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七、书面表达。
假设你是李明,你们学校的英语广播站正举行主题为"Find Joy in Helping Others(助人为乐)"的征稿活动。请你根据以下思维导图的提示,用英文写一篇演讲稿。
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
假设你是李明,你们学校的英语广播站正举行主题为"Find Joy in Helping Others(助人为乐)"的征稿活动。请你根据以下思维导图的提示,用英文写一篇演讲稿。
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
答案
One possible version:
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道演讲稿写作题，首先要紧扣给出的思维导图的三个核心模块搭建文章结构，避免遗漏要点：第一步先写助人的意义，除了题干提示的“助人给人带来快乐”，还可以补充助人能让双方都获得正向感受、让世界更温暖美好，把意义部分补充完整；第二步写自己的助人经历，必须覆盖思维导图要求的时间地点、帮助过程、个人感受三个要素，选择贴近日常的真实小事来写，内容会更自然有说服力；第三步写呼吁部分，号召大家一起主动帮助他人，升华主题。全程要注意演讲稿的语气亲切口语化，符合校园广播站的投稿场景，不要使用过于复杂的生僻句式。
【解析】
1. 完成第一部分“助人的意义”：承接给定的开头，先点明帮助他人既可以给被帮助的人带去慰藉，也能让自己收获温暖和自豪感，同时还能让整个世界变得更美好，把意义部分的逻辑梳理通顺。
2. 完成第二部分“个人助人经历”：选取上周在街上遇到迷路老人的日常事例，先交代事件发生的时间、地点，再描述帮助的过程：主动询问老人的住址，一路步行把他送回家，最后写老人向自己道谢，自己内心收获了满满的幸福感，完全覆盖思维导图要求的三个细节点。
3. 完成第三部分“呼吁大家助人”：收尾发出倡议，号召所有人都尽己所能帮助身边有需要的人，最终让我们的世界充满爱和欢乐，完成整篇演讲稿的收尾。
完整参考范文如下：
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作
提示性作文谋篇
记叙文要素运用
【点评】
本篇习作严格贴合思维导图给出的全部写作要点，结构清晰分层明确，三个段落分别对应助人意义、个人经历、倡议呼吁三个模块，叙事内容真实贴近学生日常，语言简洁流畅，符合校园广播演讲稿的口语化表达要求，主题突出情感真挚，没有要点遗漏。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道演讲稿写作题，首先要紧扣给出的思维导图的三个核心模块搭建文章结构，避免遗漏要点：第一步先写助人的意义，除了题干提示的“助人给人带来快乐”，还可以补充助人能让双方都获得正向感受、让世界更温暖美好，把意义部分补充完整；第二步写自己的助人经历，必须覆盖思维导图要求的时间地点、帮助过程、个人感受三个要素，选择贴近日常的真实小事来写，内容会更自然有说服力；第三步写呼吁部分，号召大家一起主动帮助他人，升华主题。全程要注意演讲稿的语气亲切口语化，符合校园广播站的投稿场景，不要使用过于复杂的生僻句式。
【解析】
1. 完成第一部分“助人的意义”：承接给定的开头，先点明帮助他人既可以给被帮助的人带去慰藉，也能让自己收获温暖和自豪感，同时还能让整个世界变得更美好，把意义部分的逻辑梳理通顺。
2. 完成第二部分“个人助人经历”：选取上周在街上遇到迷路老人的日常事例，先交代事件发生的时间、地点，再描述帮助的过程：主动询问老人的住址，一路步行把他送回家，最后写老人向自己道谢，自己内心收获了满满的幸福感，完全覆盖思维导图要求的三个细节点。
3. 完成第三部分“呼吁大家助人”：收尾发出倡议，号召所有人都尽己所能帮助身边有需要的人，最终让我们的世界充满爱和欢乐，完成整篇演讲稿的收尾。
完整参考范文如下：
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, everyone. I am Li Ming. Today, I'd like to make a speech about helping others.
Helping others brings happiness to the people we help and to ourselves. When we help someone, we feel warm and proud. It makes the world a better place too.
Last week, I saw an old man get lost on the street. I asked him where he lived and walked him home. He smiled and thanked me. I felt very happy.
Let's try our best to help others! It will make our world full of love and joy.
【知识点】
英语演讲稿写作
提示性作文谋篇
记叙文要素运用
【点评】
本篇习作严格贴合思维导图给出的全部写作要点，结构清晰分层明确，三个段落分别对应助人意义、个人经历、倡议呼吁三个模块，叙事内容真实贴近学生日常，语言简洁流畅，符合校园广播演讲稿的口语化表达要求，主题突出情感真挚，没有要点遗漏。
【难度系数】
0.7
