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七、书面表达(满分 25 分)
假如你是李华,上周你们学校举办了一场为贫困学生筹钱的爱心义卖(Charity Sale)活动,请你给加拿大的笔友 Alex 写一封邮件分享一下这次活动的过程和感受。词数 80 左右。
注意事项：
1. 必须包含所有提示信息,可适当发挥,开头、结尾已给出,不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚,表达通顺,行文连贯,书写规范。
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是李华,上周你们学校举办了一场为贫困学生筹钱的爱心义卖(Charity Sale)活动,请你给加拿大的笔友 Alex 写一封邮件分享一下这次活动的过程和感受。词数 80 左右。
注意事项：
1. 必须包含所有提示信息,可适当发挥,开头、结尾已给出,不计入总词数；
2. 意思清楚,表达通顺,行文连贯,书写规范。
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
七、书面表达
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. We also made a poster. Everyone was happy to help. In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. We also made a poster. Everyone was happy to help. In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
这是一篇给笔友写的邮件，核心是分享学校的爱心义卖活动。解题思路如下：
1. 先承接开头的“贫困学生”，自然引出举办义卖的目的，同时点明思维导图里的时间（last week）和地点（school playground），让内容衔接合理。
2. 接着按照活动的先后顺序展开：先写老师演讲（give a speech）做动员，然后写收集旧物品（collect old things），可以补充具体的物品比如旧书、模型等让内容更真实，再提到制作海报（make a poster）宣传活动，还可以适当补充活动现场的情况，比如师生来购买的细节，让内容更丰富。
3. 最后要写出活动的成果（筹到钱）和自己的感受（feelings），比如觉得活动有意义，懂得帮助他人和分享的重要性，呼应开头帮助贫困学生的主题。
4. 全程要注意用一般过去时，因为活动是上周发生的，同时控制词数，语言要通顺连贯，符合邮件的语气。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头：用“So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground.”点明活动的目的、时间和地点，承接上文的贫困学生话题。
2. 展开活动流程：
先写活动开场：“Our teacher gave a speech”，完成提示的活动内容；
接着写收集旧物：“then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane.”补充具体物品，让内容更具体；
再写制作海报：“We also made a poster.”覆盖提示的活动，同时补充“Many students and teachers came to buy things.”描述现场；
3. 收尾写成果和感受：“In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.”完成感受部分的内容，升华主题。
4. 整体语言符合邮件的非正式但礼貌的语气，时态统一用一般过去时，符合活动发生在过去的语境。
【答案】
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. We also made a poster. Everyone was happy to help. In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作、活动类话题写作、一般过去时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖了思维导图中的所有提示信息，内容衔接自然，按照活动的先后顺序展开叙述，细节丰富真实，时态运用准确，语言表达流畅，清晰传达了活动的过程和个人的真切感受，符合书面表达的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇给笔友写的邮件，核心是分享学校的爱心义卖活动。解题思路如下：
1. 先承接开头的“贫困学生”，自然引出举办义卖的目的，同时点明思维导图里的时间（last week）和地点（school playground），让内容衔接合理。
2. 接着按照活动的先后顺序展开：先写老师演讲（give a speech）做动员，然后写收集旧物品（collect old things），可以补充具体的物品比如旧书、模型等让内容更真实，再提到制作海报（make a poster）宣传活动，还可以适当补充活动现场的情况，比如师生来购买的细节，让内容更丰富。
3. 最后要写出活动的成果（筹到钱）和自己的感受（feelings），比如觉得活动有意义，懂得帮助他人和分享的重要性，呼应开头帮助贫困学生的主题。
4. 全程要注意用一般过去时，因为活动是上周发生的，同时控制词数，语言要通顺连贯，符合邮件的语气。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头：用“So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground.”点明活动的目的、时间和地点，承接上文的贫困学生话题。
2. 展开活动流程：
先写活动开场：“Our teacher gave a speech”，完成提示的活动内容；
接着写收集旧物：“then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane.”补充具体物品，让内容更具体；
再写制作海报：“We also made a poster.”覆盖提示的活动，同时补充“Many students and teachers came to buy things.”描述现场；
3. 收尾写成果和感受：“In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.”完成感受部分的内容，升华主题。
4. 整体语言符合邮件的非正式但礼貌的语气，时态统一用一般过去时，符合活动发生在过去的语境。
【答案】
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we classmates found that there were some poor students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handcrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. We also made a poster. Everyone was happy to help. In the end, we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of sharing.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英语邮件写作、活动类话题写作、一般过去时运用
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖了思维导图中的所有提示信息，内容衔接自然，按照活动的先后顺序展开叙述，细节丰富真实，时态运用准确，语言表达流畅，清晰传达了活动的过程和个人的真切感受，符合书面表达的评分标准。
【难度系数】
0.7
