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假设你是 Millie，你搬入了新家，请根据下列提示，向你的笔友 Sandy 介绍你的新家。
【要求】1. 词数 80 左右；短文中不得出现真实的人名及校名。
2. 短文应包括表格内所有内容要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home.
Yours,
Millie
【要求】1. 词数 80 左右；短文中不得出现真实的人名及校名。
2. 短文应包括表格内所有内容要点，可适当发挥，使短文连贯通顺。
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home.
My new home is near the sea. It has two floors. My family members can live together. Behind the house, there is a big football field. I can enjoy playing football with my friends there. And I also like walking on the beach with my parents after supper every day.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
Yours,
Millie
答案
One possible version:
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home. My new home is near the sea. It has two floors. My family members can live together. Behind the house, there is a big football field. I can enjoy playing football with my friends there. And I also like walking on the beach with my parents after supper every day.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
Yours,
Millie
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home. My new home is near the sea. It has two floors. My family members can live together. Behind the house, there is a big football field. I can enjoy playing football with my friends there. And I also like walking on the beach with my parents after supper every day.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
Yours,
Millie
解析
【分析】
首先拿到题目先明确写作要求：身份是Millie，收信人为笔友Sandy，需要完整覆盖表格给出的全部信息点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实人名校名。解题思路可以按三步走：1. 先把所有必写的核心要点全部标记出来，分别是：新家位置在海边、共2层楼、总共有7个房间、包含大客厅/两间卧室/大书房、房屋周边有足球场、自己最喜欢的活动是踢足球和在海滩散步，确保后续写作不会漏点。2. 搭建行文逻辑：开篇承接题干给出的开头，先介绍新家的整体位置和楼层情况，接着自然过渡到周边的足球场，引出踢足球的爱好；之后介绍房屋内部的房间布局，把7个房间的构成、提到的特色房间说明清楚；最后点出在海边散步的爱好，收尾表达对新家的喜爱，适当补充少量合理细节让内容不生硬。3. 写完后通读检查，确认所有要点都覆盖，没有违规信息，语句通顺符合书信的友好交流语气。
【解析】
第一步：梳理核心要点，逐一对应，避免遗漏：
① 位置：near the sea ② 楼层数：2 floors ③ 总房间数：7 rooms ④ 特色房间：a big living room; two nice bedrooms; a big study ⑤ 周边配套：a football field ⑥ 喜爱的活动：playing football, walking on the beach
第二步：搭建三段式行文结构：
1. 首段承接给定开头，介绍新家的位置、楼层，引出周边的足球场，说明可以和朋友在这里踢足球，顺带提到饭后和家人在海滩散步的日常，自然点出两个喜爱的活动。
2. 第二段介绍房间分布：说明7个房间的布局，补充厨房、餐厅、浴室让7个房间的设定逻辑通顺，对应提到的大客厅、两间卧室、大书房的位置。
3. 尾段补充自己在新家的日常，表达对新家的喜爱，让内容更饱满。
第三步：调整语句衔接，控制词数，检查没有出现真实人名校名，符合书信写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home. My new home is near the sea. It has two floors. My family members can live together. Behind the house, there is a big football field. I can enjoy playing football with my friends there. And I also like walking on the beach with my parents after supper every day.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
Yours,
Millie
【知识点】
英文书信写作
信息要点整合
日常场景表达
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段基础的应用文写作题，所有核心信息都已在表格中给出，难度较低。学生只需要注意不要遗漏任意一个给定要点，用通顺的简单句串联内容，适当补充少量符合生活逻辑的细节，就能写出流畅自然的短文，避免生硬翻译表格信息即可拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到题目先明确写作要求：身份是Millie，收信人为笔友Sandy，需要完整覆盖表格给出的全部信息点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实人名校名。解题思路可以按三步走：1. 先把所有必写的核心要点全部标记出来，分别是：新家位置在海边、共2层楼、总共有7个房间、包含大客厅/两间卧室/大书房、房屋周边有足球场、自己最喜欢的活动是踢足球和在海滩散步，确保后续写作不会漏点。2. 搭建行文逻辑：开篇承接题干给出的开头，先介绍新家的整体位置和楼层情况，接着自然过渡到周边的足球场，引出踢足球的爱好；之后介绍房屋内部的房间布局，把7个房间的构成、提到的特色房间说明清楚；最后点出在海边散步的爱好，收尾表达对新家的喜爱，适当补充少量合理细节让内容不生硬。3. 写完后通读检查，确认所有要点都覆盖，没有违规信息，语句通顺符合书信的友好交流语气。
【解析】
第一步：梳理核心要点，逐一对应，避免遗漏：
① 位置：near the sea ② 楼层数：2 floors ③ 总房间数：7 rooms ④ 特色房间：a big living room; two nice bedrooms; a big study ⑤ 周边配套：a football field ⑥ 喜爱的活动：playing football, walking on the beach
第二步：搭建三段式行文结构：
1. 首段承接给定开头，介绍新家的位置、楼层，引出周边的足球场，说明可以和朋友在这里踢足球，顺带提到饭后和家人在海滩散步的日常，自然点出两个喜爱的活动。
2. 第二段介绍房间分布：说明7个房间的布局，补充厨房、餐厅、浴室让7个房间的设定逻辑通顺，对应提到的大客厅、两间卧室、大书房的位置。
3. 尾段补充自己在新家的日常，表达对新家的喜爱，让内容更饱满。
第三步：调整语句衔接，控制词数，检查没有出现真实人名校名，符合书信写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear Sandy,
I'm happy to tell you something about my new home. My new home is near the sea. It has two floors. My family members can live together. Behind the house, there is a big football field. I can enjoy playing football with my friends there. And I also like walking on the beach with my parents after supper every day.
There are 7 rooms. On the ground floor, there is a kitchen, a dining room and a big living room. On the first floor, there are two bedrooms, a bathroom and a big study.
My new home is very comfortable. After school, I do my homework in the study. I can invite my friends to have parties, watch films or play games together in the house. It is great fun! I love my new home.
Yours,
Millie
【知识点】
英文书信写作
信息要点整合
日常场景表达
【点评】
本题属于初中阶段基础的应用文写作题，所有核心信息都已在表格中给出，难度较低。学生只需要注意不要遗漏任意一个给定要点，用通顺的简单句串联内容，适当补充少量符合生活逻辑的细节，就能写出流畅自然的短文，避免生硬翻译表格信息即可拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
