一篇应用文，是一封邮件。②时态：以一般现在时为主。③提示：根据所给邮件内容回复，注意分段、上下文之间的逻辑连贯、大小写以及标点符号的正确运用。
[写作步骤]
第一步，问候并点明写邮件目的；第二步，分场景具体介绍安全措施；第三步，表达祝愿并欢迎对方来到中国。
[词句积累]
①in a hurry 匆匆忙忙地 ②keep away from 远离 ③right away 立刻
④If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. (if引导条件状语从句)
⑤When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. (when引导时间状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
If an earthquake hits, don't run around in a hurry. Stay calm first. If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. Never walk through deep water, because it's easy to fall down or get into danger. Besides, remember simple emergency numbers and listen to local news or warnings carefully. Following these easy rules will help you stay safe all the time during your trip to China.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip.
Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
[审题步骤]
①体裁：本文是一篇应用文，是一封邮件。②时态：以一般现在时为主。③提示：根据所给邮件内容回复，注意分段、上下文之间的逻辑连贯、大小写以及标点符号的正确运用。
[写作步骤]
第一步，问候并点明写邮件目的；第二步，分场景具体介绍安全措施；第三步，表达祝愿并欢迎对方来到中国。
[词句积累]
①in a hurry 匆匆忙忙地 ②keep away from 远离 ③right away 立刻
④If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. (if引导条件状语从句)
⑤When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. (when引导时间状语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
If an earthquake hits, don't run around in a hurry. Stay calm first. If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. Never walk through deep water, because it's easy to fall down or get into danger. Besides, remember simple emergency numbers and listen to local news or warnings carefully. Following these easy rules will help you stay safe all the time during your trip to China.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip.
Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先先完成审题：明确体裁是写给笔友的英文邮件，核心写作目的是向计划来中国旅行的Tom介绍应对常见自然灾害的安全注意事项，要求词数80左右，不能出现个人隐私信息，开头结尾已经给出无需额外创作。接下来梳理写作逻辑：先选取国内旅行中可能遇到的典型自然灾害场景，分别给出对应的实用应对方法，最后补充通用的安全提醒，保证内容连贯、语气贴合好友交流的轻松感，多用学过的基础句式比如if条件状语从句、when时间状语从句，避免生僻词，控制内容不要冗余，符合字数要求即可。
【解析】
写作按照三步规范完成：
1. 承接给定开头，首先介绍地震灾害的应对方法：说明遇到地震不要慌乱乱跑，先保持冷静，若无法快速撤离到室外，就躲在结实的桌下，远离窗户和容易掉落的重物，避免受伤。
2. 接着介绍洪涝灾害的应对方法：如果遇到洪水，立刻向附近的高地、高层建筑转移，不要蹚过深水，防止摔倒遇险。
3. 最后补充通用安全提示：牢记常用紧急求助号码，留意当地发布的预警通知，说明遵守这些规则就能全程保障旅途安全，自然衔接题目给出的结尾内容。全程使用一般现在时，保证语句通顺，不出现校名、无关人名等违规信息，词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
If an earthquake hits, don't run around in a hurry. Stay calm first. If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. Never walk through deep water, because it's easy to fall down or get into danger. Besides, remember simple emergency numbers and listen to local news or warnings carefully. Following these easy rules will help you stay safe all the time during your trip to China.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip. Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，安全场景表达，状语从句运用
【点评】
本题属于应用文体写作，结合旅行安全的实用场景命题，既考察学生对英文邮件格式的掌握情况，也考察学生用所学英语知识传递实用信息的能力，写作要点清晰，学生只要紧扣自然灾害应对的核心内容，逻辑连贯即可拿到不错的分数，同时也能帮助学生掌握实用的防灾相关英文表达。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先先完成审题：明确体裁是写给笔友的英文邮件，核心写作目的是向计划来中国旅行的Tom介绍应对常见自然灾害的安全注意事项，要求词数80左右，不能出现个人隐私信息，开头结尾已经给出无需额外创作。接下来梳理写作逻辑：先选取国内旅行中可能遇到的典型自然灾害场景，分别给出对应的实用应对方法，最后补充通用的安全提醒，保证内容连贯、语气贴合好友交流的轻松感，多用学过的基础句式比如if条件状语从句、when时间状语从句，避免生僻词，控制内容不要冗余，符合字数要求即可。
【解析】
写作按照三步规范完成：
1. 承接给定开头，首先介绍地震灾害的应对方法：说明遇到地震不要慌乱乱跑，先保持冷静，若无法快速撤离到室外，就躲在结实的桌下，远离窗户和容易掉落的重物，避免受伤。
2. 接着介绍洪涝灾害的应对方法：如果遇到洪水，立刻向附近的高地、高层建筑转移，不要蹚过深水，防止摔倒遇险。
3. 最后补充通用安全提示：牢记常用紧急求助号码，留意当地发布的预警通知，说明遵守这些规则就能全程保障旅途安全，自然衔接题目给出的结尾内容。全程使用一般现在时，保证语句通顺，不出现校名、无关人名等违规信息，词数符合要求。
【答案】
Dear Tom,
I'm glad to share some safety tips with you.
If an earthquake hits, don't run around in a hurry. Stay calm first. If you can't go out quickly, stay under a strong table or desk, and keep away from windows or heavy things—they might fall and hurt you. When there's a flood, move to higher places right away, like hills or tall buildings nearby. Never walk through deep water, because it's easy to fall down or get into danger. Besides, remember simple emergency numbers and listen to local news or warnings carefully. Following these easy rules will help you stay safe all the time during your trip to China.
I'm sure these tips will help you have a safe trip. Welcome to China!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，安全场景表达，状语从句运用
【点评】
本题属于应用文体写作，结合旅行安全的实用场景命题，既考察学生对英文邮件格式的掌握情况，也考察学生用所学英语知识传递实用信息的能力，写作要点清晰，学生只要紧扣自然灾害应对的核心内容，逻辑连贯即可拿到不错的分数，同时也能帮助学生掌握实用的防灾相关英文表达。
【难度系数】
0.6
